Overthrown: The Makings of a God

Player Rating5.39/8

"#160 overall, #17 for 2011"
based on 278 ratings since 04/09/2011
played 5,670 times (finished 292)

Story Difficulty1/8

"no possible way to lose"

Play Length3/8

"A nice jog down the driveway"

Maturity Level7/8

"anything goes"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 18. If this were a movie, it would probably be R.

Live as Gaius, a demigod sired by none other than the Lord of the Gods himself, Zeus, in an attempt to right some wrongs. You live in ancient Greece where monsters, Gods, and other unworldly beings walk the Earth alongside mortals.

A group of refugees are escaping from their hometown of Cione. They told of a giant so terrifying that even Gods fear it. As a hero who aims to make a name for himself, what would you do?

Discover and live a story unlike anything you've witnessed before.

As this is my very first game (it's more of a story so...) Please don't expect anything exceptional. I didn't try to make it a game where you win or lose, it's a story and the choices you make just changes how the story will go and you can only have one ending. You can never lose, unfortunately. Rate this how you would rate a story, not a game.

This story is for hardcore readers only, if you're not prepared to read a lot then this is not for you...

Player Comments

The writing was good at the begging but started to fall of in the middle of the story. It started to become a bit rushed and your rising action felt a bit more like an ending. Some of it was confusing and then the random events started to happen. Like oh my Pegasus is old let me let him go, cool but it doesn’t ad to the story. If you are going to add “fillers” add multiple or it just seems random, and make it contribute to the actual story in someway shape or form.

I liked the fact that you added captions that gave the reader hints, but the only issue with that is the fact that it makes it less immersive. If your trying to immerse your crowd in the story game don’t add these comments. But if your going for a story game on the funnier side than add them. Immersing your readers is very important it can make a break a story. If you have your reader gasping at the plot twist or crying at a main character’s death you have done your job. Adding comments like don’t get your panties in a bunch ruins that though they may be funny. The key to making a good story in general is to emotionally connect with the reader, if it means being funny then add these comments but I don’t think your story wasn’t meant to be funny so that’s my tidbit of advice

Your grammar is good but don’t quote me on that because I absolutely suck when it comes to stuff like that. But I didn’t catch any spelling or grammar errors
I thought the horrible monster was typhoon it was confusing there were a lot of monsters and since they weren’t distantly identified I got a few of the mixed up.
Also I don’t like how you didn’t earn becoming a god, it kind of randomly happened. Becoming a god like you said was rare of zueses sons especially him granting it to you, so just saying The plot twist was okay but next time make it less predictable oh sacrifice comes with ebing a god who’s he going to sacrifice his family obviously make it more elusive more shocking and like I said before emotional.
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Lastly some of the things that happened in this story were too coincidental I see this a lot but you did an excellent job of taming it down until the end. When he became a god you kind off lost it but for the most part good story 5/8

-- Davefaster on 6/2/2019 11:25:00 PM with a score of 0
This was a good entertaining read, and while some might criticise you for a its linearity, I think this style works and it does make it replayable.

I did enjoy this story and your writing style is pretty good, but I thought character development felt sorta empty. The protagonist's emotions and motives seem too simple. He wants to save people just because, and afterwards he feels angry because his village was destroyed. I think you could have given him more depth.
-- 31TeV on 9/11/2014 4:42:38 AM with a score of 0
pretty good
-- holylemonaple on 9/30/2020 2:56:44 PM with a score of 0
This story was way too linear for my liking.
-- InvictusXL on 4/14/2019 7:33:07 AM with a score of 0
It's pretty good but all roads led back to the main story, which was a little boring.
-- Dizastorm on 2/9/2018 3:18:59 PM with a score of 0
Liked it. Good story.
-- Oberon on 11/4/2017 12:28:33 PM with a score of 0
nice nice nice
-- lob on 7/4/2017 11:19:01 AM with a score of 0
8/8
-- EpicFirebird on 3/26/2017 6:15:23 PM with a score of 0
great story but i thought sand came out of
Antaeus not mud
-- ApeKing4 on 3/18/2017 7:40:14 AM with a score of 0
Foolish Zeus making Ares' mistake (god of war game)
-- Idoit on 1/15/2017 7:20:17 PM with a score of 0
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