WouldntItBeNice, The Apprentice Scrivener

Member Since

1/21/2016

Last Activity

11/21/2017 4:01 PM

EXP Points

1,637

Post Count

463

Storygame Count

6

Duel Stats

27 wins / 25 losses

Order

Notorious Marauder

Commendations

24

As of 11/16/2017:
Life goes onwards.

If you want to know more about me, send me a PM. Anyway, I'm fairly nice but my writing abilities are less than superb. Meh, I may write something that's liked more than a 5/8 eventually.

Please rate my storygames, especially Solstice and No Quarter. My goal is to eventually have one over 100 ratings. Thank you. 

Trophies Earned

Earning 100 Points Earning 500 Points Earning 1,000 Points Jointly won the 2017 Wilderness Contest Rated 62.0% of all Stories

Storygames

4-Simplex

The barrier between impossible and possible is thin.

This is an entry for the Summer Slam contest.

You will be individually following Billy Joe, Runt, Virgil, and Slim.

Author's Notes:
Each character has their own storyline that is intertwined with the others' own storylines, so your choices will effect the paths of multiple characters simultaneously in little and big ways. A choice can have a large effect even if it does not appear to do so at first, so choose carefully. Sometimes, a character's storyline is blocked (by dying) until another character does something different. Lastly, try to be nice and try not to die, for it is very helpful to do both of those things.

Also, I am deeply grateful for Tyrannosaurusrex's beta-reading. Your imputes were very helpful. Thank you so much.


Life as a Time Traveler

Steve is a time traveler, but he is not a superhero.  He does not use his powers for battling evil or being evil.  In fact, he does not even know what to do with his gloomy and crumbling life.  Perhaps today things will be different.  Perhaps today his present and future will be saved by... quite a special person.

Authors' Note: The endings depend on Steve's previous decisions.  There is one special ending found half way through the game, one sad ending, two real endings that are found at the end, and the "true epilogue" that is the best ending.  (The best ending has Stephanie in it in case you are wondering.)


No Quarter

This is a fan fiction of Led Zeppelin's song "No Quarter".

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It is also an entry for the New Frontier Contest.


Solstice

This is part of the School Based storygame contest.

This is Lawrence's final few days at Hawthorn School. Things become... memorable.

Thank you iavatus for being my beta-reader and At_Your_Throat for the cover art.

EDIT:
I fixed the scripting error. You can now receive 1,000 points by finding the ending shown to those who have the normally maximum score of 400. I also added your total score at the end of the game so that you don't have to post in order to see it.

Cover


The Carnival, Ginny, and I

This is the story of Ginny and Ethan's times at the carnival.  As the years pass, can Ginny and Ethan's friendship continue or will their paths no longer intertwine?  Will Ethan overcome his avid dislike of roller coasters?

Can their friendship bloom into something greater?

EDIT:
Okay, after viewing the comments, I too realized the massive error I had created in the original ending.  Thank you Briar Rose, Bucky, and Steve24833 for you comments.  I truly mean that.  In fact, I burst out laughing (at my story) when I read the comments--especially Briar Roses'.  Thank you.

Now, there are two endings.  The first is the  original (with a few minute changes), and the new one is much different from the other one.  (They also wrote to each other because this story took place before the internet became widely public.)


Waiting for the (Trump) Train

Alternate title: WIBN Parodies Annoying Stuff

TRIGGER WARNING: If you personally know Trump, have ever heard of Trump, know anybody who knows Trump, know anybody who has ever heard of Trump, or has political beliefs of any kind, please do not play.

None of your choices have any effect. If you do see a choice having an effect, then you must be clearly wrong. Heck, it isn't like this is a site where you can choose your own story or anything.

The story is told though you own choices. Don't argue with me. Your choices have no meaning, but the entire storygame is told through your choices.

Also, please do not comment or rate my storygame. I published it not to improve my abilities as a writer. My feelings will be hurt if you even think about commenting especially if your comments are not nice. Also, men cannot comment because sexism or something.


Claire of Lune
unpublished

This was an entry for the Chaos Contest. Now it's just here for you to enjoy.

