Go Get The Mail!

Player Rating3.88/8

"#343 overall, #28 for 2014"
based on 106 ratings since 11/25/2014
played 1,287 times (finished 136)

Story Difficulty2/8

"walk in the park"

Play Length4/8

"A well spent lunch break"

Maturity Level4/8

"need to be accompanied by an adult"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG.

Tags

Humor

You have a simple task -- go and get the mail. Oh, it sounds easy, but could you ever imagine how many different things could get in your way?

This is my first attempt at a storygame. It's a very basic "Choose your path" story. Let me know what you think of it in the forums!

Player Comments

I don't know what to think...

So, we definitely have some good humor here, but in the mixture we have heavy doses of lolrandom. Lolrandom humor can be good, but using it extensively (to cover plotholes and leave gaps) is a big no-no for storywriting.

The storygame itself was rather illogical at some points, and a lot of the choices didn't make much sense. The storygame uses a type of reverse psychology, in which doing the exact opposite of what you should is the best option at some points.

The neighborhood did seem like one of a kind. A bully that doesn't mind killing you, murderous rabbits, dogs that can result in your death...

It was a good plot. I loved the idea of making such a simple task into a storygame. Not many authors can do such a thing.

The setting could have been fleshed out a bit more as well.

I liked the character development (although there wasn't a lot), but I was able to feel for these characters I suppose, in a humorous sort of way.

The grammar was nearly perfect. One quick proofreading can fix this.

3/8, pretty average.
-- MinnieKing on 5/18/2017 8:55:35 PM
Getting the mail has never been more difficult. This story was quite random and humorous, whenever I was making my best attempt on surviving the horrors of the neighborhood. Between the kiler rabbits, dogs, and pretty much... Well, everything else.

This game was rather fun.
-- TharaApples on 10/18/2016 11:38:25 AM
Got to the point where I didn't care enough to get the mail and just killed myself by walking through the construction site to end the game. There is no motivation, there is no reason, but at least you've visibly improved in writing since 2014.
-- AzBaz on 4/29/2018 7:17:13 AM
Okay...

Interesting, a little funny, but also super confusing. Killer bunny? Murderous bully? Construction site of doom... Sewers? Good idea, but some of the paths don't make much sense. Like, why go in the sewers at all? Why not go all the way around the house to avoid having to take the grossest swim of your life? Though that is a lot of stuff to do, for you in the past.

Still a fun game, though.
-- BunnyCatMouse99100 on 2/2/2018 9:23:32 PM
I really enjoyed the humour with this one, you want to go down every path apart from the objective just to get more laughs.

After a while intentionally killing myself in funny and random ways, I then hilariously won the game in a pretty clever way, that I think was quite deeply and well hidden for this very reason. GG
-- Vinnykin on 1/23/2018 10:19:31 PM
This is the best mail getting adventure ever!
I just love every part of it.
-- LeoCaesar on 1/23/2018 7:57:01 PM
I didn't really feel like getting the mail so I appreciate the game letting me wander all around the neighborhood in the opposite direction and then eventually drown in a river of raw sewage instead.
-- mizal on 1/20/2018 4:57:12 PM
This was a really good short story!
-- MusicalNerd7 on 1/3/2018 9:31:50 PM
Despite the large number of death links, this was very enjoyable and rather fun to play, if only to navigate myself around a maze of blundering into the same parade of elephants and cops who taser you for walking on the wrong side of the road. It did feel rather linear, however.

Maybe it's your writing style, but I didn't mind the amount of death links. I'm not sure why. It takes a while for the reader to get the end, and even then they're denied their mail. There really ought to be some kind of reward in place. I mean, why was I forced to swim through a sewer just to get there?
-- Saika on 8/10/2017 11:28:07 AM
It took a few tries, but I finally got it! Can't wait for more
-- jster02 on 6/11/2017 8:41:07 PM
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