Among the Trees

Player Rating5.38/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 68 ratings since 12/03/2016
played 1,239 times (finished 98)

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length6/8

"It'll be a while, better grab a SnickersĀ®"

Maturity Level7/8

"anything goes"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 18. If this were a movie, it would probably be R.

Take control of Jacob, a young settler in New England in the late 17th Century. A tale of romance, horror and strange supernatural creatures awaits you in the odd and interesting woods that surround your home.

Well, this is just a short little romance-horror thing I made in three days to distract me from other projects. I hope you enjoy!

Player Comments

For being written in three days this was seriously impressive. Buuuut, we're all aware by now you can effortlessly crank out an above-site-standards story at inhumanly fast speeds, so I think I'm going to have to switch to the Steve Scale to rate these from now on.

Like always, it could benefit from a proofread (not anywhere near Prometheus levels of lazy, however), and the other trend with your stuff is the relative linearity. If you don't wind up at an instant game over, the plot here stays the same with only some cosmetic changes all the way till the end choices. Bad Steve.

As far as plot logic nitpicks go, I kept thinking Jacob should be having more of a reaction to Rose's...oddness, or what happened to his family. And I know I already mentioned this, but I was disappointed you couldn't at least attempt to kill the mother while protected from her. Also on that note, I was actually kind of disappointed being gullible as shit around her led to the 'good' ending. I figured she was making a transparent attempt to trick Jacob and went for it first to see the game over, then nope. That's apparently what you were supposed to do.

Also sort of amusing to me was that Jacob's father and the more puritanical beliefs basically turned out to be right--from the way he was written I'm sure that wasn't your intention, but there it is. The Devil is totally real and out to steal souls, witches exist, and frolicking in the woods leads to bad shit happening.

And I'll probably be in the minority here, but while I really liked Rose at the initial meetings and thought the whole growing friendship thing was actually really sweet, I ended the story not very sympathetic with her. She made a sacrifice, yeah, but I kind of felt it was on her to communicate certain things beforehand that would've avoided the need for fixing the situation in the first place.

I definitely don't consider riding off with her to live happily ever to be the optimal ending, considering what happened to the rest of his family just a short while before and how easily preventable it would have been if she'd been more up front.

One other minor complaint is that I feel that the family, or Meredith at least, could've been developed a little more. You usually don't make a point to establish a character as having a twin, and then not give the twin any scene time or purpose. At least give us an incest path or a chance to sacrifice her, jeez. (TBH I was expecting something to come of you giving her dress away. Hard to believe she never noticed, considering she probably owned like, two, and couldn't exactly go to a store to buy a new one. Oh, and if you choose to 'Do Nothing' instead of getting the dress, it just loops back around to offering Rose a piece of bread, just fyi.)

But any criticisms aside, this was a solid story and a great entry to the Love & Dating section. Way more interesting than anything L&D usually gets. But it's just...let's be honest here, that basically amounts to you winning the Special Olympics at this point. I'm waiting to see what you can do if you really push yourself. Setting your stuff against the typical CYS fare isn't much competition, and you could be aiming higher.
-- mizal on 12/4/2016 8:48:55 PM with a score of 0
I just wish it had been longer!
-- falconlover3 on 3/27/2017 6:22:55 PM with a score of 0
This was bad, other than the typos, the story was bad and so was the writing.
Cannot believe this is the work of the same author as Prophecy and the other good stories by him.
-- John Cury on 2/20/2017 7:03:42 AM with a score of 0
I mean, come on. The author clearly tries to imply that Christians are "superstitious" and "self-loathing". Such pure hatred!
-- The Ghost on 1/4/2017 8:55:45 AM with a score of 0
I love the Wooden Ring ending, but this story is so anti-Christian that I can't give it anything above a 2. Every other ending has some jab or another at Christianity. Disgusting!
-- The Ghost on 1/4/2017 8:49:30 AM with a score of 0
Got the Labour and duty ending first. I'm that sort of guy.
-- The Ghost on 1/4/2017 8:11:54 AM with a score of 0
Damn good, damn good.
-- corgi213 on 12/16/2016 5:39:34 PM with a score of 0
That was really religious, but I like that you like made it be good for Christians. It was amazing.
-- Orchid on 12/12/2016 4:55:56 PM with a score of 0
Finally got the good ending! This is a well written story with lots of varied endings, though the paths are a bit similar. Only a couple of typos but nothing too jarring. I really enjoyed this story.
-- BigRonn77 on 12/9/2016 10:05:14 AM with a score of 0
I really liked it Steve. You've tipped your hand though. Beneath that cold angry Irish exterior, you do have a mutilated little heart.
-- Bucky on 12/4/2016 12:51:33 PM with a score of 0
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