Player Comments on Surviving Pre-School
This story is phenomenal. It certainly was quite an adventure going through it, and not only was it paced fairly well, the comedy was golden. In fact I dare say it is the main selling point of the whole story. It is clear from this story as well as his others that oger excelles at telling very funny stories. That seems to be his writing style in my eyes. Let me go over two main things that this story does. One well, and one that it could have done better.
Comedy: In my eyes the story nailed this. It took the reader into a world seen through the eyes of a preschooler. While this concept is certainly bizar, the way it is told makes it even more so. Pages like feet show you how a concept like this can be used to its full potential. This concept, along with the author’s distinct writing style make for a story that had me laughing out loud multiple times throughout.
Branching: I feel this could have been handled much better. It boiled down to a very linear story, and if you’re going to do that you need to have at least some short paths branching off. A one page death path at the very least. While there were choices almost every page, most of them boiled down to new text leading to the same next page. There are good liner stories, though most of those consist of at the end giving you an ending based on the choices you made. While this story sort of did that, it did it once. If you did badly then you will get the bad ending. In fact, it can happen at any point near the end of the story, provided you made the bad choices required.
Conclusion: This story is a great one. I love a lot of things about it and you should read it if you are reading this. This story will not disappoint you.
on 9/22/2019 3:29:17 PM with a score of 0
This game captured the essence of childhood really well, it made me wish I was that age again through the child's thought process. I wish my problems involved dragons in books. :(
It actually brought back a few of my own Kindergarten memories, so thanks for that I always enjoy a good memory flash in my brain.
The extended metaphor of the prison was also very clever and well done. I liked how it started in the cot and then moved to the kindy. I interpreted it as the child's state of having no power over anything and feeling trapped.
One thing that was a bit weird was the age of the kid. Kindy aged kids normally don't sleep in a cot or still breastfeed?
I found the story very lighthearted and pretty funny. The transgender book thing was pretty good and I also enjoyed the mum dumping her kid and gapping it- it reminded me of my mum!
Each page flowed seamlessly from each choice to the next and it felt like I was reading a book. It was easy to play and although short still had a pretty decent plot.
Definitely deserves to be in the top 10 for 2017, well done :)
on 1/16/2019 3:05:12 AM with a score of 0
This certainly fulfilled the humor part. I loved the perspective of our protagonist, and the way you wrote about Pre-School made everything hilarious as we all have graduated it. I didn't notice any major issues, and the plot-line was spot on.
When I was playing the game, it certainly seemed like a prison when you were describing it. The prison guards, lunch-time.. Everything had a funny element to it. The endings were random, but I enjoyed them. I should have expected the "Sexual Harassment" ending, so I was a bit shocked, but laughing all the same.
This game was extremely amusing and entertaining. This certainly didn't lack any details, and I noticed no grammatical/spelling mistakes whatsoever so I'm quite pleased. It was a bit short, but otherwise, it was excellent.
on 11/25/2017 11:08:02 PM with a score of 0
good young one
-- aaron daniel carroll on 9/8/2020 1:52:21 PM with a score of 0
I got the third ending... I guess I'm a 4 year old sex offender now -_-
on 7/25/2020 11:17:04 AM with a score of 0
Light humor. Nice theme perspective for a toddler. Overall not deeply immersive and negative ending was a bit slapped together (sexual predator?).
on 7/14/2020 2:23:16 PM with a score of 0
Great game! A good laugh in the evening; exactly what I needed! Highly recommend it, pretty hilarious, like the dream part with machineguns and such, added more humor to it.
-- rorytheassassin logged out on 6/28/2020 6:28:50 AM with a score of 0
I loved the part where I almost got kidnapped! lol
on 5/25/2020 12:25:49 AM with a score of 0
I like this, but it sounds similar to another game iv'e played on another storygame website. Other than that the game was fun especially with the idea of playing as a baby/toddler.
on 5/25/2020 12:18:58 AM with a score of 0
-- noname on 4/9/2020 5:58:49 PM with a score of 0
-- Bob on 3/17/2020 11:44:28 PM with a score of 0
Sexual Harrasment? Wow. Just.. wow. I just wanted someone to snuggle with.