 

A frozen winter can be akin to Hell
So listen to this story that I will tell
Crazies throw the world into Chaos today
There's no way for me to keep evil at bay

Crazies should give you fright
Especially their bite
While the men act like beasts
Wanting tomorrow's feasts


The Mountain of Scath Dubh
unpublished

You are a weary traveler in a mysterious land.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/the-mountain-of-scath-dubh


Recent Posts

EndMaster’s Inclusive Story Contest on 11/21/2017 11:46:12 AM

Well, I wrote a storygame for EM's contest mostly just to ensure that mizal won't win by default again (making it more "official"). I was also being annoyed by ItsSuchaBeutifulDay, so I semi-parodied her storygame and style. Thus, I'm killing two birds with one stone.

Plus, will my minimal effort be rated higher than what ISBD thinks is too good to comment on? Will it even remain above site standards?


Random Derailment Thread on 11/18/2017 9:45:24 PM

Ummm... what? If you think a storygame I write is a 4/8, then rate it that way please. If I only received the highest ratings, then I'd think I write better than I really do. The 5/8 ratings tells you that it's pretty good with some flaws. Read the comments if you want more specific things. Additionally, the ratings are for all people to see, so I know that Eternal is better than something written by a ten year old with a glance. One of the major reasons I'm on here is to improve my abilities as a writer, and I can't really do that without feedback from both comments and ratings.


Draw My Attention (Toxic Creativity) on 11/18/2017 12:21:41 PM

I'd be very glad if you made another using this format. (Obviously) I found it wonderful.


Do You Read User Profiles? on 11/18/2017 12:11:56 PM

People used to modify their profiles with coding about 8ish months ago, but 3J ended that with an update. It also made Ford sad.


Draw My Attention (Toxic Creativity) on 11/18/2017 12:09:34 PM

(My) Comment for Featuring:

I read (and commented) on this storygame two weeks ago, but my mind keeps on coming back to it. The reason may not be what the author expects, for I absolutely love the narrative delivery especially for a shorter storygame. 

Initially, the driver of the plot is the reason for the two's isolation. I wanted to know what happened and why it happened. It seemed to be a pretty standard occurrence. In the town, I was confronted with memories from a time long ago that were both sweet and bitter for the protagonist. I started piecing together the plot in what felt to be a very organic manner. 

That is what I liked about this storygame so much. I was just wandering around a town looking for some supplies, but it used non-linear narration to fuel my desire to continue reading. I could feel the loneliness and the cold (both in the literal and metaphorical sense). Never once did I find anything that seemed forced upon by the author. 

As for improvements, I can't point out much. There's no grammar or spelling error (an easy way for me to normally criticize). There's no plot-points that make no sense or "lol random" moments. Heck, there's no instance where I slogged my way through a section that drug on for too long. I can't even criticize it for being linear, for I do have choice as the reader along with not being shoehorned into a path. 

Anyway, this is a great storygame that might even be worthy of a featured position.

-- WouldntItBeNice on 11/18/2017 12:07:02 PM with a score of 0

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I know a mod would see this soon enough, but I also wanted to be the first one to become featured from this thread.


Random Derailment Thread on 11/18/2017 8:29:02 AM

Rating storygames is a rather beneficial thing to do site-wise. Once a storygame hits a hundred, it becomes ranked. Plus, the writer would appreciate it if the readers showed some manner of like/dislike of one's storygame. How else can we improve without feedback?


Ryder on CoG on 11/17/2017 10:58:37 PM

I believe a sizable portion of your life, maybe 2%, goes to cys.


Do You Read User Profiles? on 11/17/2017 10:51:01 PM

That may not be the intention of user pictures... but thanks for letting us all know. 


Ryder on CoG on 11/17/2017 10:49:11 PM

Congrats on your "official" 5,000th post. It seems somewhat fitting. :)


Ryder on CoG on 11/17/2017 7:41:36 PM

I never made an account over there. If I had the time, I'd make an account just to interact with some of the most intolerant people I've met on the internet.