The Deeps

Player Rating3.59/8

"#557 overall, #63 for 2015"
based on 54 ratings since 11/25/2015
played 581 times (finished 55)

Story Difficulty5/8

"run through the jungle"

Play Length3/8

"A nice jog down the driveway"

Maturity Level5/8

"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.

You awaken in ancient tunnels far underground, with nothing but your rusty sword, your compass, and an unlit torch. Now you must escape by any means necessary.

 

Please leave any mistakes (grammatical, spelling, or with destinations or dead ends) in the comments so I can fix it. This is my first published storygame.

Player Comments

Overall, I liked it. It was a nice little tidbit of a story game with a nice amount of branching paths, imaginative concepts, and great description. However, it would've been nicer if there was an ending (or a path) that explained why I was down in the tunnels in the first place or a bit more backstory in the beginning on who I was playing as, but that is just my preference since I am more inclined towards the story rather than the adventure. Also, there's an ending where I chose to go to the forest to live with some animals, but I think it's unfinished since it seems to be cut short. (The last sentence was just the word 'You' without a period) I hope this helps.
-- tram2001 on 11/23/2015 10:10:18 PM with a score of 0
"West to the river
The peacefulness of the river overwhelms you, so you go to the shore and untie the boat. You step in, which pushes the boat enough to float down the river. There are no oars, but you don't mind. You relax as you float down the river.


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Years later, you own a boat and a small fishing shack. Although not luxurious, you feel very happy. You die happy, and one of your fisherman friends gives you a proper funeral; putting you in your boat with your rusted stick that was once a sword and your old fishing pole and sending you down the river."

Uh... so do i get to know which choice is the 'best' ending in your opinion?
-- TestingJest on 11/30/2017 3:19:26 AM with a score of 0
mhauhahahaha!!! i AM the void
-- AurondragonTyr on 11/2/2017 10:00:54 PM with a score of 0
I was interested in the beginning, but quickly lost interest.

While your descriptions are pretty good, and no spelling/grammar errors jumped out at me, the storygame consisted of live/die links. They provide little branching and are annoying when the person wants to actually read the story.

It's one of the better "first storygames".
-- Crescentstar on 1/2/2017 5:43:13 PM with a score of 0
I created werewolves muhahaha
-- Seto on 6/18/2016 10:50:12 PM with a score of 0
It's great. I like the riddles. Expand a little more on the ending and it will be better.
-- Eric on 12/4/2015 4:19:21 PM with a score of 0
I think that you should give the reader a choice whether to end the story or continue and do something like small missions or something like that. I also think the endings should be a little longer and more descriptive.
-- Magemaster99 on 11/30/2015 3:39:57 PM with a score of 0
I finished the incomplete ending and I made a few more endings.
-- TheBossWriter on 11/25/2015 11:49:55 AM with a score of 0
wait what? im soooooo confused.
-- trolol on 11/24/2015 6:16:26 AM with a score of 0
Honestly wasn't a bad little game. I didn't get to all the endings, but of the one's I did, one wasn't complete. Also it was more maze than story. Otherwise I liked it.
-- bilbo on 11/24/2015 1:01:14 AM with a score of 0
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