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So, I am planning on writing a story about Trump and how all of his supporters, including himself, are now braindead zombies and all they can do now is shout racial slurs, magonistic comments, and his qoutes.... and eat flesh.

Tell me what you guys think!

Here is a little bit of the description which has no, as always, direct link or anything to do with the plot, characters, or idea at all.

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November 8, 2021

The President

The White House

Washington D.C                                          -TOP SECRET-

My dear Mr. President:

Soon, the virus, H1T1, shall infect all of the United States Mr. President and you will be in complete control of those that wish harm to you and they shall fear your wrath! H1T1 is currently being released in China and Mexico, as you ordered.

I, in the address to the H1T1 virus, would like to inform you that the virus has become air-borne and is, in fact, on its way to Washington D.C and I find it imperative to the survival of the United States that you be evacuated to the now recommission Greenbrier estate so to prevent the virus to get hold of you and, subsequently thereafter, infect you.

Donald, as your associate and your friend I ask you to do this.

Sincerely,

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Um, buddy, you have two huge mistakes.

1) Trump and his followers are already brain dead zombies.

2) Have you heard of the recent CYS flame wars? People gonna get mad.

Though I hate Trump AND EVERYBODY WHO IS CURRENTLY RUNNING!

It is in no way intended to offend people and I couldn't care less about his 'supporters' and who they are.

This is just a story set in an alternate time line, therefore, it does not exist at all if you think about it and if it is going on that mind-set then I am completely fine and no one, not even the ignorant, can harm me. Just kidding of course.

Respectfully, I have not been paying attention to flame wars for I say that you may have an opinion, you may speak of that opinion, but I shall never throw you down for that opinion.

Please, only constructive critisism.

Hey, I'm not trying to be offensive or pushing you down. That was just another one of my lame attempts to be funny.

But yeah, I like your idea and would like to see it published. 

Mason the Derailer strikes:

Why don't you get much points for making story games? What is your opinion? 

Hey c'mon Mason, let the man write about what he wants. Regardless of what people say.

Wait a minute! H1C1? You mean like the game H1Z1?!

@RimC

I like your idea, as I belive that if you follow through, it could be a very interesting and comical story. You have my interest.

This is meant to be a serious- nearly comical really- setting on how a saying and words can go until they stop being metaphoricle to being a reality.

So, kind of like Sharknado? Like how serious they are in spite of the absurdity?

No, I want this to be something that a majority of people shall anticipate, read, and later speak of it in such a manner that its riticule will survive beyond even its own years.

However, I think that it can still be a story through even that.

Um, guys, I responded up there ^

Wait, so you're expecting this story game to be something everyone anticipates and loves and talks about in years to come?

No, I don't really want it to be anything except a a mockery of Trump and his supporters and for people to have fun with it.

Again, constructive critisicim in this thread only.

Sounds good.

Can't stump the Trump. 

Can't stump the Trump you say? I beg to differ

The wall just got ten feet taller. 

Why are we brain dead zombies?

You are also dumb a***s for following Bernie, Hillary, or the other Republican candidates. See you can insult us, but see how it just angers us. Go USA, go Trump, set America straight. To Hell with politicians, we need a change. We need Trump.

What a trump slogan.

I'd take a bullet for that man. I just know one day, America will go, "Holy shit, Trump was right."

That's the slogan.

Love the setting idea. Should give you a lot to work with. H1T1 alone, got me giggling.

Couple of points.

Any memo, or official document like that, should use very formal and official language and structure. My dear Mr President, sounds like something a nutty fan would write, less something that'd be sent from an associate. Of course, this means that when shit hits the fan and a document is off-key of an official, polite stance, it makes it that much more powerful. Or if one person alone is a filth-monster, and the rest just try to pretend that the swearing and yelling is perfectly normal behaviour.

Relating to the previous, remember that this isn't CSI - one person doesn't do everything. A message from a lab scientist detailing information about the virus, and commenting that it may mutate to become airborne, is a lot more effective then one from an aide, regardless how credentialled.

Spelling and sentence construction don't appear to be your strongest suit. Throw paragraphs into a spellchecker to help with the first, and have a lot of eyes looking over it when it's getting close to publish, to fix the second.

As some in the thread have already stated, this is an emotionally charged issue, this political candidate. If it grabs your muse, and you can convey an interesting story from this germ of an idea, all the better. But, remember that there's good and bad ways to do everything. If this is to set up Trump as a strawman, and beat the crap out of him and his points, then going completely over the top is a good start. Swift wrote his A Modest Proposal to highlight the poor conditions in Ireland. He didn't say, Things are terrible, and the English are largely to blame (or at least some policies). No, he instead came up with the 'proposal' of English buying and eating Irish babies. See the difference? It'd be hard to take the second one seriously, whereas the first is a little soapbox-y. (Okay, people DID think Swift was being serious, but that's cause duhhhhhh). So, Trump releasing H1T1 to make zombies, that's Soapboxy. Trump delivers H1T1 as an innoculation booster to schools, orphanages, child pageants and hospitals, that's hilariously evil.

Anyway, that's my soapbox and points. I hope they come across as points of concern, and ways to diffuse them, rather then outright bashing. Looking forward to reading what you write, cause the premise is comedy gold.