The Price of Freedom: Innocence Lost

Player Rating7.25/8

"#4 overall, #1 for 2014"
based on 6390 ratings since 04/10/2014
played 66,703 times (finished 6,247)

Story Difficulty5/8

"run through the jungle"

Play Length7/8

"It keeps going and going"

Maturity Level6/8

"I'll need to see some identification"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 16. If this were a movie, it would probably between PG-13 and R.

You are 10 years old when you first feel the weight of shackles around your wrists. In a matter of hours, your whole world is turned upside down as you are dragged away from your home in Greece to work as a slave in the Roman Empire.
Now you must struggle for survival. Every decision you make will affect your future. Will you make friends or enemies? Will you submit to your masters or fight your every command? Will you sell your soul to earn your freedom, or sacrifice everything for the people you love? Will you even survive long enough to see the sun rise?

Player Comments

I thought this story was really good and well thought out. I had a lot of fun replaying it, trying to get the ending I wanted. It even distracted me from TWD! The only critique I have is extremely minor in that I wish that, for believability, that more of Lula's dialogue was more choppy and used simpler words if she learned it from other slaves, as is my guess, or even still if she learned it in Ethiopia. Becuause some of the words she remembers would are more complex than the ones she does not. But again, this is still a very minor critique. For something I'd like added, it would have to be maybe some more dialogue options that could better define Andreas's personality and to justify himself more such as when Andreas kills the bleeding out boy, I wish I could've explained to Alexius and Brasus, and even Gerda why I had done it. Also, PLEASE FOR ALL THAT IS RAINBOW add a gay romance option. I know that could be hard to do if you yourself haven't been in a gay relationship, and maybe don't know how, so if you feel uncomfortable with that or don't think you can do it justice, that's fine. I understand, I just feel at this point Ceacilla has been written as Andreas love interest, so I'd just like alternatives, even if that is only just turning her down. Sorry for the long comment, but I when I like something I talk a lot about it, so, yeah. I'll be looking forward to the next part of this amazing story that was so well written I jumped right into it. Thanks. I hope you keep up the good work!
-- Meta on 3/27/2016 10:24:46 PM with a score of 0
What I love about this story, is how it flawlessly illustrates both the youth gladiators of Rome and how they were treated as slaves from foreign lands as I am constantly reminded that people from all over the world are being packed into these ships and sent off to an unknown land. It paints the image of hopelessness, being trapped, and not knowing if I am even going to make it through the journey. Even making the choice of who gets a piece of bread carries its weight of the uncertainty if this will be my last meal.

The characters all had their own personality to them that just jumps right out of the page simply through the way I can hear them talk. However, some of them still have some room for development since the only ones that I can relate to is my brother and the first girl I meet. This doesn't take away from the story, but it makes me question why I should care about whether or not anybody else but my brother and I live. This includes the instructor, since the interactions that I have with her doesn't give me any incentive to make me care for her. Considering that I haven't known her for too long, it makes me wonder why she already seems to care for me and the others like we're all a family.

Overall, this is a great beginning to a story and I am sure that I'll enjoy the next one just as much if not more. That is why I give The Price of Freedom: Innocence Lost a 7/8.
-- Danaos on 4/25/2014 9:34:33 PM with a score of 0
This was a very fascinating story. It reminds me a lot of Hunger Games, only instead it takes place during times of the Romans mixed in with Greek Mythology. The main characters were very believable, the plot had me on the edge of my seat, and the choices involved were some of the deepest yet. I truly felt immersed into the world of Andreas and really felt like I was facing his pain, troubles, and sense of isolation in a new and unfamiliar world. One perfect example of this is the scene when he hugs his mother as the slave owner drags him away. That had me in tears. Lula and Andreas were, by far, the strongest characters in the entire story. That being said, I did have some gripes. For being a story that's rated on Length 7/8, it sure was short. Also, I felt like Rhode's character softened a little too early for me. It would also be nice if we had more backstories on characters like Gerda, Zeru, or even Brausis. I'm not expecting it to all come out at the same time, but to be revealed along the way. Of all the stories I've read on this site so far, I have to say, this one was very well written. I am highly anticipating the next chapter and hope it comes out soon.
-- AppDude27 on 4/11/2014 12:28:23 AM with a score of 0
Awesome
-- Chaz Fleming on 6/24/2017 9:53:50 PM with a score of 0
Wow. I bet the next part will be even better.
-- Tommy on 6/24/2017 11:44:37 AM with a score of 0
short
-- Destructer2002 on 6/22/2017 3:31:03 PM with a score of 0
I thought that this was a amazing interactive story!
-- luna5 on 6/22/2017 1:43:10 PM with a score of 0
It's one of the top five stories on the site, that kind of speaks for itself. I really enjoy historical fiction and this has a good mix of relateable characters, realism and action. I voted for it back when it was in the Spring Thing and it holds up well on a reread.

In loading up my active save here I got a reminder I'd managed to lock myself out of being fit enough for a win by volunteering to get whipped over the toy horse. I do like that not every noble action is necessarily the most practical one for success, it gives the choices more weight.

Anyway, great story, good job Briar you should be very proud. But mostly I'm just posting this now to call out the previous reviewer.

Hey, JasonX: are you even for real?

(Seriously, 'unfamiliar with the concept of slavery?' That's a hard one to swallow. If true, congrats on being astoundingly ignorant even by today's standards. You've somehow lived your entire life completely sheltered from history, avoided historical fiction in every medium in existence barring this one single CYOA you've read right here, and even managed to become a Christian without ever cracking open a Bible.)

Thankfully, you don't even have an account so I don't have to consider you a real person.
-- mizal on 6/20/2017 11:34:39 AM with a score of 0
parts of it were hard to understand. I come from a Christian background so the concept of slavery and forcing children to kill is foreign to me, let alone, it being acceptable in ancient times. certain liberties were taken I assume. gladiators were men, not children and I highly doubt a master would allow a child to fight in the arena
-- JasonX on 6/19/2017 1:53:07 AM with a score of 0
thought it was put together good and had a good story line cant wait for the next part
-- cander63 on 6/14/2017 10:22:19 PM with a score of 0
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