Player Rating4.03/8

"#431 overall, #34 for 2011"
based on 162 ratings since 02/19/2011
played 3,668 times (finished 272)

Story Difficulty4/8

"march in the swamp"

Play Length4/8

"A well spent lunch break"

Maturity Level4/8

"need to be accompanied by an adult"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG.

You are in a small peasant village. You know nothing of the outside world. Your goal in life is to eat, sleep, and not get punished by the cruel soldiers. What are you going to do when soldiers come after you and you are given the chance of a lifetime to escape and maybe find freedom and a new life?

---------------------Author's notes--------------------

Some of the pages you'll die instantly unless you use a specific item. To get certain items, you have to get to a certain page. I'll give you an example: If you make it out of the forest, this guy will try to kill you. There is only one way to kill him, but you need a specific item you would've found in the forest.

Heeheeahahah and I-fergie14233- have worked hard on this, so we hope you enjoy this. It has been hard, but worth it because personally, I believe this is a magnificent piece of work, showing determination, love, and trust can bring you riches....along with some help from friends.

Finally, have fun with this!

Player Comments

Not bad at all, but it could use some tuning. Primarily, I wouldn't call this story 'extremely long' whatsoever. It's length 5. The adventure was cool but with a lack of background information about me, I noticed a distinct disconnect. Your grammar in the first few pages needs work but it sorts itself out as the story continues. Finally, I'd definitely suggest not blowing your own horn so much. Sentences like: "I believe this is a magnificent piece of work, showing determination, love, and trust can bring you riches....along with some help from friends." make you seem really pretentious and full of yourself even though we all know that you aren't. Good story though, has serious potential. Your writing is improving exponentially.
-- JJJ-thebanisher on 2/21/2011 3:01:05 PM with a score of 80
I am so confused. How do you win? But other than me not being able to win, what I saw of the story it seemed pretty solid.
-- stargirl on 12/23/2020 11:06:32 AM with a score of 80
How? Do you? Finish? The game?
-- Bella1963 on 1/10/2020 9:17:37 AM with a score of 100
love it bby
-- joshy925 on 2/11/2019 10:47:34 PM with a score of 20
It was okay didn't take long then i got shot in the head so that's interesting i am jsut gonna move on to antoher story now
-- Kevin on 5/28/2018 12:54:58 PM with a score of 10
One section of the story was missing. It was the part where you chose not to eat the berries. Other then that, I thought it was great.
-- MagicalMonkey on 5/20/2018 6:30:37 PM with a score of 90
Yeah, not a bad story, except what's the deal with the knife? I don't get the chance to really use it and if I do the knife fly back to stab me in my chest??? @@
-- TestingJest on 12/6/2017 3:12:48 AM with a score of 110
Quite short, but it is still excellent and the items are very well implemented. The only bad thing I can say, is that it is quite easy to figure out when you need to use an item.
-- Meru on 10/6/2017 3:51:07 PM with a score of 140
How da puck with dis thing
I can't pucking win!!!!!!!!!!
-- LOLiHAVEnoFACE on 8/7/2017 9:22:05 AM with a score of 10
-- MoonlightRose on 3/25/2017 1:09:32 PM with a score of 60
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