Snow Love

It's better than my first game.

My number one suggestion would be to have the choices the player makes have some logical relation to the outcomes.

For example, whether or not Alice goes skating determines her sexual orientation, which doesn't make a lot of sense. It would be better if there was something like "If I go skating, maybe I'll see so-and-so there" so that the player feels like they have some control over the outcome of the story.

You show a lot of promise, keep writing.

Your writing varies, at some points it's pretty good, and at other points it's lacking. For example, "Quickly unlocking the door, he puts me down on the nearby couch, then quickly runs into the bedroom. He soon quickly returns, carrying some pajamas and a large blanket." You need to refine your writing. Go over and make sure things are done right.

You should also proofread more because of lines like this, "Your what?! IT'S MY LIVE! What gives you the right to tell what to do or not?"

I would like to see greater branching. The story was good enough that I'd like to explore more branches of it.

I love this story, I ended with the gay one.

its good good game 😊
Have a god day or night

the only part I really liked was the part where Rachel and Alice tricked the guys, also why is it that skating or not skating is what gets you a guy/girl for a date?

The characters are such poor imitations of human beings that the grinch even cannot handle all that cringe I have gotten when reading the story.

No normal girl or any person talks or thinks like that. It's like someone wanted to shove a puppy down my throat while constantly saying: "look how cute it is, don't you find him cute, say that he's cute."

Oh and I've gotten Darren's ending!

Really fun game! Just a few things... I wish you could choose what your name is and I also wish you could choose if you are a girl or a boy. Other than that it’s an awesome game!

FIN

oh look another anime story with pictures in it, nice effort in putting those in, even if a lot of them were of different characters.

Thought this was fanfic at first for what it was, as it read out completely like one.

The plot was there and carried what needed to be carried, but the description of a lot the story was kind of bare and could have had a lot more added that probably would have raised the story by a overall point.

Also lol at the sexual orientation, fucking zeus out here deciding at random whether I like dick or pussy.

also wtf did i get undressed without consent, i'm calling a hotline.

I really liked the story. I got both endings, but me being an idiot I died once in each path.

Rated a 1/8 just because of the classic and always cringe nIcE cOmMeNtS oNlY from the author. But the story itself was also pretty bad and in no way deserving of the 4+ rating it managed to get seven years ago from undiscerning weebs.