The Inner Demons - A Ballad

Player Rating3.14/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 35 ratings since 05/29/2017
played 161 times (finished 34)

Story Difficulty1/8

"no possible way to lose"

Play Length3/8

"A nice jog down the driveway"

Maturity Level5/8

"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.


This (Was going to be) my first contest entry! This particular story (was originally for) the ballad contest. It's not only ballads though. There is a variety of different poems in here. It's about you, the reader, fighting inner demons!


Welp.....I missed the deadline because of  certain family problems, so now I'm doing it for fun. Please enjoy.

Player Comments

It's possible I missed some kind of site wide memo to ignore this one, but I'll toss down some quick thoughts here anyway.

First off, I'm surprised it counted as a 5/8 length, because it seems pretty short? I'm not seeing any paths I missed, the 'choice' part here seems to be just clicking through all the doors until you get to the end. But I suppose there must've been some scripting involved to track whether all the doors had been opened, which may have padded the length a little.

I'm not sure if this would technically count as a ballad but you had some interesting concepts here, I just wish all the mental stuff had been tied to real world events of some kind to flesh out the character or give some kind of backstory.

It's worth something that you were dedicated enough to go back and finish this even after the deadline however, so that probably bodes well for future projects. Keep writing and best of luck with those.

-- mizal on 6/4/2017 5:58:40 PM with a score of 0
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