Player Comments on Geek
This is probably the second time I have read Geek, and just as I remembered it, it is a great and hilarious story, although not my favorite of EndMaster’s works.
There is no re-joining of branches in the story, but there are a few different ways to get to certain paths. However, the reader does not have to re-read anything unless he wants to, and he can still reach all endings. The endings themselves are quite varied for all having the same set-up: It’s a moonlit night after a show, and shit goes down. The premature endings are often quite entertaining as well.
Some endings are definitely better for the Geek than others, and the first ending I got in this playthrough was probably the best one, but they are not marked as wins or losses, and all are equally worth reading.
There were enough run-on sentences in some places to make the story seem a bit more rambly than it would otherwise have been, but the story was never less than easily readable.
The characters were all pretty great, which is especially good given the sort of story this is. The fortune teller lady was definitely a favorite of mine, and her relationship with Randal was amusing.
It’s easy to miss at first, but the pronouns used for the Ringmaster change back and forth between male and female constantly. That must have been a pain in the ass to write, but the results were pretty funny once I noticed them.
It was also entertaining to re-read the story with the knowledge of the Ringmaster’s true nature and see all the signs of that throughout.
It’s pretty fun to play as the disgusting loser of the carnival too, not going to lie.
“Aw hell. Hey guys! Someone get me another Geek! This one’s dead.”
Is a good line for summarizing the general tone of the story, and it made me laugh.
While I wasn’t laughing non-stop, Geek is hilarious and still among the top comedies on this site, by far. Who knew a story about carnie factions would be so funny?
This line in particular was one of my favorites: “Look Geek, I ain’t gonna lie to ya, not many of us like Charley, and sure, he’s a fucking tyrant, but he gets things done, I dunno he’s kinda like that guy in Germany, except shorter.”
My favorite scene was probably when he exposes the pinheads while telling them all about his act. Seeing them gradually lose patience as he talked about disgusting things he had eaten was pretty hilarious.
Overall, Geek is a story that I would definitely recommend to you faggot who reads reviews before stories for some odd reason…Unless you are ten years old and have a love for clowns you would like to keep. Then maybe don’t.
on 6/21/2019 6:57:51 PM with a score of 0
I quite enjoyed this storygame, and it's among my favorites on the site. It has a good length for the idea behind it and it has certain qualities that create a unique and interesting tone set by the author. It is one of the reasons EndMaster is my favorite writer on the site, because of the way he writes and the effort, quality, and time he puts in. I deeply respect him as an author and recommend his stories be read for educational purposes.
Geek is perfectly paced, with different scenarios flowing into each other by the great skill the author has. The first page of the story hooks the reader in, captivating them with the way each situation is introduced. Everything is nicely placed.
A few bits of the story could have been improved, starting with how the story progresses. I think that more background could have been placed before hitting the climax. I don't agree with how the killing scene played out, and could have been worded differently.
The story is very thorough in the matters of descriptive writing, (as are all of EndMaster's works) so I don't have much to say here, besides that I love it. It's the perfect amount of detail for a story along these margins.
Each character is nicely introduced, and End is very masterful at developing them so that us as readers can relate to them on a more deeper basis. This is one of the reasons it makes him such an excellent writer, and I look forward to his next work.
I've only played through one of the two main paths, so I can't say much about the linearity of the story, but I can say that on the one I chose, more options could have been available. Throughout the story, I only noticed one error in spelling ("of" should have been "off") but it did nothing to affect the story overall. Excellent writing, EndMaster.
on 2/24/2017 8:01:59 PM with a score of 0
Geek is a grim, gritty, fascinating delve into a thoroughly imagined world of carnival intrigue and conflict. I was absolutely captivated, and I loved reading about the wild variety of characters.
This is phenomenally structured and developed. In order to find fodder for constructive criticism, I had to dig pretty deep (nitpick). I hope it helps.
Some specific praise and criticism:
This story has a killer opening. I don’t think I have ever been so intrigued by the first three pages of any other Storygame.
The dry, staccato sentences about what a ‘terrible thing’ it is to be sober were funny and well-executed.
The vagueness surrounding the protagonist’s act was also a cool plot device, but I felt like it was never capitalized upon. Maybe a scene during the show that night where the gruesome act is described in more detail would add a lot to the story.
I often noticed sentences which were poorly structured, a flaw which could be fixed by reading them aloud to hear the rhythm, for example “I’ve done all I’ve can” and “more than they might normally would”.
The alternating pronouns was a very clever way to handle the mysterious ring-master.
