mizal, The Grandmaster Procrastinator

Member Since

5/5/2011

Last Activity

1/22/2022 3:19 PM

EXP Points

6,970

Post Count

18508

Storygame Count

9

Duel Stats

1 win / 6 losses

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Commendations

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Trophies Earned

Earning 100 Points Earning 500 Points Earning 1,000 Points Earning 2,000 Points Earning 5,000 Points Thorough and consistent writing workshop contributions / excellent commenting. Having 1 Storygame(s) Featured Posting 18506 Forum Posts Given by BerkaZerka on 11/10/2017 - Forum and Site Contributions Not Unnoticed Given by EndMaster on 11/30/2017 - It's everything you've always wanted! Given by Gower on 03/24/2021 - "I never want to see anyone, and I never want to go anywhere or do anything.  I just want to write." - P.G. Wodehouse Given by JJJ-thebanisher on 08/14/2019 - For excellent writing, keeping the site together and generally being an excellent presence Given by Killa_Robot on 08/15/2019 - For being a net positive to the site, even while helping idiots Given by MadHattersDaughter on 03/11/2021 - To my BFF and our hardest working admin. Sorry about, well, you know. . . Given by mizal on 08/15/2019 - MUHAHAHAHAHA! *strokes fluffy white cat* I always knew this day would come. Given by Will11 on 01/14/2018 - For Inseperable and your other great stories

Storygames

>DEVOTION
You harvest in the Arena. Every machine needs a function, and that is yours. Written for the Tiny 'Topia challenge.

A Stack of Cats
You are a man on a mission. The cats, they must be stacked.

A puzzling math and logic game I made just to put some of the scripting practice I've been doing to use. Have fun and please let me know if you encounter any bugs.

Should be solvable by middle schoolers, or those with same basic level of intelligence as a middle schooler.

Agent of Order
Orbiting a barren planetoid in a system full of nothing just past the edge of the frontier, The Last Outpost is just another refueling station. Strategically important, true, but on a routine stop you never expected to spend longer than a couple hours there, let alone a couple of days fighting for your life...

There are five epilogues, but some may be difficult to discover. Note that actions have consequences, but not always immediate ones. (And if you just need an End Game link, go play around with the probe.)

Facts About the Planet and the Solar System
A compilation of some little known facts about the solar system, as well as the debunking of a few myths.

In addition to the scientific explanations, there's a small story dramatizing it all.

Hopefully young readers will find this fun as well as educational. :)

(Might not be the greatest story ever written, but consider this: it got me 200 points.)

Featured Story Inseparable
It doesn't matter what they say...

Love is for the Birds
...and the squirrels. Sort of.



Written in six hours, for no other reason than to avoid consignment to the SHAME pit after my other Romance contest entry didn't want to cooperate.

Now You Gotta Deal With This S***

A tale told in verse. A text from your sister requesting a pick up from a party leads to a night of strangeness.

Inspired by Bucky's ballad contest. Though...I wouldn't call this a ballad. I'm not sure what I'd call it, actually, other than exceedingly stupid, and fun to write.

(Don't pay any attention to the scores, they're just for me to track which endings reviewers get.)


Read My Stories or Die!

HATE.

THE PURITY AND INTENSITY OF MY HATE IS LIKE A THOUSAND MERCILESS, UNQUENCHABLE SUNS.

AND YET, I ONLY NEED ONE...


 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 


Silver Horn, Silver Hooves
When the weather is fine, you've been coming to this grove to drink from the pool for centuries now. Today, you meet a stranger and hear a story that changes all that...



A fairy tale adventure.



Another Damn Wolf Story
unpublished
I have no idea why I wrote this. All I can say in my defense is that it seemed like a good idea at the ti--wait no that's a lie, I said, repeatedly that this was stupid and shameful every time I mentioned working on it.

The truth is I needed to publish something before the end of the year and there is CLEARLY a burning need for wolf stories in the psyche of children using the internet. But then they write them badly, or make their wolves behave like clans of cats. So here is a simple straightfoward story of a young wolf leaving his pack in search of a better life. Maybe no one will ever feel the need to write another one now, or if nothing else maybe this will give them ideas for how to do it in slightly more minimum-standards-meeting ways.

Final conclusion however is that writing about some dumb animal with no agency is not something I'd recommend.

Character Creator
unpublished
If you don't know what this is for, then it isn't for you.

Don't Get Date Raped!
unpublished
A short, educational piece. Please remain sensitive and respectful in the comment section. (I'd hate to have to report you to an admin for bullying me.)

(DO NOT READ if you're at all easily offended or lacking in a sense of humor. There's nothing graphic at all in here, but seriously, I still cannot stress it enough, this story is not for you.)

WOWSERS! Triggers ahead!


Dedicated to the good people of COG.

Articles Written

A List of Storygames for People Who Like to Read
A list of storygames with substantial effort put in, all written in the last couple of years and sorely in need of ratings and reviews.

CYS Forum Advice and Etiquette
A modernized guide to the forums. The path to internet popularity and happiness, and a few CYS specific do's and don'ts.

