Shadowdrake27, The Wordsmith

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11/26/2018

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6/12/2021 11:29 PM

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Wow a blank page with the topic of “me.”  A normal person would have this full of exciting things about themself. Me? I would rather you read my work and form your own opinion about me. Unfortunately, I am a perfectionist with a job, family, and life... so my writing may come out slowly. Therefore, I will call myself a mystery. I act like I am 12, but am at least double that in age. I have been coming to CYS to read awesome stories for awhile. I am currently using it as a medium to plop down all the stories that have been in my mind with nowhere to go. Read them at your discretion, or don’t. I will have fun putting them out there regardless. Feel free to message me with questions, or just to talk, I like both bouncing ideas off people and chatting. I just might not answer right away if I am trapped in the real world at the moment.

*Disclaimer: I am not a grammar freak! That may show up in my writing and my reviews! Please comment if a story has such bad grammar that it takes away from the story! I am working on improving in this area. Of course, if I misuse one semicolon in a 200-page story, I am going to secretly judge you for leaving that comment! But I respond well to criticism usually so it will be okay.*

-shadowdrake27

 

If you are bored try adding a page to this fun collaborative writing prompt on infinitestory.com:

https://infinite-story.com/story/info.php?id=20343

 

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Clearstone

Clearstone was a peaceful place where a man could forage his own path in life, but that was before Mad Dog Roberts took it over. Now Clearstone is owned by the Roberts Mining Co. and the people are little more than cogs in Roberts golden machine. This traveling cowboy isn't a part of that machine, and he isn't about to leave without a fight.


Day of the Dead--One Soul's All Souls Procession

Day of the Dead Skull

Matthew Mercia had never believed in the Day of the Dead the way his mother did. He didn't get excited to wake up on November second to celebrate the lives of relatives who had passed--until he was one of those relatives. Now he can only wake up on the day of the dead, so he only has tonight to walk among the living. How did I die? Who killed me? Why? These questions may just keep Matthew from celebrating this Dia de Muertos.

Authors Note:

This story was written in four hours for Ectocomp 2019 with 4,500 words, 7 unique endings, and one epilogue. It is based on the All Souls Procession Weekend in Tuscon Arizona. No additional knowledge is needed to read the story, but if you want more information on anything look up the event! 

Edited on 12/06/19: the tense switch on the first page was fixed. Everything else was left the way it was for the contest.

Image from: http://clipart-library.com/day-of-the-dead-clipart.html


Inheritance House

A suspense/horror story. It is about a cabin you inherited from your creepiest uncle (yeah you know the one). There are two possible endings. Good luck.

Tips:  Use the link at the end to go back to the beginning, even if you die you can continue to play. Hit "Drive to cottage" after each play through and look for the room that changed. You will face a choice in that room that will decide if you live or die, again.

Note: A special thanks to Chris113022 and Gower who play tested, and proofread this story.


Leroy and Mika's Organic Poetry

Let's write a poem together,

about nature or the weather.

Alternating lines, you and me,

 writing in perfect harmony.

I will write a line, you the next,

our lais is a river of text.

Leroy and Mika are parting ways for two years. They have signed up for the Peace Corps and are going to opposite corners of the globe to make a difference in the world. Their shared loves are poetry and the environment. This lais is the perfect poem to remind them what they mean to each other; they just have to write it.

Authors Notes:

A 1,000-word story written for a contest with the theme of nature environment. The game is a craft your own poem game. A lais is a poem written with octosyllabic couplets (8 syllable lines that rhyme in pairs). You get to craft the poem that expresses these two characters' love, and you get to decide if their love is strong enough to survive two years apart.

Actual word count is 936.

A special thanks to  Ogre11 and mizal for proofreading and play-testing! Their feedback was instrumental in making this game what it is.


Merlin: Origins

Merlin Ambrosius was just an electrician working in Britain. His last job was on an archeological site doing the lighting for what was believed to be the home of Merlin the Magician. He accidentally got himself sent back in time to the days of King Arthur, where Merlin Ambrosius became the sorcerer of legend. Did he serve King Arthur well as a trusted advisor? Was he a feared but well-respected as a sorcerer? Or did he get caught trying to fool the medieval prince?

Author's Note:

This game was made for the Year's End Contest - Choose Your Own Prompt II. The theme was "8) This story has an original and sensible magic system, built from the ground up. The plot is up to you."

Magic is defined as the power to influence reality by using mysterious or supernatural forces. Rather than having characters learn to shoot fire out of their hands, my magic system is based on having limited technology in the past.

There are two main branches, which focus on different types of "magic." One caution is that some of the smaller pathways are similar, differing only by the puzzle you have to solve and ways you can fail. Also, when choosing between the "Lady of the Lake" myth or the "Sword in the Stone" myth, please note that these tales both involve Excalibur, so the story remains the same until after you make the sword of legend. After that part, these two branches have a different (second) puzzle, which can lead to various endings.

