Halloween Assignment

Player Rating3.09/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 22 ratings since 09/23/2017
played 190 times (finished 32)

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length4/8

"A well spent lunch break"

Maturity Level6/8

"I'll need to see some identification"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 16. If this were a movie, it would probably between PG-13 and R.



This was literally an idea taken from my Halloween assignment in fourth grade. Of course I will elaborate and use an expanded vocabulary, but..... yeah. Enjoy 

Player Comments

-- Victim on 10/12/2017 3:36:17 PM
Badly in need of proof reading, I was spotting quite a few misspelled words and punctuation issues.

As for the story itself, I wasn't expecting much after the uninspiring title and description, but there's at least a decent amount of writing here with effort put in.

I kept wondering WHY I was running around the neighborhood in the dark when that was pretty much at the bottom of the list of ideas I'd have attempted in real life...)round the neighborhood in the dark after some sinister figure, and the game even acknowledged this didn't make any sense while not letting me do anything else.

It seems like there's an ending every couple of clicks, and every one is just the creepy guy randomly doing a different horrible thing to you, without anything in the way of explanation. Some kind of consistent plot thread would have been welcome.

So...could have been better, could have been worse. The lack of proof reading definitely hurt it. But while I can't say I'd recommend this as is, with some more attention to detail and a plot that made your choices matter more I don't see any reason the author couldn't go on to write some much higher quality stories in the future.
-- mizal on 10/6/2017 10:48:50 PM
It feels like the game moves a little fast. One moment you're tracking this figure and the next you're dead. In the longest path, there is a slight ambiance built, but there isn't really much meat in there. Your descriptions need a bit more flavor, it seems as if they were fairly bland. Shadowy figures are mysterious, but they don't invoke imagination. Especially when you see the all the time. I'd have someone proofread for comma splices as well. This story would definitely have benefited from some suspense and exploration. Maybe finding clues from previous victims, or catching the antagonists in the act. Something that would engage the reader and give them a sense of the impending danger and a desire to get away. The slow burn to the heart pounding chase. Instead the lack of build up and payoff for the chase lead to a lack of me being invested.

Spoilers Ahead:
Spoiler Alert: Is it even possible to win? Doesn't seem like any of the endings are ideal or particularly rewarding or even satisfying. Like I said before, foreshadowing would have been nice. By the time you realize you're in serious danger, you're in an inescapable path to death. By the 3rd time I got hosed, I wasn't even clicking with an intent to explore. I was just mindlessly clicking to the next death screen.
-- Tyrannosaurusrex on 10/5/2017 5:24:30 PM
while i definitely enjoy these games, this was a bit bland. you could have expanded your choices, given it a bit of substance, et cetera. i could tell some effort was put into this game and it’s creation, but you could have done leagues better. maybe next time add a bit more flour to your pancake mix, and a bit more flavor. your story is like a pancake that kid have been great, but as if you forgot to put enough salt and sugar. keep writing!
-- At_Your_Throat on 9/24/2017 3:20:06 PM
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