Player Rating5.91/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 82 ratings since 10/30/2016
played 1,588 times (finished 106)

Story Difficulty5/8

"run through the jungle"

Play Length7/8

"It keeps going and going"

Maturity Level7/8

"anything goes"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 18. If this were a movie, it would probably be R.

Take control of Samuel, a young man thrust into a world of bloodthirsty creatures of the night, howling beasts cursed by the moon, horrifying demons and worse.

This is our entry for Bucky's 2016 Halloween Contest. Enjoy!

Player Comments

There are obviously some flaws here; both of you were too busy blowing each other to proofread (or whatever "rushing" for the "deadline" is supposed to be a euphemism for...) and there's the issues with how linear it is. But I know you're both aware of all this already so I don't see any reason to go on about it.

(And to be fair 'linearity' only gets brought up due to the nature of the contest. Taking the story as a whole there are two major, completely separate paths here, perfectly respectable for a CYOA even if there's not a lot of variation once you're on them.)

Really, none of the issues were distracting enough to take away from the fact this was an entertaining, action packed story that did some very cool things with the subject matter. Vampires are almost as bad as zombies sometimes in the way they're overused and abused by pop culture, but you guys gave them their dignity back here.

Steve's path reminded me in some ways of Path of Death, though Count Grey is a far eviler fuck than the necromancer ever was. The linearity was there, but disguised well with lots of ways to screw up and die. (Which does make a certain amount of sense given the character's line of work...) I was told what the choice in the beginning would be before I started reading, but the choice was written here in a way that made a lot more sense for the character than I thought possible.

Malk's suffered a little more obviously from being written in a hurry with the sparsity of choices, but what's there is so unique and cool. I am seriously in love with this setting. Malk, if you're not all vampired out by now I would love to see this or something similar expanded into a longer story to do some of these ideas justice.
-- mizal on 11/7/2016 12:34:03 AM with a score of 0
Well, this is certainty the best of the contest entries, but it might be because there is only two. :(
First, the two writing styles really are quite different between Steve and Malk, though a very prominent similarity would be the linear nature of both stories. Nonetheless, the deadline caused this (and the lack of a thorough proofreading as well).
As for the story, I liked Steve's section more. (It is the one where you are with the vampire.) The only blaring problem was that: A. I have to serve the vampire who murdered my family. B. I'm forced to be a murderous arse to live. Most of my concern is with B actually. He murders in order to live (since vampires need blood). I murder to stay alive (since he'll kill me if I don't do what he says). Of course, I could refuse and die, but I want to continue with the story. Nonetheless, I have no more sympathy for the protagonist, for he is now a vampire in all but name.
However, the assault on the castle/fine battle in Steve's storyline. It was quite exhilarating. I don't want to spoil it, but it's essentially a chaotic melee with more than one faction.
My favorite aspect of Malk's storyline was his concept. After seeing his family murdered in front of his eyes, he becomes a vampire killer. The writing was strong though unpolished in comparison to Steve's, but Steve is one of the site's most successful authors (which means you did better than almost anyone else, Malk).
Anyway, I hope you publish more storygames, Malk. Steve, I look foreword to your next endeavor. :)
-- WouldntItBeNice on 11/2/2016 11:28:14 PM with a score of 0
It would be better if there were more choices. Good job, though! :)
-- kiykat2222 on 3/4/2017 10:06:56 AM with a score of 0

You could have wrote more background on those three murderous vampire viceroys, so that it could be at least known why they WERE murderous for power. That's the only major detractor I have.

The rest of the story was nicely done, though. Long enough and well fleshed enough. Just what I like. There were still many microscopic rooms for improvement, however, and that's where the story falls short.

In short, good effort into making a story that is not the worst. 5/8.
-- AgentX on 2/18/2017 8:11:30 AM with a score of 0
This is just so much of 2 dimensional darkness that it's disappointing. You could squeeze it until it's brains pop out, and do you know what it's brains would be? Pencil markings! There's no love, no anger, no desperation, depression!!! There's no joy, hope, familial bonds...There's no humanity to it!!!
-- WaitForIt on 12/22/2016 12:12:17 AM with a score of 0
My only wish is for more choices.
-- Kestrelzoo on 12/16/2016 4:21:16 PM with a score of 0
more of a story than a game
-- TwoTimesSchool on 12/13/2016 2:17:03 PM with a score of 0
-- MinnieKing on 12/1/2016 11:24:16 AM with a score of 0
YAY. I found the happy(?) ending, and it was really intense and I enjoyed adventuring as Samuel!
-- Flamepelt43 on 11/30/2016 4:13:11 PM with a score of 0
Whoa...just whoa...
-- CookieRage7 on 11/25/2016 7:18:13 PM with a score of 0
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