A UFO at School

Player Rating4.11/8

"#301 overall, #35 for 2015"
based on 194 ratings since 08/18/2015
played 3,232 times (finished 227)

Story Difficulty1/8

"no possible way to lose"

Play Length4/8

"A well spent lunch break"

Maturity Level2/8

"choking hazard for children under 4"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 6. To compare to the movie rating system, this would be G.

There's a UFO at the school!

This story was written as a an attempt to try out a different way to write storygames. I tried to write the entire story from start to finish, then insert choices only after writing the story (see more here). The story is intentionally short: this is supposed to be a short story of the type you might read in a magazine: no matter which path you take, it should end up with a story about 800-1,200 words long. For those interested, there are eight different endings.

Player Comments

So, this was pretty good.

It was of course, a bit random, but it probably wouldn't be easy to write a super realistic story about a UFO showing up at school.

I enjoyed the writing style, and the characters were pretty well developed (which is impressive since the storygame had a short length.)

You managed to provide an interesting plot, a setting, characters with personality, and a main problem in just 800-1200 words. Again, very impressive.

The length may have been short in terms of words, but I was glad there were at least a few choices and a couple paragraphs on every page.

Some of the situations seemed very, uh, convenient and unrealistic. Sort of like they just happened for plot convenience and weren't really thought of very carefully before being written.

I did notice a few errors in tense, grammar, and spelling, but not anything too major. All in all, a good read if you're looking for something short and simple.

-- MinnieKing on 7/13/2017 4:02:52 PM with a score of 0
Not necessarily a bad story, but your writing could be improved a bit more, as the reading didn't really transition smoothly with what the switching between tenses and redundancy. Overall it was okay for a fairly short story though. 4/8
-- FazzTheMan on 10/27/2015 11:40:30 PM with a score of 0
Another good story, enjoyable teen fiction and I like the idea of inserting choices into a story which makes each page read a little like a goosebumps chapter (though for some reason R.L. Stine would always end them on a cliff-hanger). The story length isn't very long but that's ok, it's a pretty classic style CYOA that will give people 5-10 minutes worth of good story reading :)
-- Will11 on 8/18/2015 7:24:35 PM with a score of 0
So, the story was a bit short, and yes there is no possible way to lose. It’s kind of interesting— sort of a story that you wouldn’t want to stop reading but once it ends, it doesn’t leave you thinking about anything. I would recommend this story as a mind relaxer when you are feeling stressed. Overall, I quite liked this story and if you’re just looking for a easy and fun story, this is the right game.
-- StoryTurtle on 2/18/2019 12:23:34 AM with a score of 0
-- Szy on 11/3/2018 8:20:22 PM with a score of 0
Wonderful writing as always. Keep doing what you do best!
-- MusicalNerd7 on 6/6/2018 8:35:35 PM with a score of 0
(: Great writing! (:
-- HowdyHiHello on 3/30/2018 10:04:04 PM with a score of 0
I think I survived...

There is almost no way to win, as around every corner is a death by winning page.

Good story, fun to pass the time a little. I went though every possible ending, and on only one of them did I survive.

I thought this was a pretty interesting game, but there were some mistakes.
-- BunnyCatMouse99100 on 1/27/2018 6:34:50 PM with a score of 0
First, I liked your story, an short story with a bit of drama in the story.
Secondly, I felt that you can improve your story with more pages, choices and more drama added.
I am also recommending you to add for each ending page a reset game button for trying again.
Finally, I liked your story, but I felt that this story can't be short, you can add more of anything to a bigger story!
I am sure I would like it to read after you improve this.
Final rating: 4/8
-- TheGamerKing777 on 12/24/2017 2:26:10 PM with a score of 0
it was ok but, ikea meat balls with source are better and they have cheap stuff. COOL STORY BRO NEEDS MORE DRAGONS!!!!!!!!!!!!
-- MY COMMENT on 10/23/2017 12:38:58 AM with a score of 0
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