Friday the 13th

Player Rating3.36/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 15 ratings since 02/12/2019
played 136 times (finished 27)

Story Difficulty5/8

"run through the jungle"

Play Length4/8

"A well spent lunch break"

Maturity Level6/8

"I'll need to see some identification"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 16. If this were a movie, it would probably between PG-13 and R.

Tags

Horror

Welcome to Friday The 13th. In this game YOU decide how you die, live, or get involved in your player interactions. Make sure you are ready because this is going to be one bloody ride.

 

 

*Note: language and deaths are gruesome and may not be suitable for children under the age of 13, you have been warned.*

Player Comments

I would say this is silly. Firstly everyone dies with no reason and secondly you didn't mention anything about the guy in the hockey mask. Overall it was a story which is about a guy putting everyone to death with no detail. 1/8
-- StoryTurtle on 2/20/2019 4:15:55 AM with a score of 0
I thought it was actually pretty good, and full of potential, but I think you should work on making a longer story. This was like a 15 minute episode to a tv show, though I was expecting a movie. I got the PE ending. It’s fun but you should definetly add on! I look forward to the sequel.
-- CrazyCraz3R on 2/18/2019 2:51:03 PM with a score of 0
"You decide to run since Sammy is probably dead anyways."
Yeah screw that whiny little shit.

Got the death where your arm gets sliced "in half". Not sure how much of a chad this dude is to get his arm chopped then keep running like nothing happened. But with badassery like this he easily should have been able to kick Jason's ass.
-- corgi213 on 2/16/2019 5:22:00 PM with a score of 0
Hi guys and gals I am just here to clarify the latest comments on my story.
1) Yes I did make a lot of careless spelling mistakes and I apologize for that. I should have read through and made sure everything was alright.
2) If you saw my comment saying "Just A Beta Test" I was testing my game and didn't realize that this comment would get published. (I am new to the site.)
3) Yes I agree the Torch is pretty useless, but that was before I realized that you could make it where it is infinite until you use the item. (As you could see if you got to the mask escape.)
3) Comments like the ones left by DigitalFang, undr, or Wil11 were very helpfull and will help me develop more or a "writers instinct."
4) I may unpublish this game and fix the errors, but that is up to you whether I should or shouldn't. (Personally I think I should.)
5) Last but not least, I appreciate your feedback very much and would love to try again. I am thinking of other games I should make. Again thank you so much for your feedback.
-Unkindcrab
-- Unkindcrab on 2/15/2019 6:31:41 PM with a score of 0
I am here to comment on "if the saw blade is to Marie's left" it makes sense because it is her left so the blade would be to your right hope you understand
-- SevenSteam on 2/15/2019 6:01:39 PM with a score of 0
Sorry did not mean to put did not like, I liked it just a bit of spelling mistakes I get it to though
-- SevenSteam on 2/14/2019 10:26:44 PM with a score of 0
I’m just here to comment on this misspelling of “congratulations” which he says as “Congradulations”
-- Taycool on 2/14/2019 10:03:18 PM with a score of 0
The presence of some branching and plotlines could make this a good first storygame, but there are also some problems.

As DigitalFang said, there are typos and grammar errors you could have proofread, and your scrawny writing style is not particularly eye-catching.
I also agree that Jason's game was badly explained, and it makes no sense that you have to dive "to the left of M" if the blade is coming down "to the left of Marie".
A lot of characters' names and their place in the plot were just taken for granted without being explained and may end up alienating the reader from the story. You should have put this game in the fanfiction category by the way.
Also, the torch as an item is useless, you end up on the same page whether you use it or not.

All in all I've seen way worse as far as first tries go, but you can definitely improve.
Keep working on your writing and proofread before publishing, whatever you publish will be judged as your finished work.
-- undr on 2/14/2019 5:37:06 PM with a score of 0
Did not like a lot of spelling mistakes
-- SevenSteam on 2/14/2019 5:35:33 PM with a score of 0
The story is alright for your first attempt, but it has quite a few careless spelling and punctuation errors. There were parts where it looked like you accidentally pressed the wrong key or multiple keys such as "you black our" instead of "you blackout" or "ion" instead of "on." I also noticed you using the word "your" when you were supposed to use "you're" like here when you wrote, "Your horrified as you look inside." As far as I could tell, you only made that mistake one other time.

When you used quotation marks for dialogue, you often mistakenly punctuated it like this "'Oh hey Carlie.' You say."; with a period instead of like this "'Oh hey Charlie,' you say."; with a comma.

I also found Jason’s game to be confusing. You never stated the orientation of the room, until after the player had already died, which made it difficult to tell where the blades were coming from. However, I suppose that you thought it would be too easy if the player had that information at the get-go.

Overall, the game was very linear and it also felt as though some parts of the story were unexplained or came out of nowhere. I hope this helped somehow.
-- DigitalFang on 2/14/2019 9:07:17 AM with a score of 0
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