Setinel

Player Rating3.07/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 89 ratings since 06/08/2013
played 657 times (finished 81)

Story Difficulty6/8

"wandering through the desert"

Play Length3/8

"A nice jog down the driveway"

Maturity Level6/8

"I'll need to see some identification"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 16. If this were a movie, it would probably between PG-13 and R.

I have no idea who I am. I woke up in a cell one day with a girl and found I was kidnapped by 3 sadistic men. I saved 2 lives and commanded a spaceship. I'm bringing the downfall of the evil Arachnius Oligarchs. I spend every waking moment hoping tomorrow I'll live to see the sun rise. What makes you think that being captured and brought to my knees to die is going to suprise me? Burn in hell you communist animals.

Player Comments

1. Unless the original work is long enough to need a sequel (which this isn't) or the works focus changes (main character changes) there should not be a cliff hangar to a story. Unless, of course, you aren't planning on doing a sequel, and you were just being lazy which is worse.
2. Don't really know enough about the characters to care about whats occurring.
3. Wasn't the girl wearing a blue armor when we first met her? Since the writing says the opposite later on I believe (though I may be wrong about that)

However, writing was decent.
-- Aman on 4/29/2013 11:31:09 PM
You have a nice story going on here...

But then again, I had no idea whatsoever about the backstory, and the history, and the situation. Pretty short as well, but at least it's got some meat on it. Also, it's "Sentinel". So, if you can clean up your story by adding some clarity, you're set for some higher ratings.

Check back occasionally for the comments you get. Some might be helpful, some might be harmful.
-- Swiftstryker on 4/29/2013 10:32:43 PM
This would be a great story, but you didn’t spend enough time on it. Good story though!
-- The_Broken_God on 4/18/2019 12:11:59 PM
I enjoyed your game. It was very short but interesting.
-- Faervel on 2/8/2019 1:45:01 PM
You received an ehh? on the NomNom scale! You're writing left me confused, and also there wasn't enough back story to figure out what was going on. I feel like you just abandoned a puppy in a cardboard box on a dark street, and the puppy being your story. So, I guess nice try?

Conversion Chart:
yuk!=0-1 stars
eh!=1-1.9 stars
meh...=2-2.9 stars
nom=3-3.9 stars
nomnom=4-4.9 stars
nomnomnom!=5-6 stars
-- Cake_Oi on 1/30/2019 9:59:30 AM
The cliff hanger at the end of the story is kind of annoying. There are a lot of grammar mistakes, though besides for that I like the way you write. I wish that this was longer and more detailed. 3/8
-- caitm on 11/4/2018 9:31:04 AM
Nice.
-- crusader on 7/2/2016 4:46:04 PM
Needs more development and length, also a bit too linear
-- corgi213 on 1/1/2016 11:21:25 AM
It's spelled "Sentinel" by the way.
-- TheMonitor on 7/15/2015 4:43:48 PM
Good start, needs more to it though. Longer story. History of empires. What happened to all the adults.
-- Walker. on 5/10/2014 7:24:08 PM
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