Placing the action in the midst of the dialogue by putting it in parentheses is kind of lazy writing, for example, “Of course…(Sniff sniff) you really…” That is more at home in a script or screenplay than in this format.
The story didn’t do a lot of justice to the female characters. They were relegated to an abused girlfriend, a tattooed hooker, a crazy gypsy, and a bearded lady.
I would say my greatest complaint was that the intriguing setup was truly excellent, but the content did not deliver from there. The climax was exciting, but the tension was not well built-up beforehand. One moment the reader is running errands, and the next everybody is killing one another. More description of the scene and gradual building of the excitement would make the conclusion more satisfying for the reader.
All told, this story is really exceptional. I gave a 7/8.
on 3/29/2016 3:22:30 PM with a score of 0
Geek was a pretty fun game. I wouldn’t say it was my favorite out of the endmaster games, though it still is a EndMaster game, meaning that this is one of the best games on this site. I have always been a fan of the way endmaster does his little background pages, and while this game only has one, or three depends on how you count it, it is quite lengthy, and I would agree that it is necessary to enjoying this game. While I am giving advice you should take, and before I go into spoilers, I think this is a perfect time to address you people. I am putting the deplorable people who read reviews before playing the game center stage. If you are not bothered by mature content, THEN READ THIS GAME. Don’t read any other review, or anything just read it now. Now that all of them are gone, let's get into the main event.
First off, I liked the branching in this story, though some things put me off. As with any of endmaster’s stories, the branching is great. This one is mainly split up into three paths, the Ringmaster path, the Randal path, and the Charlie path. They are all good, and if I’m not mistaken they all contain 2 “epilogues” of sorts. These were a problem for me. With a story this short, having six endings that revolve around an event that changes with your choices up to this point, it makes it seem like there is less branching. Still an amazing game, though it made it feel more liner because of them all ending up on the same event with death scattered around in between.
Besides the branching there isn’t much else I can say I dislike about the story. I love the main character as he just feels great. He reminds me of the protag of TRASH in a lot of ways. I also hate Charlie, though I don’t think he is a bad character, just someone you are supposed to hate. I also like the RIngmaster. Their character interested me, and it was sort of a gut punch to never know their true gender.
In conclusion, this game is pretty good. I hold it in high regard, though not as much as some other games, so I can’t give it a perfect score. It is one of the best horror games on the site however, and I think that if anyone can stand mature content, then they should read this.
7 out of 8
on 11/14/2019 9:15:00 PM with a score of 0
It's a testimony to EndMaster's skill that a concept that would otherwise be my last choice for a choose-your-story -- being a geek at a circus -- turned out to be very entertaining and engaging. I'm a fan, what can I say.
-- Mystima on 8/30/2019 3:32:02 AM with a score of 0
it was fun, confusing but fun
-- Curtis Bowerman on 8/29/2019 4:05:57 PM with a score of 0
just kinda blue since i didn't get to do any fighting. it might be based on my choices, for i do not really read the opportunities at the beginning, for i believe it ruins the story for me. but i must admit, you are quite an author! i wish you luck on your future pieces.
-- keylee on 12/23/2018 1:05:41 PM with a score of 0
Wow. What an inappropriate, awesome story! It was hard to get a good ending. I enjoyed and was repulsed by it!
on 7/20/2018 5:58:37 PM with a score of 0
The fact that this is only rated a 5.84 is a travesty.
on 6/9/2018 6:19:54 PM with a score of 0
Pretty good, original plot, cleaned up fairly fast. The clowns horrified me though.
on 4/13/2018 11:29:10 PM with a score of 0
All of the endings were odd and very unsatisfying. Odd game.
on 1/7/2018 3:06:31 AM with a score of 0
I liked this book. It was short, and there wasn't as much romance or action involved of how your other games had. Still it was pretty good. Nice job.
-- them love expert on 5/20/2017 6:19:51 PM with a score of 0
Oddly satisfying yet disturbing at the same time.
on 4/24/2017 5:22:57 AM with a score of 0
It was good but it needed some work on spelling and grammar
on 3/15/2017 11:04:03 AM with a score of 0
I died on the first decision. I really wanted to kick a midget today lol.
on 3/3/2017 4:51:29 PM with a score of 0
on 12/9/2016 10:21:34 AM with a score of 0
I ended up being fucked by drunk-ass clowns.
Lol, nice work 6/8.
on 12/7/2016 1:00:44 AM with a score of 0
I love the characters, all of 'em, even if after I read the description which made me thinks that I don't like anyone, and no one likes me too...
