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Hi guys, well this is my first story (I don't count stupid test). 

You're object 00-1 you don't know much, you just woke up in a room. You met just one person, who said very important thing to you. "Don't blink:

Well it's here:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/don't-blink

Tell me what you think about it.

Not bad. I liked the concept and the story itself was decent enough.

You can check out my comment but really, I think you could do better. There wasn't too much of a concept and it was more like an 'Escape the Room' type of thing than anything else. Expand it and add more of a storyline and you could have a good storygame on your hands.

Not exactly a fan. There was no plot development and it was too short.