The Bloodweepers

Player Rating3.10/8

"#704 overall, #79 for 2014"
based on 73 ratings since 04/20/2014
played 625 times (finished 80)

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level4/8

"need to be accompanied by an adult"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG.

Just a Prototype for an idea I had. If it gets a good response, I may make this a full story. Enjoy! P.S. This is my first story!

Player Comments

It's a good start and the spelling and grammer is better than most of the stuff on this site.

It could make a good story as you know how to write, however "Zombie" has been done to death so it might be better to cut your losses and pick a slightly different theme.

I like it that there are several endings and see potential for a full story if you take the feedback in these comments onboard.
-- Jordi P on 10/23/2014 12:47:43 PM with a score of 0
I get that this is a prototype, but the story was exceedingly...dry. The block of text in each page got to be too fast-paced (try making some text breaks) and each event was a bit disjointed from the last one. You've got an interesting story idea, but the story itself has yet to live up to the idea.
-- Allusional on 4/26/2014 12:21:31 PM with a score of 0
This seems like a promising story, and it is my belief that you should continue it. Since there are a few different endings it might be a little harder to continue from all of them, and if you decide to only keep one ending go with the "Clem" (walking dead) ending since that one seems to have a greater potential, and if done right might even get you featured. You have the idea now just master the story.
-- Lex354 on 4/21/2014 10:51:06 AM with a score of 0
this story is very short but has a lot of story
-- izzy on 1/10/2019 8:25:30 AM with a score of 0
My rating would be higher, had it been longer. Good base story.
-- Quorrah on 9/17/2018 9:07:59 PM with a score of 0
Amazing writing.
-- Chickdove on 5/22/2017 10:41:02 PM with a score of 0
nice story
-- Voltage on 12/12/2016 8:21:06 PM with a score of 0
It feels like there should be more, you know? Because you said this is like the beginning of something bigger, that's understandable, but I'd really like to see this thing fleshed out. I'm excited! A pretty good read.
-- Fenoprofen on 6/11/2015 12:30:51 AM with a score of 0
Pretty much a zombie apocalypse. Nothing groundbreaking.
-- insanebutvain on 9/6/2014 7:54:56 PM with a score of 0
It was a reasonable game, with a slightly cliche subject but has potential. But, it is too short, and you should probably work on making your game a little less cliche and linear. Above all, keep writing, and hopefully you take some things from this game into a new one. 5/8.
-- PortalSpartan on 8/10/2014 8:10:58 PM with a score of 0
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