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This is my first storygame since I joined this site. I created this in order to get some feedback on my idea and whether it is good for me or not. This is the game's description.

 You have so many questions. 'Where am I? What happened?' All will be explained in time. In the end, you will know  why you are chained in a dark room talking with a stranger, you will know who this stranger is, and you will know if there is any hope for you to escape and live.

Basically, the story starts with the reader knowing nothing but genders of the two characters. You are chained in a  dark room with a man you can't see. He allows you to ask questions that flashback to points that the reader chooses, shaping the story and affecting other choices as well as the ending. 

At the moment, the title is 'The Questions'

Please give me some feedback on how this could be improved and thank you.

I'm not crazy about the title. I like the concept. It seems rather simple, but simple can work really well depending on the execution. Amnesia is an incredibly common theme for ... well, every form of entertainment, now that I think about it. Of course, it's common because it's convenient for making mysteries and introducing an audience into a world more subtly than slap-you-in-the-face-forced-exposition, which nobody (who understands quality story telling) likes. I suppose I'd just like to see you attempt to steer away from Hollywood's portrayal of it. Maybe actually study up on real amnesia since you're going that route?

Granted, I'm in the medical field, so that's me nitpicking. The average individual probably doesn't care that much about medical accuracy, haha...

Crediting Bucky for this idea, since he came up with it, but I can't believe he didn't post this genius.

Instead of being chained in a dark room, the protagonist wakes up next to a pig and an old woman knitting in a corner.

I suggested changing the pig to Rosie O Donnell.

Well, this idea on its own isn't really interesting to me. I find characters and plots interesting. Who are the characters and what's the plot?

Well, evidently the plot is that you're in a dark room, chained to a wall, with amnesia and a dude you're trying to reverse interrogate. :P