WouldntItBeNice, The Apprentice Scrivener

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5/27/2017 8:22 AM

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27 wins / 25 losses


Notorious Marauder



If you want to know more about me, send me a PM. Anyway, I'm fairly nice but my writing abilities are less than superb. Meh, I may write something that's liked more than a 5/8 eventually.

Progress on storygame that'll hopefully more liked than a 5/8: a couple thousand words.

Please rate my storygames, especially Solstice, No Quarter, and Life as a Time Traveler. My goal is to eventually have one over 100 comments. Thank you.

Trophies Earned

Earning 100 Points Earning 500 Points Earning 1,000 Points Jointly won the 2017 Wilderness Contest Rated 60.4% of all Stories


Life as a Time Traveler

Steve is a time traveler, but he is not a superhero.  He does not use his powers for battling evil or being evil.  In fact, he does not even know what to do with his gloomy and crumbling life.  Perhaps today things will be different.  Perhaps today his present and future will be saved by... quite a special person.

Authors' Note: The endings depend on Steve's previous decisions.  There is one special ending found half way through the game, one sad ending, two real endings that are found at the end, and the "true epilogue" that is the best ending.  (The best ending has Stephanie in it in case you are wondering.)

No Quarter

This is a fan fiction of Led Zeppelin's song "No Quarter".


It is also an entry for the New Frontier Contest.


This is part of the School Based storygame contest.

This is Lawrence's final few days at Hawthorn School. Things become... memorable.

Thank you iavatus for being my beta-reader and At_Your_Throat for the cover art.

I fixed the scripting error. You can now receive 1,000 points by finding the ending shown to those who have the normally maximum score of 400. I also added your total score at the end of the game so that you don't have to post in order to see it.


The Carnival, Ginny, and I

This is the story of Ginny and Ethan's times at the carnival.  As the years pass, can Ginny and Ethan's friendship continue or will their paths no longer intertwine?  Will Ethan overcome his avid dislike of roller coasters?

Can their friendship bloom into something greater?

Okay, after viewing the comments, I too realized the massive error I had created in the original ending.  Thank you Briar Rose, Bucky, and Steve24833 for you comments.  I truly mean that.  In fact, I burst out laughing (at my story) when I read the comments--especially Briar Roses'.  Thank you.

Now, there are two endings.  The first is the  original (with a few minute changes), and the new one is much different from the other one.  (They also wrote to each other because this story took place before the internet became widely public.)

Claire of Lune

This is an entry for the Chaos Contest.Barn.jpg


A frozen winter can be akin to Hell
So listen to this story that I will tell
Crazies throw the world into Chaos today
There's no way for me to keep evil at bay

Crazies should give you fright
Especially their bite
While the men act like beasts
Wanting tomorrow's feasts

The Mountain of Scath Dubh

You are a weary traveler in a mysterious land.


Recent Posts

Steve's Progressive! on 5/27/2017 8:14:21 AM

There's more options, however, than aborting the child. For example, there's adoption such as what happened to Michael Bay and Steve Jobs. Even if the child is not adopted and stuck in an orphanage, he or she could end up like Babe Ruth. There's also giving the child to the grandparents to raise such as Bill Clinton and Eric Clapton, or the child could be raised by other family members (like aunts or uncles) such as John Lennon. Lastly, there is foster care which includes the likes of Marilyn Monroe, Malcolm X, Edgar Allen Poe, and Louis Armstrong.
Yeah, these people were able to live highly influential lives. I believe that other options are applicable if one does not want to or shouldn't raise a child.

Manchester Bombing on 5/26/2017 7:35:02 AM

I'm a little late to this.
Ever since the 9/11 embassy incident, I haven't been effected by this at all. Much like a morally good and famous person dying, I'm saddened, but I expected it to happen sooner or later. The only time I'm truly scared is when terrorist attacks and/or shooting happens close to where people I know live at.

I am disgusted that terrorists attack young women, but I am not surprised. They are among the softest targets (with little probability of fighting back). The world has gotten to the point where basically anybody can kill over a dozen people with homemade bombs or a vehicle. Humanity is a naturally violent people, and when violence can help your deity, get you on worldwide news, and give your life "worth"... I just don't see any other outcome. My thoughts and prayers are with the UK and those directly effected by this evil act of murder; however, I believe that the victims need more than that.

