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"walk in the park"
"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"
"must be at least this tall to play"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 10. If this were a movie, it would probably be between G and PG.
You wake up imprisoned in a dark tower, your memories lost. You must find the three keys to get out. Will you succeed or will you remain trapped in there forever? This is my first advanced game. So if it doesn't work, then please tell me to fix it. Feedback and feedforward much appreciated. Have fun!
Well... you get points for the story itself and all the endings having a bittersweet tone to them. Granted, that's something I can stomach only in moderation because, while it's unique to have no truly happy endings or truly sad ones... it gets a little monotonous after a while.
If not for the emotional side of things, though, this wouldn't be a -bad- story, but it wouldn't be a good one, either. It lacks depth and detail. The length is... fine, I guess. Average. However, something tells me it could've been more of an epic than a "slightly-longer-and-more-plot-filled 'escape such-and-such' game"
Over all, I liked it, enough to be fairly impressed, I just feel it's not living up to its true potential.
on 10/9/2013 5:36:42 AM with a score of 0
This was alright. It's worth reading. It has decent writing and use of items. The branching is perhaps lacking, but we are given a fair choice of endings which have their respective pros and cons, something I like. We still could have used allot more options for the wish. For example, "I wish that everyone trapped here was free." A wish is a wish, we need not limit it.
on 6/15/2013 2:25:59 PM with a score of 0
This was great we read it on our YouTube channel - check it out here:
-- Jack on 5/1/2020 2:51:15 PM with a score of 0
I loved it it was a really good book.
-- anonymous on 3/30/2020 10:28:14 AM with a score of 0
Damn, that ending tho. Hit me hard.
on 2/12/2020 3:38:52 PM with a score of 0
Short, with mildly decent story
-- Mj on 1/4/2020 5:04:56 PM with a score of 0
Very touching and well thought out. I really would love to see a continuation if possible, but I understand the effort it took. It's a very well written story.
on 4/26/2019 11:20:02 AM with a score of 0
The story could have been a bit longer.
Difficulty is spot on.
We would've liked more options of killing people with the axe.
The whole class is grateful for your writing though.
-- M3B on 11/2/2018 5:08:43 AM with a score of 0
on 2/13/2018 9:02:43 PM with a score of 0
It was interesting. I think what prevented me from getting more immersed into the story is the unreality of the plot. Vampires and fantasy theme, I get, but how the heck do I find notes left by people tied down in the dungeon? And somehow (spoiler) Mitsue just happens to have the last key? It's details like that which really bug me. And the triviality of some of the objects (table, cupboards, etc) just don't seem to mesh well with the rest of the story.
Also I feel the endings could have been more developed. It would have been nice to see different options as well. 4/8.
on 6/26/2017 12:11:48 AM with a score of 0
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