Friday the 13th

Player Rating3.29/8

"#643 overall, #26 for 2019"
based on 67 ratings since 02/12/2019
played 865 times (finished 107)

Story Difficulty5/8

"run through the jungle"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level6/8

"I'll need to see some identification"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 16. If this were a movie, it would probably between PG-13 and R.

Tags

Horror

Welcome to Friday The 13th. In this game YOU decide how you die, live, or get involved in your player interactions. Make sure you are ready because this is going to be one bloody ride.

 

 

*Note: language and deaths are gruesome and may not be suitable for children under the age of 13, you have been warned.*

Player Comments

This game had some good and some bad. Overall it exceeded my expectations.

The writing style resembles an almost incoherent rapid-fire speech pattern of someone either very young, overexcited, or afraid. Normally. I'd hate the style. But, combined with the extremely short pages, I felt it added to the horror element. In particular, I felt the page where you, spoiler alert, find all your friends dead well done. I'd like more of that.

The short pages also gave my first playthrough a hint of something greater. With multiple options in the first act, I was eager to find out how far the branches would go.

However, the choices themselves were often poorly done. They were a test of basic cognitive function. Soe examples: do you check out the screams, or do you ignore everything? Will you go pee, or will you stay in your hiding spot? Will you make a sound, or will you make no sound when actively hiding?

They are even below the level of the protagonists in horror movies, and that says a lot. A second playthrough also showed me that most 'normal' choices were either fake, or led to a rapid death. The writing also became more and more jumbled as the story went on, almost as if the author was done and wished to rush to finally finish his work.

Overall I'd say it's worth a quick 5 minute read, it's basically all the movie tropes in written form.
-- enterpride on 7/29/2020 7:54:37 PM with a score of 0
Knowing this a short story, the expectations are not huge going in. At the same time, there have been some very effectively written short stories here on the site. As of this review, this one is #10 for 2019, so hopefully there’s something good here.

The first page pretty much dashed my hopes of finding a short little gem. The third word in the title is misspelled and the fourth word is missing a capital letter. I’m not a grammar Nazi or anything, but those are glaring errors that really take away from the readability of the entire story. And with that kind of error in the very first line, it sort of lower the expectations for the rest of the story and now I’ll be looking even more for additional, similar errors.

The actual text on the page is, as one might expect, a bit brief. Even the simple description of arriving at the lake on the first day: you could probably write 1,000 words describing the sights, sounds, and smells happening on that very first page. Instead there is just a note about a picture on a wall. What wall? A picture on the outside wall? Is the wall connected to a building? Just showing the wall really leaves a hole in the story and could be expanded so much more to create a much better picture of what’s about to happen in the story.

The actions and activities in the story follow this same pattern: very little information and descriptions and just actions. You could really build a lot more suspense into the story with more detailed descriptions of the feelings and sounds in the dark house. There’s also one page that, in the text, asks you if you want to call 911 or go to a car. However, the options at the bottom of the page only allow you to call 911.

There are additional spelling errors, and a weird breaking of the fourth wall as well. This is a nice attempt at a storygame and the idea behind it can work. With a bit more work, proofreading, editing, and adding to the story, this could really be a nice little story. Thank you for sharing it with the site.
-- Ogre11 on 1/7/2020 1:00:57 PM with a score of 0
Awesome story :D
-- Payton on 4/1/2021 7:01:17 PM with a score of 0
I liked it, please make another one...well, you may have to because if you lived, then you should fill on with the story since The killer never died. Also, is there a secret ending?
-- ImAWSOME321 on 9/29/2020 11:51:18 AM with a score of 0
I loved it, I haven't watched the movie before but I'm guessing this story is supposed to be like the movie, I liked how the choices affect the story greatly. Since I haven't seen the movies, who were some of the characters? A lot of the characters I didn't know were apart of the story, like tiffany.
-- ImAWSOME321 on 9/27/2020 6:22:49 PM with a score of 0
Dammit! I almost escaped! This was amazing, though. X3
-- Anomaly on 5/7/2020 7:23:26 PM with a score of 0
Fun. Too short.
-- Quorrah on 7/13/2019 8:59:27 PM with a score of 0
it was epic, i just imagined this like the new game
-- will on 6/4/2019 1:28:11 PM with a score of 0
i loved it
-- wilky on 5/20/2019 6:10:19 AM with a score of 0
This is... OK. I guess. I gave it 4/8. Reasons below.

First, the punctuation. You need to put a period, question mark or something after speech- not "Example", do "Example!"

Next, the length. The pages are awfully short, and there are hardly and pages.

However, it is an okay story. The bad things abut the story? Well, it was resolved very quickly, the other people died in seconds, and you didn't even say in the story it was Firday the 13h.
-- BgirlStories on 5/3/2019 1:43:51 PM with a score of 0
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