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Hey guys, i've been writing Uproot, and i have progressed pretty far with it. But now i have realized that, with 61 pages into my story, i have "no possible way to lose". Is this alright? Does this make my game bad or is it just a style of CYOA?

Basically what i have right now is a story, where you get to pick some of the character's actions and you read what happens, but currently i have no option of death or you lose or anythign like that, is this fine?? The ending is planned to be perilous where the main character could die/lose.

I wish i could get someone to read my story and see if its good without death/youlose, but there is a problem with that because its 61 pages and the majority of pages are very long in length, it would take up too much of the person's time.

So all this comes down to is something i've asked at least twice now: is it alright to have a very long story without any chance of losing until the end?

not a big deal solo - just make sure the STORY is interactive, and not just a game where the only decisions you make are how to kill things.

march

Whjt march means is.

There is a goblin

A) Attack it
B) Kick it
C) Flamethrower it
D) Stomp it.

NEXT PAGE

There is a dragon

A) Attack it
B) Kick it
C) Flamethrower it
D) Stomp it.

ETC.

OK, my feedback.

If you can't lose at least make it hard to advance.  Use intricate item puzzles or variable puzzles.  It doesnt have be be hard to stay alive, but if not, make it hard to progress.

ahh okay, because i have it that you read what he does in a battle scene, and then you choose what you want AFTER the battle scene (i.e. tie the dude up, kill the enemy off, knock him unconsious..etc.)

and i will make it hard to progress... but i will have to think of this more when i get to an appropriate part...

well u can always take a sneak peek with the link:

http://www.chooseyourstory.com/Story/Uproot.aspx

Dude that must be liek 500 words per page. I dont wanna start til Im ready for some epic reading lol.

Heres what Im afraid of:

You make it easy to win so that people could just click through links,etc.  Then they leave low ratings cuz they didnt read it all.  MAKE IT SO THAT THEY NEED TO READ EVERYTHING TO WIN :D

DUUUUUUUUUUDEEEEEEEEEEEE

Classic?

THAT ROCKS!

Hey guys, i wanted to say thanks to you all for giving me your feedback, you may have noticed that nate didnt reply in this thread, but he did e-mail me with some feedback, so this thanks is also extended to him. lol, he said that it was chooseyourSTORY.com and not chooseyourDEATH.com lol! Also, the empire (dv) let me know that he supported the feedback that some of you posted, so the thanks is also extended to him. You all do not know how much this has helped me because i was honestly thinking of redoing the entire game...

Again, Thanks guys, your all awesome!

solo

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i am so pissed right now, i wrote about a page of description on one page, by mistake i hit my touchpad and it triggered someting to make the browser go back, and because im using the RTF editor, i lost all that work!!! AJFJASJFDNASJFNKAJSFNKJASNFJKASNF

buttom mashing doesnt make you feel better ;:(

OH GOD I HATE THAT SO MUCH!!

Recently Ive started randomly copying my text (Control C, notl ike physically copy it) so if that happens I can just paste it.