-- Mahahahahanana on 11/2/2016 5:23:06 PM with a score of 0
I did like it. I loved the originality of playing a geek.
on 10/18/2016 10:13:39 AM with a score of 0
Really good story. You put a lot of effort into it, I can tell.
-- Olivia on 8/7/2016 7:01:07 PM with a score of 0
i thought it was great i think you should do a squeal of it a\nd make it longer if you can and with some more options. :) :) :) :) keep up the good work.
on 7/15/2016 5:07:48 AM with a score of 0
I think i got the best ending :)
Played through all of them x3
on 6/12/2016 7:08:54 PM with a score of 0
Nice short and fucked up
-- Professor X on 5/11/2016 9:22:11 AM with a score of 0
Surprisingly, I quite enjoyed this messed up story. Nothing against the Author, on the contrary, This story was written quite well and the Author did a good job of evoking the degradation of the messed up carnival characters.
I never liked seeing clowns at the circus, They were always... weird...
on 5/7/2016 5:51:53 AM with a score of 0
I do wish the story had an epilogue, since there is some background of the past in that other story" Soozies strange saga" Would be interesting.
-- Walker. on 3/21/2016 8:34:58 PM with a score of 0
This was a really fun yet dark and disgusting games that only worsened my fear of clowns. I'm a fair bit annoyed I didn't get to find out the Ring Master's gender and the vampire thing was only mentioned in one of the endings, but I found it really fun with an interesting setting and characters.
on 2/3/2016 4:11:50 PM with a score of 0
-- do on 2/2/2016 11:48:43 PM with a score of 0
I got the good ending rather quickly.. which disappointed me. I expected more of this game than I actually got.
on 1/16/2016 11:25:20 AM with a score of 0
I wonder what gender the ringmaster was. No matter the ending it didnt say
on 8/19/2015 7:34:56 PM with a score of 0
Well written, dark, disgusting, wjat more could I want. Great job, only wish it was longer with a bit more choices.
on 7/25/2015 1:39:29 PM with a score of 0
Shorter than most Endmaster stories, but still enjoyable. I got a good ending (yay!). Keep up the good work!
on 7/7/2015 12:22:00 PM with a score of 0
Blah. This sucks
on 5/22/2015 5:33:07 PM with a score of 0
And they all lived happily ever after.
I like that no specific timeframe is mentioned. Leaves it open to interpretation. I see it as a '50s type carnival, personally... We just don't have that type of thing these days.
Great read as always.
on 5/8/2015 5:27:06 PM with a score of 0
It's a lot shorter than I'm used to. By the way, Pervus and his clowns were my go to guys for dirty work
-- Reader on 4/17/2015 9:22:15 PM with a score of 0
STAY FAR AWAY. THE PINK HAS SPOKEN.
-- Pinkiepie4449 on 4/2/2015 11:09:40 AM with a score of 0
on 3/28/2015 5:33:22 PM with a score of 0
I liked it and I got a happy ending
-- Hayley on 2/23/2015 3:53:25 AM with a score of 0
I really enjoyed it! It was dark and enjoyable. Certainly one of your best! 7/8
on 2/15/2015 10:02:37 AM with a score of 0
I thought the game was okay. The writing was pretty good, with minor redundancies and errors; a lot better than some of the stuff on here.
The plot seemed interesting, but I wasn't really a fan of the ableism (I thought that the ableism was actually pretty minor considering the subject matter, but using the r-slur definitely messed that up) or the rampant transphobia regarding the ring master.
The story was pretty interesting, though, and well-written!
-- Chris on 2/14/2015 2:59:49 PM with a score of 0
-- Alvern on 12/20/2014 9:30:12 AM with a score of 0
The writing was brilliant and involving. Making tactical decisions is straight forward if you take the time to read the side information. I especially like the writing that involved the ring master, it was well done and imaginative. Though the game was short the characters were really fleshed out. Well worth taking the time to read this master piece.
on 12/12/2014 6:51:22 AM with a score of 0
I love carneys!
on 11/19/2014 10:35:36 AM with a score of 0
-- Aspen on 11/18/2014 12:54:32 PM with a score of 0
it was good. but a bit quite short compare to your other stories.
on 9/24/2014 8:58:17 PM with a score of 0
Trying to find the right factions to side with to get the best possible ending was fun.
on 9/11/2014 5:07:27 AM with a score of 0
Salina is the worst
on 6/19/2014 7:08:56 PM with a score of 0
Its a stepup
on 6/16/2014 5:39:50 PM with a score of 0
This is a rather humorous read. I liked it.
on 5/31/2014 11:51:10 AM with a score of 0
Dont know what to say..
on 5/24/2014 2:52:11 PM with a score of 0
Awesome story, I liked the whole carnival theme, the only thing I could be negative at is the grammar.
on 3/9/2014 12:34:52 PM with a score of 0
8/8 gave me the reason to live.
on 1/18/2014 4:15:11 PM with a score of 0
Lol. When you get more featured stories than me, be sure to let me on the secret!
on 10/22/2013 1:30:21 AM with a score of 0
Um... what the hell?