-- Hi on 2/16/2020 7:11:15 PM with a score of 0
wow, pre-school is fun kind of.:|
on 12/1/2019 8:48:47 AM with a score of 0
-- James on 11/14/2019 11:20:23 AM with a score of 0
im a sex offender now l0l
on 10/13/2019 7:16:19 AM with a score of 0
It was pretty good, but I definitely was NOT expecting that ending...
on 10/3/2019 8:44:41 PM with a score of 0
did the good ending
on 9/12/2019 3:39:47 PM with a score of 0
just did bad ending
on 9/12/2019 3:38:05 PM with a score of 0
I love it!
on 9/12/2019 12:46:55 AM with a score of 0
I thought this was cute and well written for the perspective of a baby! A bit strange that you don’t know what your own toes were, yet you could vividly picture flying on a drone and shooting up preschool, but that is part of the charm of this story. I found two endings and thought both were well done. It seems conditional links based on how often you don’t listen determine when and if you get sent home. I could not find the third ending, but may search again. I appreciate that I was warned that is was supposed to be short and silly, because out of context it would be really strange.
on 8/26/2019 4:12:46 PM with a score of 0
on 6/5/2019 10:04:18 PM with a score of 0
How is snuggling with a friend sexual harrasment
-- Pink girl on 2/3/2019 10:52:05 AM with a score of 0
This is such a funny storygame. I wasn't sure if I was going to like it, at first, but I honestly do. It's defiantly different from anything else I've read.
on 1/21/2019 5:35:36 PM with a score of 0
on 1/9/2019 5:06:51 PM with a score of 0
This was a fun game that was pretty funny. I particularly enjoyed the bit with the transgender book cover and the sexual harassment ending. The disappointment over the Cheerios was pretty accurate.
However, it was quite confusing about what the age of the protagonist was supposed to be. He is going to preschool, but often he seems as if he is supposed to be a baby. He still breastfeeds, sleeps in a crib, wears diapers, etc.
on 1/7/2019 3:52:36 PM with a score of 0
I found this really funny, although I believe children are usually potty trained and able to walk by the time they get to preschool. Anyway it was a lot of fun.
on 11/2/2018 12:08:12 PM with a score of 0
I became a baby sex offender...
I don't know whether to laugh or be freaked out.
-- Szy on 10/31/2018 6:59:59 PM with a score of 0
this was a very strange story but in an entertaining style, my preschooler ended up sexually harassing another toddler so that's interesting, it was longer than i expected which was nice
-- pygmypuff on 2/4/2018 10:53:20 AM with a score of 0
Honestly, this is a really cute, funny little story. I don't usually enjoy storygames that are shorter like this, but I absolutely LOVE the writing! You have this great way of capturing a baby's point-of-view perfectly, and it makes the whole story comical and fun. Please, keep up the great work, because this was very enjoyable. 6/8!
on 12/9/2017 6:24:17 AM with a score of 0
pretty funny but I think the story was stupid and pointless. I give it a 4/10
-- Linda on 12/5/2017 3:34:29 AM with a score of 0
I loved the concept of this one. You captured the innocence and childlike wonder of the world. I can't wait to read more of your work.
on 12/4/2017 3:24:31 PM with a score of 0
on 10/10/2017 1:57:50 PM with a score of 0
Pretty fun, and well-written. The "Sexual Harassment" ending was hilarious.
on 10/3/2017 6:24:32 AM with a score of 0
I love this game. Super fun! X3
on 9/25/2017 8:20:57 PM with a score of 0
One of the links wouldn't let me end game and leave comments. :(
Other than that, the game was pretty mediocre. I liked the background which added some extra "feeling" into the game. :)
on 9/24/2017 2:28:38 PM with a score of 0
Well, this does succeed in being a lighthearted and silly game (which is amusing throughout, and funny at times). There's not much more to it, but it's short and sweet - so there's not much to fault here. Nice work!
(PS, there's a broken link [for me at least] to the 'End Game' page when I got the 'spanked ending'.)
on 9/24/2017 11:00:25 AM with a score of 0