Day 6209

Player Rating2.82/8

"#887 overall, #112 for 2014"
based on 110 ratings since 11/22/2014
played 759 times (finished 106)

Story Difficulty4/8

"march in the swamp"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level6/8

"I'll need to see some identification"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 16. If this were a movie, it would probably between PG-13 and R.

It is your 6209th day on earth (17th birthday)!

Player Comments

Break down your paragraphs;
Write dialogue correctly;
Spell correctly;
Make a legitimate reason for the confusion that I just read (explain how anything could've happened instead of it just happening. I was so confused :<).

Writing ability.
-- Crescentstar on 12/11/2016 11:35:04 AM with a score of 0
It wasn't exactly a bad first try at making a game, but it was ... kinda random, it requires polishing, and I can also say that my suspension of disbelief was broken pretty easily.

You had some formatting issues and errors: You need to break up your chunks of text into paragraphs and in the future, please spell-check your work (for example, it is spelled "immediately" not "imediatly" and "whisper" not "wisper." The editor did tell you this because it spell-checks your work, but I'm assuming you didn't notice.)

As for breaking my suspension of disbelief ... there are a lot of real-life, logical ways a person can be driven to commit murder. I have yet to see one that solely involves injecting someone with a serum. =\ Still, it's interesting.
-- Kiel_Farren on 11/22/2014 2:22:09 PM with a score of 0
Okay, but only one ending?

This is borderline 3/4 out of 8 but I rated it a 4 to make up for its average of 2.82.
-- 325boy on 6/5/2019 6:37:20 AM with a score of 0
I really enjoyed it, but it's a little bit too short for my liking. Maybe with more elaboration, this story would be 8/8, but for now it's 4/8.
-- xoxoalien on 4/14/2019 6:48:37 PM with a score of 0
Your story is eh on the nomnom scale. You almost count for a yuk! Your story seems like a prologue and isn't a polished piece of granite yet... Oh also it's seems kind of random? But good effort.
Conversion Chart:
yuk!=0-1 stars
eh!=1-1.9 stars
meh...=2-2.9 stars
nom=3-3.9 stars
-- Cake_Oi on 1/29/2019 2:44:38 PM with a score of 0
This story was ok but it wasn't very long. It didn't have very many choices or much plot. I would like to see a longer version with more story and more choices.
-- Faervel on 1/29/2019 12:16:50 PM with a score of 0
I did not understand any of this. Not even good to poop on. Just please, don't play
-- Kill_For_Sport on 4/24/2017 3:35:16 PM with a score of 0
What the hell is happening?
-- LOLiHAVEnoFACE on 4/16/2017 11:00:27 PM with a score of 0
interesting but rather disturbing but i like it though
-- Trouble on 1/25/2017 8:36:57 AM with a score of 0
Why not continue the story? I would like to read more. :)
-- Quorrah on 1/23/2017 2:33:07 PM with a score of 0
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