mizal, The Master Scrivener

Member Since

5/5/2011

Last Activity

1/22/2020 3:06 PM

EXP Points

3,992

Post Count

12848

Storygame Count

9

Duel Stats

1 win / 6 losses

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Lauded Sage Exemplar

Commendations

433

Brought the old elf av back by popular request. Sagely advice also due for a major overhaul...some day....eventually...when I get around to it.


Sagely advice for the children: Here and here and all over this wonderful internet only a single Google search away, you may find explanations of correct grammar and punctuation usage in English. That and proper spelling (most writing programs and even the editor on the site itself helpfully include a spell checker!) are the bare minimum expected of anyone posting a story on the site. If you're not willing to do that much, you're not remotely serious about writing. And if you don't care about what you write, then we don't care to read it. So don't bother.
Rating and reviewing other people's stories is still an excellent use of your time however and a way to accumulate points and respect on the site even if you don't write. It may also teach you a thing or two about writing and especially writing and structuring CYOAs, which are a bit of a different beast than a standard story. Reading books, and thinking about them on the meta level in the sense of the the things the author chose to include and how they were introduced and why is also a good exercise in sharpening your skills. Reading bad books and being able to identify why they're bad, even better! Read books above your designated 'age level' or whatever as often as possible. That whole system was created by people who think you're stupid and want to keep you that way. You'll never get better at anything unless you push and challenge yourself.



Sagely advice for newb authors: Read the articles. Especially the ones on the advanced editor and scripting. A basic knowledge of variables and scripting will save you untold headaches in the future and streamline the whole process. Learn what $DEST is for and how to toggle a variable within link if nothing else.

A regular story is challenging enough if you're serious about doing it properly. Meanwhile a CYOA is an exponentially expanding story on steroids and crack. You MUST make plans ahead of time about what you're doing and where it's going or it will get away from you completely.

Always back up your work. If nothing else, make a copy of anything you write just before hitting the button to save it. Glitches have been known to happen and a page can time out if it sits too long.

Many of the veteran authors here do all their writing in a separate program that can be more easily backed up and paste it over to the site when they're finished. Your words often flow easier when you tackle one path at a time and then go back to add in branches, treating each major path like its own complete story with variations within it.

Although, there are many ways to structure a CYOA and you may found a different system than the one described above works best for you, one thing that's important for any story to be satisfying is that it's structured like a story.

Behold the sacred precepts of S T R U C T U R E in all their simple, straightforward glory:

 





Spelling it out (for the blindies and others) in order for a story to BE a story you need to start off by establishing your setting, important characters, and the conflict they'll be up against. Smaller obstacles leading up to the major one will need to be overcome, and the protagonist will usually try and fail to deal with whatever the main source of conflict is, or it will be revealed to be more powerful or dangerous than believed. (Remember, an easily won victory is a boring one.) This leads into the climax, the point of greatest suspense where the stakes are highest and the characters have everything to lose. Once THAT'S overcome, the story enters a period of falling action where the tension winds back down and the fallout of resolving the conflict plays out. Finally, the resolution or epilogue where the themes or larger lessons meant to be learned might be reflected back on, and everything is wrapped up leaving a sense of closure for the readers and/or characters.


Finally, a quote, since that is apparently a thing we do:

"Your reviews for both the published storygames and the works in both the creative corner and writing workshop have undeniably helped countless users. Your site presence is a boon for the site by acting like a fiery furnace. You'll roast the worthless rabble and refine what's left.
If you never would've discovered this odd yet charming corner of the web, then CYS would be missing a beneficial and integral part of its very identity." --WouldntItBeNice

"I love bird vore." --Cricket

Given by Mizal on 01/15/2018 - Finally the M is capitalized. Gifted by Zake, so the other won't be so lonely and retarded.

Trophies Earned

Earning 100 Points Earning 500 Points Earning 1,000 Points Earning 2,000 Points Thorough and consistent writing workshop contributions / excellent commenting. Having 2 Storygame(s) Featured Posting 12844 Forum Posts Given by BerkaZerka on 11/10/2017 - Forum and Site Contributions Not Unnoticed Given by EndMaster on 11/30/2017 - It's everything you've always wanted! Given by JJJ-thebanisher on 08/14/2019 - For excellent writing, keeping the site together and generally being an excellent presence Given by Killa_Robot on 08/15/2019 - For being a net positive to the site, even while helping idiots Given by mizal on 08/15/2019 - MUHAHAHAHAHA! *strokes fluffy white cat* I always knew this day would come. Given by Will11 on 01/14/2018 - For Inseperable and your other great stories

Storygames

A Stack of Cats
You are a man on a mission. The cats, they must be stacked.

A puzzling math and logic game I made just to put some of the scripting practice I've been doing to use. Have fun and please let me know if you encounter any bugs.

Should be solvable by middle schoolers, or those with same basic level of intelligence as a middle schooler.

Featured Story Agent of Order
Orbiting a barren planetoid in a system full of nothing just past the edge of the frontier, The Last Outpost is just another refueling station. Strategically important, true, but on a routine stop you never expected to spend longer than a couple hours there, let alone a couple of days fighting for your life...

