Love & Dating
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"walk in the park"
"A nice jog down the driveway"
"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.
In this game you play April, a pretty co-ed who has been dumped by her boyfriend. Now she is ready to find new guy and your going to help her!
I noticed many grammatical errors in your book, and some dialogues which you added in weren't exactly necessary. I noticed that whenever you turned down a guy, there would be a brief paragraph about April cribbing about Eric dumping her, and that basically is the end of the game. I would change that if I were you, since that makes the game short and uninteresting as we would want another candidate to date. Like, when April was crying underneath the tree, another man could have comforted her, and then they could have fallen in love and you would have another ending. You see?
This game was somewhat amusing to me, and I liked it. Just work on your grammar, add more intricate details, and the plot wasn't really that strong nor did you develop your characters that much, so I would work on that if I were you.
I see that you put some effort in this, so well done. This certainly isn't the worst nor the best, but if you put more time and sweat into this game, it can certainly be better.
on 11/10/2017 1:37:10 PM
I dont like it!!!
on 4/13/2018 12:30:00 PM
This was pretty short, but kinda cute. I would make this game a little less dramatic - I disliked the ending with Marc particularly. In fact, in real life, Marc is exactly the kind of guy I'd date. So maybe you should include a personality choice that will affect the outcome of dating each of the guys. Apart from that (and the spelling errors) this is very cute! Keep on writing
-- anonymous on 4/8/2018 6:41:19 AM
It is very good but it is super short.
-- Gigi on 4/2/2018 2:51:41 PM
Horrible. Short, no options, poorly written
-- Nicole on 2/26/2018 2:51:08 AM
Very brutal but I do love the ending with my best friend's brother
-- Person on 2/14/2018 6:16:36 PM
I don't like how its so so so so so so so so so so so so so so short
-- yaboijackob on 2/7/2018 6:17:11 PM
cute story for everyone! when I'm old enough I hope my best friend is my sister-in-law XD
-- narwhalsswimmin on 12/21/2017 10:26:23 PM
Loved it soooooooooooooooooo much! I got Jacob XD
-- swimminnarwhals on 10/27/2017 9:34:57 PM
-- llly on 9/25/2017 5:54:17 PM
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