Draw My Attention (Age of Banning) on 5/21/2017 9:58:09 PM

The following is all from this storygame

1. Add "previously featured" as a tag, since it was previously ?featured according to her point history. (I sort of wish I was around back then since the quality was apparently fairly low for having a featured story.)
Comments for deleting: reasoning -> spammy

2. Sooooo.....boooooring.....

-- Meaka333 on 3/16/2006 2:59:04 PM


3. I sooooooooooooo cheated.

-- Nick on 1/25/2006 4:51:35 AM

Contest Trophy: More Easily Given on 5/21/2017 8:25:18 PM

Correct me if I'm wrong, but those golden trophies are only able to be given in a site update. I propose that a few (EM, BZ, et al) or just all of the mods be given the power to give those trophies just as they could give their own personal trophy.
Why? Well, I'm annoyed by how Saika hasn't received his trophy yet. I really don't see why this'd be hard to code, but I may be wrong in this regard. Until 3J comes back with an update, poor Saika (and any other contest winner in the meantime) won't have the contest trophy on display for all to see.

Draw My Attention (Age of Banning) on 5/18/2017 10:41:19 PM

Link <- there it is. It was trying to kill a mustache.

Draw My Attention (Age of Banning) on 5/18/2017 10:30:51 PM

Don't give me a point for this deletion suggestion.

1. I was apparently unable to spell or use proper grammer when writing this comment. Since it's still the first comment (other than the featured ones) after one bloody year and three days, please kill it.
Congratulations BZ, this is one of the best storygames on the site. It took me hours (literally) to beat the game... Sign. I Briar's clue by accident. That would have been helpful to know sooner. 
Anyway, I killed the mustache. 8/8

-- WouldntItBeNice on 5/15/2016 9:48:34 PM with a score of 6010

Wiblander on 5/17/2017 2:17:02 PM

The only disappointment I have is in regards to Ford's laziness though I never expected much better. In hindsight, I should've more closely read through the posts in the original Chaos thread to notice that anything above the normal amount would be an automatic entry into the mini-contest. Oh well, unlike Ford, I still have WIBN.

Chaos Contest Results on 5/17/2017 2:13:32 PM

Sorry about my delay in responding, I’m still too lazy to figure out how to post on mobile.

Congratulations to Saika, Cres, and Orange. All of you certainly deserve the top three. In particular, I am very fond of Cres’ storygame, and I am very glad it was featured. I also want to thank the judges for taking the time to read all of our storygames (even if it was a rushed monstrosity like mine), and I want to thank Bucky for running his swan song contest (for now at least). I rather wish I didn't unintentionally join the mini-contest, for Ford would’ve then had a ton of points which would’ve been banned from his usage.

Saika, from above the countless idiots, lazy idiots, suicidal idiots, somewhat competent idiots, and a handful of non-idiots… you rose above the competition. Enjoy your shiny, golden trophy. :)

Drawbacks to co-authorship? on 5/15/2017 12:08:46 PM

TOW was not written with a co-author. Soundstorm was added long after (years I believe) the story was published. KF and SS were, from rumors, trying to convert the storygame to another medium until they quit. (It might have been an app or COG, I can't quite remember nor cared enough to remember.)

Achilles, on the other hand, was actually co-authored (unless you're on of those conspiracy theorists that believe Chase and Steve are the same person).

Interesting comments 2 on 5/11/2017 7:03:45 PM

I never posted one from my own storygames. There's two that give me a kick.
From No Quarter
I like the idea, and the pictures lent it a certain feel, and added to the depth and plot, and it certainly branched out, but there was no well-defined plot, and while it is easy to guess that same plot, it still could use some brightening. It has a somber mood that works well with the length of the story, and the words are easy to read and understand. There are a lot of great qualities to this story, and they compliment the bad qualities very well, but, to my eyes, if you fixed just one of the bad qualities the story would be ruined. You have a ton of potential, and I would love to see another story. You grasped the story, and made it a summary, but made the summary a story of its own. You could give a choice on the second page though, instead of 2 pages in a row of no choices. Keep it up, though!

-- Anonymous on 1/29/2017 3:37:58 PM
" if you fixed just one of the bad qualities the story would be ruined"... what does that and quite frankly all of the other ramblings even mean?

From Life as a Time Traveler
This story is actually really good heck it could actually be used as a plot to a movie if someone wanted to 

Actually that gives me a idea brb stealing this idea

-- Bob the idea stealer on 3/23/2016 1:26:58 PM with a score of 0
Oh, the humor of middle schoolers with far too much time on their hands.