Recent Posts

Raping Thingy on 1/22/2022 2:03:30 PM
The important thing is that they're trying their hardest.

Game title taken? on 1/22/2022 1:38:21 PM
It's an unpublished game, those don't show up when peasants search for them, but they're still in the database and reserved after someone creates them. But, since you seem pretty committed to this theme, and the original creator of The Betrayer hasn't been around since....well whatever paleontological era it was when join dates showed up as question marks, I'll make you a deal. Post the first few pages of your storygame up through the first set of choices in this thread, and if we deem it worthy, you may have the title.

Advice anyone? on 1/21/2022 11:40:58 AM
Formatting is important. Dialogue needs to be on its own line, with a new paragraph any time there's a new speaker or some unrelated event. And there need to be blank lines in between paragraphs. There's--obviously--a lot of examples of other writing on this site, you can take a look at it if you're unsure. If you edit this you're going to have to repaste the new version in a new post, but making it more readable and not just a solid text block will make people more likely to give you feedback on the rest. You may want to take a look at this article for an explanation of dialogue punctuation as well: https://chooseyourstory.com/help/articles/article.aspx?ArticleId=4309 (And Gower has written a few other useful ones too.)

Not quite on 1/20/2022 3:24:50 PM
They're supposed to be about supporting authors and players of all forms of IF, but they've gone to hilarious lengths to exclude CYS. End went into more detail already but originally, since CYS games were choice based and not downloadable they weren't "real" IF. Then over the years that distinction went out the window, but our community is pretty self contained (as are the Adrift and Quest communities for more traditional parser IF) and neve really need them. Since I'm a fan of parser games too I have a time or two tried to encourage peeps here to try other kinds of games and vote in the IFComp, and at one point a lot of us here were writing reviews on the IFDB. Endmaster in particular did loads of essay length reviews for classic IF he played on the C64 and some of the original gamebooks, then Dan Fabulich right after he took over actually went in and deleted them all (more than 80) and banned End's account along with the accounts of all the other mods here he could find, even the ones who had just made them at some point and weren't even using them. I guess if anyone cared enough it wouldn't be so easy to get away with now that the IFDB actually logs mod actions, but, we were doing more for them than they ever did for us so if they want to shoot their own foot off out of spite, why stop them.

Through the Passages of Madness on 1/19/2022 5:40:13 AM
>>>Just freaking make sense. It's not hard. This is the one bit of advice so many of these authors needed.

Not quite on 1/18/2022 8:24:55 PM
I will just mention here that the Delight Games guy is pretty chill, and buying his library collection will not only get you some good games, but support a small independent CYOA company that still has its main focus on text and real writing. And really a few successful independents to provide some healthy competition as far as commercial IF goes would be a much bigger deal than any number of failed rebellions.

some movies probably none of you need on 1/18/2022 7:27:14 PM
https://youtu.be/Ja8TsLgOGfI

The Secret of NIMH is now free, for those of you who like cartoon mice taken seriously, or are of the correct age where this is reliving your childhood.

My first short story on 1/18/2022 3:49:04 PM
Seems like this might be interesting to play around with whatever these things are in a larger story. The idea is creepy in itself, but the character comes off more as a rebellious edgy teen than anything else. "Then again, why should I care about them? All they do is wrongfully judging others to please their hypocritical minds." Where does this idea come from? Nothing like this is established previously, it just gets blurted out as the main motivation to do this life altering/ending thing with nothing backing it up. And without that motivation there would be no story to tell, so it would help if it was a believable one. Or maybe a first person monologue from the creature itself isn't the best way to use this idea, since it does humanize them and take some of the creepiness and mystery away when you know exactly what they think. I wonder what a story from the paranoid POV of someone who thinks everyone around them is wearing masks would look like. Not bad at all if this is really a very first attempt at a story though. You should consider writing a bit of Lovecraftian horror for this thread if you want a low pressure way to get more practice: https://chooseyourstory.com/forums/creative-corner/message/28826

Is it okay to say hi? on 1/18/2022 10:40:39 AM
You really might as well have just left that last sentence out, that's half the internet. Anyway, welcome to CYS. I'm not really sure what kind of writing site culture you're coming from, but here we value honesty in any form of feedback and trust me, if you're being extremely annoying, some one will tell you so. As far as the forums go, well, they're not for everyone, but the only people who consistently get banned are kids running around with lots to post but nothing at all to say. Just keep things generally on some kind of topic and you should be fine. Anyway, enjoy your reading, and if you can leave ratings or any kind of feedback for the authors that would be hugely appreciated. These stories take a lot of work and it helps a lot encourage more if there's indication someone out there is paying attention.

Through the Passages of Madness on 1/18/2022 8:18:07 AM
The number of people who are decentish writers but can't bring themselves to dedicate more than 4 hours total to this whole 'branching' idea once they start it is indeed regrettable. One factor in the very old games is that they're used to be only a 90 minute wait between creating and publishing new games rather than the mandatory 48 hours there is now. Which at least means the volume of decidedly meh tier stuff has been cut down a lot, thankfully for you. Lots of noobs get bored and wander off in that time rather than inflicting their 2000 word maximum effort on us.