An answer guide is provided for electrical puzzles. For an added challenge, do not use it. Additionally, there is a walkthrough here if you want help finding all 12 endings. Good luck!

Special thanks to Reader82 and poison_mara for proofreading and play-testing for me. Without them, this story would have a few million more errors. Reader82 fixed most of my bad grammar, and poison_mara thought of adding the guide for the electrical puzzles.


The Chronomantic Adventures of Professor Gower: Office Hours

Professor Gower sits in his big, big oak desk, glasses perched precariously on his nose. He lays a fountain pen down atop his grade book and steeples his hands with something of a patient sigh.

He has warned his students:

The purpose of this thread is to have a place to talk about smallish issues of language, style, syntax, grammar, word choice, paragraph structure, or whatever. This is for microlevel issues, not big stuff like "what should I write about?" or "how do I make interesting choices?" or "is that mole bigger than yesterday?"

Bring a piece of your work-in-progress, and let's all discuss it together.

It's worth 40% of your grade, and you may not have an extension.

Alas, no one has come to his office today. This is not an issue though: Professor Gower has better things to do.

Authors Note:

Time travel story-game requested by Microblue with permission from Gower.

Special thanks to TheChef for play-testing and proofreading.

The Description was mostly written by Gower, and the rest is the author's original account of the real adventures of the English professor that travels in time to ensure the safety of literary classics. While you can read this story on its own, it's recommended that you have some familiarity with the classic authors Homer, Marie de France, and Euripides. It's also recommended that you read The Iliad, Lanval, Medea, and Beowulf before reading this story. General knowledge of those works will be accepted for this story but will do nothing for your grades on Gower's quiz to follow.

There are two possible endings. There are also four authors to meet, four literary gems to save, and four historic items to frame in Gower's office; however, there is only one epilogue.

Please enjoy as you travel to the past to meet Gower's favorite authors.


Dark Master
unpublished

Dark Master Cover

Todd, a master of dark magic in a world that forbids it, has a chance to prove that dark magic can be used for good; unless he becomes the dark lord that everyone fears. Will Todd become a hero, or is he destined to be the villain?

Notes:

More of a story with multiple outcomes than a game.

There are no right or wrong answers, although you have the option of getting yourself killed many times, and choices matter.

## unique epilogues are available. 

On the first page, there is a link to background information on the world and how it is structured. This link is for people that like to have the basic understanding and context that the main character has at the start. It is completely optional.


Deep Space Asteroid Mining Mission
unpublished

Applicants wanted for an exciting and challenging position as the captain of a deep space mining mission. No former space exploration experience is necessary. We are looking for candidates with common sense and natural leadership skills. Press the button below to apply!

Job Summary:

Responsible for all decisions made aboard the Endeavor mining shuttle.

Location: Outer Space

Job Type: Contract

Salary: 10% of any profits made. All losses will be deducted from base salary.


Furthest Star: Icarus
unpublished

Every billionaire wants to get in on the space-race these days, and William C. Harrington is no exception. With an extraordinary budget, an abundance of passion, and an intense desire to never lose, he set his sights on colonizing the farthest star known to mankind--Icarus.

Traveling through space can be a dangerous ordeal; fortunately, the crew bound for Icarus has you to guide them. Will you gamble your life to fulfill the vision of your eccentric financier, change the mission to increase the chances of successful colonization, or explore space in humanity's first mobile colony? We are waiting on your orders, captain!


U-Cloud Human Cloud Computing: Unplugged
unpublished

The year is 2075. San Francisco has replaced Washington D.C. as the capitol of the United States. It is the nation's leading technological center and has expanded to encompass most of costal California. 70% of the U.S. population lives there, and anyone who matters is in San Francisco as part of the U-Cloud.

U-Cloud is the worlds first cloud computing network that includes androids and humans. A new microprocessor developed by Volpere, the largest technology company in the world, allows human minds to be linked to computer information networks, but it comes at a price. Like any machine on the U-Cloud, admins can take total control of people on the network.

A restructured government and the wealthy elite serve as admins to maintain order on the U-Cloud. They can monitor the thoughts, memories, and actions of any device on the network to ensure all rules are adhered to. All devices have no choice but to play by the rules, with a few exceptions.

Alexander Kertchen is one of those exceptions. His blue collar background means he is one of the chipped members of the working class, but Alex's job is to modify and fix broken microprocessors. When his chip needs a repair, he manages to unplug himself from the U-Cloud. What this young technician does with his new found freedom is up to you.


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How to handle similar events in different branches on 6/4/2021 12:10:23 PM

I'll keep that in mind... I would put the choice after this conversation, but that would delay the first choice in this particular game by too much, I think. Maybe I'll put a fake choice in before or something...


