HOW NOT TO WRITE- A Pokemon Adventure - Part 1 - Chapter I - Section A: The Beginning of the Start

Player Rating0/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on ratings since 12/08/2015
played 1,283 times (finished 197)

Story Difficulty8/8

"mosie through a minefield"

Play Length4/8

"A well spent lunch break"

Maturity Level7/8

"anything goes"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 18. If this were a movie, it would probably be R.

Rule 1: Unless your story is at least 100 pages long you shouldn't divide it into parts and pay some attention to choosing the correct Maturity, Difficulty and Tags for your story.

As I happen to be on holiday for the first time in about 900 years I've managed to write a little story game offering some examples I've brainstormed or seen recently in badly-written stories of how not to write. Like it's older cousin, The Land of Bad Writing, this story uses examples of bad writing as a way of showing how not to write and I don't have any one story in mind particularly in writing this, just practitioners of bad writing in general.

I've decided to base this story on Pokemon for no other reason than the fact Fan Fiction requires less creativity than most other styles of writing and because Pokemon reminds me of when I was a little Will11 and I, my ten brothers (all coincidently called Will as well) and my nine sisters (the Wilmas 1 to 9) would gather behind the nuclear waste and anthrax testing facility in the woods outside our little trailer park called Asbetos to trade black market Pokemon cards for Plutonium with a mixture of Gypsies, Elves and the Dutch... basically I'm writing about Pokemon because I'm feeling a little Nostalgic today :D

(Rule 1.5: Don't write lengthy and pointless descriptions offering fake autobiographies to your readers).

Player Comments

This was delightfully hilarious, thank you for writing this!
-- StrykerL on 1/18/2017 10:57:34 AM
The greatest work of literature ever produced by mankind.
-- Kwism1127 on 1/16/2017 8:22:37 PM
This was really funny, and my friends agreed when I showed it to them. I really appreciated seeing these common mistakes addressed in a humorous way. You really should make a second one of these, or at least one with a different theme (Percy Jackson, Harry Potter, etc.)

7/8
-- Snowflame on 1/10/2017 9:47:20 PM
amazing
-- Fromnono on 1/8/2017 5:31:52 AM
It gave me a good laugh, and was different than other story games. I see these common mistakes in many story games, and I hope that not only I learned something from this, but also the community so that we can better our writing as a whole.
-- Zulutrader on 12/5/2016 10:09:59 AM
This was a very unique story idea! Everything was nicely fit into each other and made sense. On many storygames, I would comment on how it ended abruptly, but obviously that was the whole point of yours. Nice job.
-- Crescentstar on 12/4/2016 11:17:17 PM
Um did you just write this just so you could be lazy and make all those mistakes?

Just kidding, this was very helpful. 6/8.
-- MinnieKing on 12/3/2016 8:33:13 PM
To short.
But I found it surprisingly helpful :3.
-- Stormfeather on 11/25/2016 2:41:30 PM
woah...
-- Dani28 on 11/25/2016 1:21:00 PM
Wow. Good advice and I found this very funny.
-- SophiaDragonHart on 11/23/2016 4:27:34 PM
Show All Comments