There are five epilogues, but some may be difficult to discover. Note that actions have consequences, but not always immediate ones. (And if you just need an End Game link, go play around with the probe.)

Don't Get Date Raped!
A short, educational piece. Please remain sensitive and respectful in the comment section. (I'd hate to have to report you to an admin for bullying me.)

(DO NOT READ if you're at all easily offended or lacking in a sense of humor. There's nothing graphic at all in here, but seriously, I still cannot stress it enough, this story is not for you.)

WOWSERS! Triggers ahead!


Dedicated to the good people of COG.

Facts About the Planet and the Solar System
A compilation of some little known facts about the solar system, as well as the debunking of a few myths.

In addition to the scientific explanations, there's a small story dramatizing it all.

Hopefully young readers will find this fun as well as educational. :)

(Might not be the greatest story ever written, but consider this: it got me 200 points.)

Featured Story Inseparable
It doesn't matter what they say...

Love is for the Birds
...and the squirrels. Sort of.



Written in six hours, for no other reason than to avoid consignment to the SHAME pit after my other Romance contest entry didn't want to cooperate.

Now You Gotta Deal With This S***

A tale told in verse. A text from your sister requesting a pick up from a party leads to a night of strangeness.

Inspired by Bucky's ballad contest. Though...I wouldn't call this a ballad. I'm not sure what I'd call it, actually, other than exceedingly stupid, and fun to write.

(Don't pay any attention to the scores, they're just for me to track which endings reviewers get.)


Read My Stories or Die!
HATE.

THE PURITY AND INTENSITY OF MY HATE IS LIKE A THOUSAND MERCILESS, UNQUENCHABLE SUNS.

AND YET, I ONLY NEED ONE...








Silver Horn, Silver Hooves
When the weather is fine, you've been coming to this grove to drink from the pool for centuries now. Today, you meet a stranger and hear a story that changes all that...



A fairy tale adventure.




[AUTHOR'S NOTE: There's a heavily scripted scene that due to time constraints I didn't have the opportunity to thoroughly test. You'll know it when you see it. In addition to a save game link beforehand, I've provided the option to skip it altogether should you encounter problems. A PM describing those problems would also be greatly appreciated as I'll be revisiting this game once the crushing weight of December has passed.]

Articles Written

A List of Storygames for People Who Like to Read
A list of storygames with substantial effort put in, all written in the last couple of years and sorely in need of ratings and reviews.

CYS Forum Advice and Etiquette
A modernized guide to the forums. The path to internet popularity and happiness, and a few CYS specific do's and don'ts.

Recent Posts

CYS Discord: Now with flying cars! on 1/22/2020 2:24:53 PM
I really don't understand why people keep thinking they can just ignore the OP. I mean I know the answer is just that they're dumb and don't read, but it's still pretty weird. Equally confusing is why certain people seem to get their feelings hurt over not being allowed to just hang out on a server they never use, for a site they never use.

And now a word from our sponsor on 1/22/2020 10:46:54 AM
Yep it's almost like I can still hear her today, stumbling around, bumping into things, knocking stuff over. Or maybe there's actually an intruder in my home. Brb.

IWT 13: The Resurrection on 1/22/2020 9:40:09 AM
Cupcake took hers down too. It's the usual post contest storycaust. Although I'm hoping Cupcake puts hers back up again since all she really had to do was click the spots after the quotation marks and hit enter twice.

Question on global scripts on 1/22/2020 9:37:37 AM
Global means everywhere all the time. It can be switched on or off if you enclose it in an IF statement that checks for a variable, but it will run that check constantly. The usual example is something like a global script that checks for a player's hit points and punts them to a death page if they hit zero.

How did you spend MLK day? on 1/21/2020 12:56:41 PM
It took me a moment to realize that wasn't a misspelling of bahn mi. The way they spell their name is dangerously close to being a request we always take seriously around these parts, so please don't ever mention that place when drunk or tired.

How did you spend MLK day? on 1/21/2020 12:52:31 PM
These sound much more Chad-like and manly than the rest of us stacking our pretend blocks, gotta admit.

How did you spend MLK day? on 1/21/2020 12:50:19 PM
Either Vain or Coins' mom might remember, I'm guessing.

How did you spend MLK day? on 1/21/2020 12:49:26 PM
That is so freakin cute! I want to play a point and click adventure set there.

Snow by Sethaniel on 1/21/2020 12:48:20 PM
Oh right, that too.

boner time on 1/21/2020 12:18:35 PM
You were being all down on it in the Discord but it's honestly really good. Or at least the writing itself is really good...I read over it all again this morning with the assumption it was all building up to something, and there seemed to be a lot of references and little hints. And if you're actually just pulling it all out of your ass and not sure where you're going with it, then it does an impressive job at least faking that there's more layers and some kind of real plan here. One detail I noticed was PJ coughing the blood over himself being paralleled with Sunny and the tea in the most recent update. Was that intentional? There's so much packed into these though and so much of it broken up into puzzle pieces that they're really best read all at once and not months apart. How much longer were you envisioning it being? I don't suppose it's something you could make a push to finish so that the parts could be released on some kind of regular schedule?