To bring my older story to light, I had to get my account back, which I did, as you can see. I just re-checked it. It may not be perfect, but I managed to get a 6/8 when it was full of loopholes and horrible grammar, so I invite everyone to return to it, read it, rate it accordingly, now that it is revised and the grammar is finally right on all pages......
Feel free to suggest improvements!
http://chooseyourstory.com/story/a-blaze-of-glory~3a-chapter-one