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So i'm writing this story called Daddy's Boy and I was wondering if any of you would like to check on it. It's hardly started- just a few pages. But I wanted to see if I got the writing style right. How can you preview unfinished games? Please gimme some input. Thanks.

Sure I will.

You could :

A: Copy-paste the pages into pm's

B: Give me the link to your book

C: Allow Sneak Preview When this box is checked, this storygame will be visible (but not clickable) on your profile page. If unchecked, the only author(s) may view it and it will not be shown in your profile.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Daddy%27s-Boy

Thanks, but posting that for everyone to see is probably not what he wanted...

Oh no, tis fine. Thank you!

Needs more dialogue and interactions, keeping in mind the best (most entertaining) conversations in a book are the ones that don't mean anything to the plot, but instead gives the reader a feel for the characters.

I liked what I have read so far.The writing style and the detailed descriptions engaged me. If its alright to ask, what kind of relationship will the father and son have? Have they not seen each other in years or is it a yearly thing that the son can't weasel his way out of, since he didn't seem all that enthused? Is the father really awkward or intimidating or was once this awesome guy that was taken down a couple of notches? And was it the father that decided on naming his son Dick? XD

Send a PM to a person with the link on it, just like any other people said.

Have some people to proofreads it and give suggestions. They could fix your writing style, or tell you another writing style that fits for your storygame.

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