How to handle similar events in different branches on 6/4/2021 9:56:29 AM

I'm looking for a bit of advice because of feedback I keep getting on stories that I want to avoid this time around. Basically, I'm curious how people typically handle events that happen in multiple branches without making the story seem repitive or copy pasted in each branch. Here is an example:


My cyberpunk story is going to feature a choice between robbing and killing another character. Sort of like choosing if he deserves to die or if taking all his money and riding into the sunset is sufficient. The events in the story happen like this: choice between killing and robbing > doubts/moral conflict that make you question choice > interaction with the person you are going to rob/murder > become convicted of your choice and follow through. 

 

In my mind that interaction with your target would be the same in both branches. My initial thought is that no matter what you decided, both characters would say/do the same thing once they happen to bump into each other. However, the conversation/interaction is going to be sort of long because my goal is to build up the character we are going to rob or kill to make it more impactful (maybe 300 to 500 words). 

 

Would having a block of 500 words that are the same in every branch make this part of the story repetitive? If so, how do I fix this?

 

My initial thought was to mess with the timing and location slightly to make the interaction a bit different. For example, if you choose to kill the other character you go for a walk to clear your head and bump into him out in the hallway of the building you are in. If you choose to rob him, then you sit in your room debating it a bit longer and he comes into your room. Still, it's going to be all of the same information, so the conversation might be pretty similar.

 

The other option I thought of is to only write one interaction with a series of short pages and variables/conditional links so that I'm not copy pasting a lot, but that doesn't change the repetitiveness of the branches to the reader...

 

Anyway, I run into this issue a lot. Any thoughts will be considered and appreciated! For now I'm moving ahead with a slight variation of the location, timing, and wording of the discussion.


What are you watching? on 6/1/2021 12:35:24 PM

Welp... I guess some voice actors should just never die for fear of what might end up on their tombstone...


What are you watching? on 6/1/2021 11:55:41 AM

This is the land before time. Time didn't exist back then, so it's not a factor.

I did love those movies though!


CYBERPUNK CONTEST 2021 on 5/30/2021 10:11:51 PM

I have reluctantly decided to join this after playing with some story ideas and getting positive feedback/good advice (thanks to those who commented on my other thread). While I fully expect to be thrown back in the pit of shame, I'll try to actually finish.


What are you watching? on 5/30/2021 7:07:00 PM

We can only assume so. They have a lot of things that revolve around romance/dating that I frankly don't understand. Even in good love stories, they pop up.


What are you watching? on 5/30/2021 3:44:52 PM

Ahh, well if you just don't like it that's fine too. I found it interesting because of the way the devil is portrayed over the entire show. Like I said before, he often steps into more of a hero role than the other Christian figures in the show. It's a fun phycological look at what the devil might be thinking. Sexual temptation just happens to be something very frequently associated with the devil, haha.

 

Yeah that's the one. Ig has a few boring stretches, but I have enjoyed it so far. 
 

Mizal, I remember white collar! That was good as well. Don't know if I ever went back and finishes that one though. The main character was always enjoyable.


What are you watching? on 5/30/2021 2:57:22 PM

Yeah, Lucifer might not be "family friendly" depending on the family watching. It is really good and has some great character development for Lucifer in particular. Of course, you have to get past the two seasons that he just sleeps around with every girl you see in the show. There is a lot that is sort of... not appropriate. The black list is a similar show that is a bit darker but less "adult" if you want to try that.


Is this Cyberpunk? Need feedback on a story idea. on 5/30/2021 8:51:53 AM

I appreciate the thoughts! It's true that if I look at cyberpunk stories now I am likely to borrow a few ideas...

 

I have thought of the two items that you listed. There are already plans to address those in the works, but I'll keep a close eye out for these holes. It would be bad if hacking chips is too easy, haha.

 

If I'm happy with my plan at the end of the long weekend I'll enter the contest, but we will see. I don't know where I want the story to go yet. I have an idea of what themes I want to cover and my general concept. There are almost no specific details filled in though. 


What are you watching? on 5/29/2021 9:43:32 PM

The black list had been surprisingly good for a long time. It's a bit different from other crime shows because of the criminal storylines of the FBI informant. They also do a good job keeping the over arching plot line interesting while making each individual case exciting. At least, for most of it. I'm on like Season 6. There were a few slow parts.

 

I'm big into the cop/crime shows so I have a few in the category that I like. They are my favorite shows on Netflix now that the big networks took their shows back, haha. Lucifer is another good one. I do think the first half was better than the second, and we are still waiting on the last half a season... but the first three seasons are extremely good. There is a lot of tension between the two main characters because one is the devil (from Christian theology), and the other is immune to his devil powers like temptation. It plays a lot off Christian beliefs with interesting twists (like the angels in the shows being the "bad guys" while the devil is the "hero" so to speak).