Screw this game. Seriously. You've got a lot to learn about what makes a story compelling instead of repelling.
on 10/22/2013 12:28:37 AM with a score of 0
On the side lines Pervus and the clowns are masturbating to the carnage..... Okay please spare me 7/8
on 9/11/2013 12:11:41 AM with a score of 0
huh, neat little game, enjoyed how you could infulence events, enjoyed the political struggle that went on, the description of the people was great, found all the endings and I personally liked the Demonic Clown Circus the best. Very convincing.
-- Who really cares? on 8/14/2013 7:47:46 AM with a score of 0
Dark, entertaining and interesting as usual from Endmaster!
on 7/24/2013 11:07:21 AM with a score of 0
Interesting Premise, shows a deep knowledge of the Circus World. I liked the characterizations. All in all a good job!
on 7/20/2013 9:46:53 PM with a score of 0
One of the best I've played, so many endings.
It's really addictive! Love it!
(Lost my damn password so I'm commenting like this, and my rating probably won't count as much, but y'know)
-- Bobby Parkhurst on 7/20/2013 4:22:44 PM with a score of 0
I really do enjoy the storygame. I think I got one of the shorter endings(I still want to see the other endings)I have yet to explore more of this story...but I truly enjoyed this storygame. Wonderful work.
on 5/28/2013 9:22:19 PM with a score of 0
Here's the thing with your story- I am afraid that some people will be offended by this.
on 5/20/2013 7:53:52 PM with a score of 0
this has some nasty language I wouldn't read if you don't like cussing.
on 5/19/2013 11:08:51 AM with a score of 0
those clowns are so twisted.
-- rusty on 5/2/2013 4:29:14 PM with a score of 0
did anyone else notice that on the second or third page the ringmaster is a woman... she swivels her chair... then at the bottom of the page hes a man? he swivels his chair... just thought i'd point that out.
on 4/21/2013 3:11:13 PM with a score of 0
A very dark, macabre world, but interesting. I liked having to 'discover' more about the factions as I played. The relatively short length of a single playthrough also made it helpful for me, since the tone would have been too much for a longer sitting.
on 4/13/2013 3:03:54 AM with a score of 0
Weird weird weird. I didn't like it, for the weirdness. 6/8 because you're Endmaster and you are good at provoking feelings.
on 2/3/2013 7:21:43 AM with a score of 0
urh, dude, where do you pull this shit out of
you must have been one damned paranoid kid, thinking all clowns were rapests and perverts.
Good writing though, and not very menny spelling mistakes at all.
on 2/3/2013 2:49:36 AM with a score of 0
I hate clowns, but good work.
on 2/2/2013 1:32:14 PM with a score of 0
one re great story by endmaster ! made me lol and keep me reading i recomend Geek for anyone looking to kill time
on 1/20/2013 4:49:33 PM with a score of 0
boooooo its too short
-- justin on 1/14/2013 5:05:43 PM with a score of 0
Amazing plot,but minor grammar errors the characters were amazing and i felt IMPORTANT another of Endmasters great works of text art.
9.999 out of 10
-- TheImmortalOmegagoldfish on 11/16/2012 8:33:46 PM with a score of 0
i love the characters in this story and how well they are defined i also also wanted to say how i always imagined charley as hornswoggle from the wwe
on 10/27/2012 10:38:15 PM with a score of 0
think of something better
on 10/4/2012 4:55:33 PM with a score of 0
on 7/24/2012 5:19:20 AM with a score of 0
EndMaster's stories have real writing. Tremendous work!
on 6/26/2012 2:07:43 PM with a score of 0
This is...not bad.
