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Hey guys, so I am making a story game called, "Invasion: Raiders Revenge" this is the game's description.

Much of the world has been destroyed by a war that happened many years ago. Some cities managed to survive, but the human population has reached an all time low. You play as Ivan Woods, a seventeen year old boy that lives in a Quarantine Zone with his sixteen year old sister. Ever since your parents passed away, you have been doing what you can to support your sister, that means traveling outside of the Zone. Your Quarantine Zone has a man inside a raider camp that smuggles supplies to you, but one day, when he is discovered, your world is turned upside down. The raiders begin to attack your home, and now you have to defend it.

Let me know what you think, as I plan to start working on it soon. I will try to work on it alone, but I will need people to test it out whenever I have finished a chapter. If you are interested in testing it, PM me.

Hmm...the plot is iffy. You may need to prepare a bunch of back up for readers, as they are grabby and need more detail. Seeing you as a good writer, I hope you do well and have a fun time writing this. I can't personally co-author, as I have a story I'm working on. PM me if you need me to proofread or suggest ideas, it would be a pleasure.

Alright, I will have you written down as a proof reader. Thanks for looking at it. Chapter 1 in progress. *Sigh* (That moment you realize, this is going to take a hell of a long time)

The basic background and plot has been done many times before, but whether it works or not all comes down to your writing, whether you can make the characters relatable and interesting, and so on. People will be able to give you more detailed advice once you have a few pages written.

@mizal

Would you like to be a proof reader? I would appreciate all the help that I could get, but you don't have to.

Can't really commit to anything at this point, right now my online access is kind of erratic so until I get that sorted I'll be having very little involvement with the site. I'm sure I could at least give it a readthrough and see if there's any glaring issues, if not a full proofreading though.