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I wrote a story in a couple of days while bored at school. I probably won't continue it for a while, if at all. You guys are welcome to read it, any feedback would be a fun way to collaborate. If you actually do enjoy it, that would be awesome! 

Read it here!

Ignore this post.

Seems pretty good so far. Just make sure you don't go on about descriptions that aren't important to the story at all. For example, brushing your teeth and turning the key in your car. I've only read a bit so far, but will give more feedback when I finish it.

Thanks. It's pretty bad, I know. 

Although, this whole thread is meant for my writing improvement!

Hey, I read it. I think it's pretty good. I wanted to keep going but you're not finished. ^_^  But I don't think that the government soldier guy should be dying too soon, he's a soldier, you know?, I think he should last way longer in the story. I mean, to me that makes sense more if you keep the soldier a while longer.^_^ But so far the story was good, I wanted to reading it. Not that bad. Hopefully you continue with it soon! 

Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it. There'll be a lot more explanation and stuff on the way, so it'll be a fun writing excersize!

You're welcome. Cool, cool. Can't wait. ^_^

Mason... this should be in the Writing Workshop, not here.

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Ha ha. Yeah i think he knew that. That's why he posted 'ignore this post', but too late now. ^_^

There's always mod tagging--oh, wait, here's one. :3 

Looks cool.