Mystery / Puzzle
, #18 for
played 1,111 times (finished 114)
"no possible way to lose"
"A well spent lunch break"
"need to be accompanied by an adult"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG.
You are trapped in a white room. Find a way out, no matter how preposterous it might be.
It had its ups and downs i'd say.
The writing was really good and the plot was well executed. I could easily picture the situations because you provided a decent amount of detail. So well done with that.
Sadly, there are some flaws here to weigh the good writing down a bit. I thought the storygame was rather random, and the choices didn't seem to make much sense to me. But I suppose it might be hard trying to imagine choices in the situations the character was in for this story.
There is a small amount of character development, but I would have liked to get to know them more. Developed, well fleshed out characters are a very important part of storywriting.
I also found the storygame rather short, despite the decent amount of writing on most of the pages.
This also feels rather incomplete, and I don't have a sense of closure after I read it. I really want to know what happens next.
4/8, good job but fix the flaws please.
on 3/25/2017 12:51:33 AM with a score of 0
It was great, I really hope that the story is continued. I don't really like how there is no possible way to end other than the men putting you back. If and hopefully when you continue this story, you should change some of the story lines around a bit. Otherwise this is a decent and promising story.
on 7/23/2014 6:49:22 PM with a score of 0
I love the concept. It's always been that 'what if' question. "How do you get out of a room with no doors, no windows, and you have nothing but a hot dog bun (or whatever was in your pocket, lol)" As others have said, I'd love to see more variation, as well as description. Like the walls were white and smooth, like a heavy coffee cup. All in all, great puzzle story!
on 6/22/2013 8:35:57 PM with a score of 0
Pure twist. I love it. Hope you can make a sequel or add more modifications to it.
on 5/6/2017 1:02:12 AM with a score of 0
Hi there! :-). Great story! You are so creative... I feel this game has the potential to be even greater. After all, there are no limmits to the imagination! :-) :-). My idea is: the next time the girl finds herself in the white room (after she's been sedated again), there could be a message on the wall, giving her clue as to what's going on. Like the kind of message you'd find on a map for a treasure chest. Just a thought. Good luck, and happy developing! :-). Oh, and very well done again. This was certainly one of your most creative ideas. :-).
-- Rahila on 5/5/2017 10:34:23 AM with a score of 0
on 4/27/2017 4:38:25 AM with a score of 0
-- ddog on 4/12/2017 1:21:34 PM with a score of 0
It was kinda sorta boring... ending was a bit too sudden, but overall good try. I can't do better myself :P
-- Emma on 10/6/2016 1:02:02 PM with a score of 0
A good start but way too short.
on 10/4/2016 11:20:06 AM with a score of 0
Not bad. I like it. It's one of the beast I've seen so pleeeeeease continue this.
on 11/23/2015 11:11:05 AM with a score of 0
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