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"trek through the forest"
"A well spent lunch break"
"I'll need to see some identification"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 16. If this were a movie, it would probably between PG-13 and R.
You decide to go to the mall. What you do there is up to you. It also helps to be in a bad mood when you play this game, so I suggest playing this game on a Macintosh.
And this is mazeman, so expect the game to be offensive, crude, and inappropriate.
It's not the best, obviously, but I feel like there was some obvious effort put into this storygame.
Obviously, you made an attempt, and putting effort in paid off pretty well. This was definitely not bad, but I wouldn't call it "good," either. The formatting is a bit annoying, and there's a very obvious drop in quality about halfway through. There's no rush to publish, make sure the quality doesn't spread thin when writing your storygames.
I guess it was funny at some points, but nothing really special in the humor. It was okay in that department I suppose.
This isn't the shortest storygame i've ever seen, but it could be longer. This storygame has a lot of potential, and felt more like a decent start to me then a whole storygame.
You did have some detail in here, but not enough. There just wasn't enough detail, not to flesh out the setting or the plot.
I'll also say this: you need to develop your characters a bit more so your readers can have an easier time putting themselves in the characters shoes, and so they can have an easier time feeling emotion for them.
on 6/10/2017 1:54:49 AM
One of the few things I liked about this story was that it was long, had plenty of options, and there were points that it was funny. The part I didn't like was that it was to silly, no plot, and you kept making obscure references. It just felt underdeveloped. I know you were going for the "weird day at the mall" effect but it just fell short.
on 2/16/2012 3:02:14 PM
Lol. And look! This is an ancient game from the beginning of time.
on 7/13/2017 9:07:10 PM
very cool ,yet dumb at the same time. Plenty of goofy humor. 30/10
-- Parislunaakane on 2/25/2017 7:09:56 PM
Well, the way it was set up reminded me of the choose your own advetures me and my friends use to tell each other in 7th grade that never made sense.
-- Squirlyfresh Sux on 11/4/2016 1:25:21 PM
Good. Good. Just needs to have that mueseum tho! 5/8
-- StorySearching on 1/19/2016 9:13:58 PM
I got shot. Yay!
on 2/7/2015 6:13:43 AM
on 1/31/2015 9:16:05 PM
I got killed by a swerving car.
on 10/9/2014 2:04:32 PM
on 8/20/2014 2:26:24 PM
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