Zombie in house: 3:00
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played 955 times (finished 119)
"walk in the park"
"Make sure not to blink"
"I'll need to see some identification"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 16. If this were a movie, it would probably between PG-13 and R.
I'm from Poland so sorry for my english.
This is what hapenned 3 hours before explosion.
Oh boy... You apologized for your English at the start, I know, but at least learn some basic grammar before making a storygame. Other than the English, though, the characters barely had a personality, and there was one paragraph per page. I chose "go sleep" and there were no links, forcing the reader to go back. At least make a link that goes to the last page.
1/8 for me, sorry :(
on 7/24/2017 8:17:08 PM with a score of 0
I see why apologize for your english.
on 6/17/2017 12:31:17 PM with a score of 0
Grammer errors almost everywhere
Practically no character development
The paragraphs were extremely short and uninteresting
1/10 Would rather eat a rotten tomato
on 5/18/2017 7:33:40 PM with a score of 0
I have to give you props for putting the story up. Not many people have the guts to put up their stories, but you Sir are one of those few. This being said, I do have to say the story isn't all that good. For one thing, it jumps around from point to point without any kind of real plot. I went from having the option to sleep or talk to the guys in the car to falling into a room and being hit on the head with a falling gun. Another point which detracted any enjoyment is the grammar. I could barely understand was what going on for the 3 minutes it took to play your game.
-- Aelrindel on 5/18/2017 9:52:33 AM with a score of 0
Pretty good but grammar is bad
on 11/12/2016 12:20:01 AM with a score of 0
Please make a really long part two because I enjoyed it
on 7/29/2016 9:56:22 PM with a score of 0
It wasn't that bad although you could work on your English. I won't blame you too much on that as you are from Poland. I also think the maturity should go down, the only bad thing in there is the word "Motherfucker", it's not even gory. I think you could get higher ratings by unpublishing this and fixing it up a little.
on 5/23/2015 1:46:31 PM with a score of 0
on 2/4/2015 1:54:29 PM with a score of 0
not very long. doesn't make u think at all. to simple
on 1/23/2015 10:49:35 AM with a score of 0
I really don't think this should be "Appropriate for all ages." when it has a use of the word "Motherfucker" in it.
on 2/8/2014 3:15:51 PM with a score of 0
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