-- Stay near to it on 6/13/2012 2:02:36 AM with a score of 0
Interesting game, but too wordy
on 4/15/2012 11:03:24 PM with a score of 0
on 2/27/2012 10:15:14 AM with a score of 0
Very interesting and entertaining. Took quite a lot of work, without a doubt. Lots of respect. A great story all round.
on 2/19/2012 3:03:12 AM with a score of 0
on 2/18/2012 5:31:38 PM with a score of 0
I enjoyed this! BOOYAA! XD
on 12/22/2011 6:34:04 PM with a score of 0
on 9/21/2011 9:35:28 AM with a score of 0
I really liked this, it was a long read and it was nice to get all the separate endings. I finished with every outcome possible! Nicely done, the only qualm I have is I wanted a happier ending, but the 2 nicer endings fit. Very Good job!
on 9/16/2011 4:59:52 PM with a score of 0
I loved it.
on 8/30/2011 7:28:05 PM with a score of 0
I like games that end in random death. The more unbeleiveable the death the better. The whole carnival theme set up a lot of gory, freaky, and hilarious deaths. I am saddened that you just get beat to death. I was searching for a good death like choking on cotton candy or getting eaten alive by giant mutant circus rats, at leas something along those lines.
on 7/21/2011 1:40:09 AM with a score of 0
Epic game. I like how you actually added a decent plot, unlike most games. I could visualise the 'carnival' world you made. Interesting characters, too.
on 6/10/2011 12:08:34 AM with a score of 0
Interesting, but I like some of your other stories more.
on 5/3/2011 1:58:14 AM with a score of 0
Bo dissaproves, bask in the shame
on 5/2/2011 8:16:52 PM with a score of 0
This game was good, alot of language, bu good. i got a good ending. also like the part where salina killed the dwarfs
on 5/1/2011 9:39:35 AM with a score of 0
Fuck you "?"
on 1/16/2011 9:16:21 PM with a score of 0
so... that was, well i dont really get it and uh... yeah
-- ? on 1/15/2011 9:40:33 PM with a score of 0
I strated the game, clicked 1 link and died.
normally this would suck, but it had a lot of detail it was funny, and by endmaster
on 8/14/2010 11:07:00 AM with a score of 0
An original concept that tells an interesting story. Id love to see this in an rpg like Fallout.
on 7/3/2010 12:59:01 PM with a score of 0
on 2/26/2010 9:58:52 AM with a score of 0
I made the wrong choice every time, but I don't mind, because that was the best ending yet!
on 11/11/2008 7:20:48 PM with a score of 0
Huh... a slightly better ending, but I think I'll try one more time. And again, this is a SUPERB game. The clowns are very creepy.
on 11/11/2008 7:09:23 PM with a score of 0
Yikes... what a way to go. I will definitely want to play this again, and see if I can get an even remotely happy ending. Another magnificent story, everything done well, especially characters! I give it two thumbs up.
on 11/10/2008 9:45:10 PM with a score of 0
Wow, I never knew carnivals were like that (except for the clowns)
on 8/24/2008 6:44:18 PM with a score of 0
I saw a History Channel show - Wild West Tech - about Carnie shit, and there was a part about "Geeks". Great story based on a weird subject!
on 7/8/2008 11:12:02 PM with a score of 0
This is great. It's the same story for each scenario, except you're on a different side. It follows a formula for whose side you choose, and it just feels right, you did an excellent job of characterizing everyone, and creating a demented perverse world, everything was set up to put you in the perspective of the geek, a goal not attempted by most storytellers. It's exactly what it needs to be, and what it is....is messed up.
on 4/4/2008 2:58:44 AM with a score of 0
I just explained this in another comment...in fact its mentioned in the damn story. Nobody knows what the hell gender The Ring Master is! Hence the deliberate chaotic use of he/she when referring to her/him!
on 1/17/2008 3:18:49 PM with a score of 0
Other than the she/he inconsistencies that was a great game.
on 1/16/2008 8:55:41 PM with a score of 0
Perverse and awesome. 7/8
on 1/12/2008 6:17:04 PM with a score of 0
its was an ok game, although the carnival setting is kind of weird for a CYOA game and the clowns seriously freaked me out...
-- tgan3 on 12/18/2007 3:09:01 AM with a score of 0
Not a typo, I deliberately interchange the pronouns when it comes to the Ring Master. His background info mentions that nobody knows what gender she is exactly.
on 12/4/2007 8:47:29 AM with a score of 0
"the Ring Master orders from behind his desk. She’s siting in his chair, but has her back turned to you." thats a typo of He/She. other than that, a great read. I really enjoyed it. not the best you have, but a good one.
on 12/3/2007 4:48:39 PM with a score of 0
Brilliant game Endmaster! Brilliant!
-- Rommel on 12/3/2007 12:55:13 AM with a score of 0