A UFO at School

Player Rating4.10/8

"#279 overall, #29 for 2015"
based on 143 ratings since 08/18/2015
played 1,837 times (finished 150)

Story Difficulty1/8

"no possible way to lose"

Play Length4/8

"A well spent lunch break"

Maturity Level2/8

"choking hazard for children under 4"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 6. To compare to the movie rating system, this would be G.

There's a UFO at the school!

This story was written as a an attempt to try out a different way to write storygames. I tried to write the entire story from start to finish, then insert choices only after writing the story (see more here). The story is intentionally short: this is supposed to be a short story of the type you might read in a magazine: no matter which path you take, it should end up with a story about 800-1,200 words long. For those interested, there are eight different endings.

Player Comments

So, this was pretty good.

It was of course, a bit random, but it probably wouldn't be easy to write a super realistic story about a UFO showing up at school.

I enjoyed the writing style, and the characters were pretty well developed (which is impressive since the storygame had a short length.)

You managed to provide an interesting plot, a setting, characters with personality, and a main problem in just 800-1200 words. Again, very impressive.

The length may have been short in terms of words, but I was glad there were at least a few choices and a couple paragraphs on every page.

Some of the situations seemed very, uh, convenient and unrealistic. Sort of like they just happened for plot convenience and weren't really thought of very carefully before being written.

I did notice a few errors in tense, grammar, and spelling, but not anything too major. All in all, a good read if you're looking for something short and simple.

4/8.
-- MinnieKing on 7/13/2017 4:02:52 PM with a score of 0
Not necessarily a bad story, but your writing could be improved a bit more, as the reading didn't really transition smoothly with what the switching between tenses and redundancy. Overall it was okay for a fairly short story though. 4/8
-- FazzTheMan on 10/27/2015 11:40:30 PM with a score of 0
Another good story, enjoyable teen fiction and I like the idea of inserting choices into a story which makes each page read a little like a goosebumps chapter (though for some reason R.L. Stine would always end them on a cliff-hanger). The story length isn't very long but that's ok, it's a pretty classic style CYOA that will give people 5-10 minutes worth of good story reading :)
-- Will11 on 8/18/2015 7:24:35 PM with a score of 0
it was ok but, ikea meat balls with source are better and they have cheap stuff. COOL STORY BRO NEEDS MORE DRAGONS!!!!!!!!!!!!
-- MY COMMENT on 10/23/2017 12:38:58 AM with a score of 0
my ending is the best
-- corey on 10/23/2017 12:35:24 AM with a score of 0
very epic #swagalious
-- clautom on 10/23/2017 12:35:20 AM with a score of 0
I died!
-- Ravendash on 10/19/2017 10:44:05 AM with a score of 0
Honestly, out of the so-called "8" endings, is there one that is even a GOOD ending?
-- TestingJest on 9/22/2017 1:33:45 AM with a score of 0
Pretty good
-- xDERPYxCREEPERx on 9/18/2017 1:49:12 PM with a score of 0
Uh, welllllllllll
A bit random, and I wish there were more ways to survive, but overall a good write.
-- Chickdove on 5/15/2017 8:59:59 PM with a score of 0
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