Geek

Player Rating5.86/8

"#60 overall, #10 for 2007"
based on 472 ratings since 12/02/2007
played 17,553 times (finished 650)

Story Difficulty5/8

"run through the jungle"

Play Length6/8

"It'll be a while, better grab a Snickers®"

Maturity Level7/8

"anything goes"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 18. If this were a movie, it would probably be R.

Carnivals aren't all fun and games.

Additional Notes:

While there is only one spot that contains extra histories for this story, it's basically the background information of all the major characters and factions. It's strongly recommended that these are read due to the fact that your character will be interacting with most of these folks in his attempts to successfully accomplish his task(s).

This story has a very factional feel to it, so choose your allegiances carefully to get one of the better endings.

Player Comments

I quite enjoyed this storygame, and it's among my favorites on the site. It has a good length for the idea behind it and it has certain qualities that create a unique and interesting tone set by the author. It is one of the reasons EndMaster is my favorite writer on the site, because of the way he writes and the effort, quality, and time he puts in. I deeply respect him as an author and recommend his stories be read for educational purposes.

Geek is perfectly paced, with different scenarios flowing into each other by the great skill the author has. The first page of the story hooks the reader in, captivating them with the way each situation is introduced. Everything is nicely placed.

A few bits of the story could have been improved, starting with how the story progresses. I think that more background could have been placed before hitting the climax. I don't agree with how the killing scene played out, and could have been worded differently.

The story is very thorough in the matters of descriptive writing, (as are all of EndMaster's works) so I don't have much to say here, besides that I love it. It's the perfect amount of detail for a story along these margins.

Each character is nicely introduced, and End is very masterful at developing them so that us as readers can relate to them on a more deeper basis. This is one of the reasons it makes him such an excellent writer, and I look forward to his next work.

I've only played through one of the two main paths, so I can't say much about the linearity of the story, but I can say that on the one I chose, more options could have been available. Throughout the story, I only noticed one error in spelling ("of" should have been "off") but it did nothing to affect the story overall. Excellent writing, EndMaster.

7/8
-- Nyctophilia on 2/24/2017 8:01:59 PM
Geek is a grim, gritty, fascinating delve into a thoroughly imagined world of carnival intrigue and conflict. I was absolutely captivated, and I loved reading about the wild variety of characters.
This is phenomenally structured and developed. In order to find fodder for constructive criticism, I had to dig pretty deep (nitpick). I hope it helps.
Some specific praise and criticism:
This story has a killer opening. I don’t think I have ever been so intrigued by the first three pages of any other Storygame.
The dry, staccato sentences about what a ‘terrible thing’ it is to be sober were funny and well-executed.
The vagueness surrounding the protagonist’s act was also a cool plot device, but I felt like it was never capitalized upon. Maybe a scene during the show that night where the gruesome act is described in more detail would add a lot to the story.
I often noticed sentences which were poorly structured, a flaw which could be fixed by reading them aloud to hear the rhythm, for example “I’ve done all I’ve can” and “more than they might normally would”.
The alternating pronouns was a very clever way to handle the mysterious ring-master.
Placing the action in the midst of the dialogue by putting it in parentheses is kind of lazy writing, for example, “Of course…(Sniff sniff) you really…” That is more at home in a script or screenplay than in this format.
The story didn’t do a lot of justice to the female characters. They were relegated to an abused girlfriend, a tattooed hooker, a crazy gypsy, and a bearded lady.
I would say my greatest complaint was that the intriguing setup was truly excellent, but the content did not deliver from there. The climax was exciting, but the tension was not well built-up beforehand. One moment the reader is running errands, and the next everybody is killing one another. More description of the scene and gradual building of the excitement would make the conclusion more satisfying for the reader.
All told, this story is really exceptional. I gave a 7/8.
Cheers
-- dueconsideration on 3/29/2016 3:22:30 PM
This is great. It's the same story for each scenario, except you're on a different side. It follows a formula for whose side you choose, and it just feels right, you did an excellent job of characterizing everyone, and creating a demented perverse world, everything was set up to put you in the perspective of the geek, a goal not attempted by most storytellers. It's exactly what it needs to be, and what it is....is messed up.
-- Melike on 4/4/2008 2:58:44 AM
It was good but it needed some work on spelling and grammar
-- Iquarius on 3/15/2017 11:04:03 AM
I died on the first decision. I really wanted to kick a midget today lol.
-- TheBlackDragon04 on 3/3/2017 4:51:29 PM
good stuff
-- shaurya1616 on 12/9/2016 10:21:34 AM
I ended up being fucked by drunk-ass clowns.
Lol, nice work 6/8.
-- MinnieKing on 12/7/2016 1:00:44 AM
I love the characters, all of 'em, even if after I read the description which made me thinks that I don't like anyone, and no one likes me too...
-- Mahahahahanana on 11/2/2016 5:23:06 PM
I did like it. I loved the originality of playing a geek.
-- midmichiganguy on 10/18/2016 10:13:39 AM
Really good story. You put a lot of effort into it, I can tell.
-- Olivia on 8/7/2016 7:01:07 PM
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