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Marauder

Gay and Depressed in Prison

3rd place entry in Corgi's Gaybellion Contest

In this game, you play a very familiar character from the previous Gay and Depressed stories, who is now in jail. You used to be a side character in other people's stories, but now the spotlight is finally yours in this Gay and Depressed spin-off!

If you're interested in some more Gay and Depressed story games, check out the original by queenlatifah04, Gay Old Time by Darius_Conwright, Gay and DepressedER!!! by fresh_out_of_the_oven, and Gay and Depressed: The snow bunny society by Benholman44. All of the "gay and depressed" stories are stand-alone stories, so each one can be read separately, but I highly recommend you check these stories out!

White Collar Ghosts

unpublished

An Entry for Endmaster's Edutainment Contest

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An edutainment game that is designed to teach the complicated math of High Finance while also bringing you into the dangerous underworld of financial crime. Will you survive and come out on top? Or will you just become another statistic, a foolish high roller who wanted to make it big but got sucked into the machine, ultimately losing everything you've worked so hard for.

Embezzling, derivatives, and risk. You play as Shawn Carombe, an amoral and wealthy Harvard Business School graduate awash in the world of high finance.

Solve problems. Go out to fancy nightclubs. Drink expensive cocktails. Do crazy drugs, with names covering the whole alphabet. Wear fancy suits. Party with hard people who call you brother one moment, and in the next, stab you in the back. But above all else, be ruthless and unforgiving.

Calculus and Statistical Theory are your weapons of choice and your number one tools to get an edge over the competition. But if all else fails, the silver handled chrome gun tucked securely in your pocket has a bullet with your rival’s name stamped all over it…

Special thanks to Endmaster for hosting such a cool contest, everyone in this wonderful community who has supported me throughout this journey, and most of all, to the readers who are currently staring at this title page, and are on the verge of embarking on an exciting adventure, rife with organized crime, gangsters, illegal drugs, and tons and tons of math(wasn't a typo, you'll get both meth and math in this story XD)! I hope you like this storygame, and don't forget to rate and leave a comment at the end! Thank you!

The hot dog wizard stirs. "I exist in many forms, but I chose this form because it is fun! You may see more magical beings if you continue to stick around". Anyways, welcome to the site! My name is RK and we're delighted to have you on board. I don't think this role play format is particularly popular because about 10 years ago, the site was inundated with Warrior Cat fans who essentially monopolized the forums to make role-play games that bordered on uncomfortably furry stuff. So we view anyone with a wolf or cat avatar with a healthy bit of suspicion. Before making your own game, you might want to read some of the games we have here, just to get an idea on how people write choose your own adventure style stories on here. If you hover over story games, you'll see a drop down list with different categories of stories. Here are some stories to check out: Kobold Kebabs. It's a delightful cooking adventure where you play as Scratch, a Kobold Kook who needs to make an amazing dish for this meeting of dwarf and elf delegates. It's really fun, and I think you'll like it! Check out Eternal, it's the best game on the site! Make sure to pay heed to the maturity warnings(the maturity levels are listed on the side), but it's a really cool story. Spell of Slumber: It's a Sleeping Beauty Fan fiction story, that isn't exactly a fan fic, but more of a retelling. With high quality prose and really awesome worldbuilding, it's genuinely a really cool story for people who like fairy tales, and even if you don't, you'll still enjoy it. If you're into horror, check out the Secret of Daphne. In fact, if you click on each of the categories, you'll see stars on the best stories. Those are called featured stories. Check them out! If I listed out all my favorite stories, the post would get too long, but for now, read a couple and if you like them, leave comments!

I got the reference! I only read the first book of the Bobiverse books, but I liked it! It was kind of weird and fun.

I rolled a 17

Trust me, Blow Your House Down is a different animal compared to Eyes on a Moon of Blindness. In case you don't want to read people's thoughts on a story until after you review, probably don't read the stuff below. But I just wanted to point out that Blow Your House Down is remarkably different to Eyes on a Moon of Blindness both in terms of narrative style and the way Bill writes action. And I know one of your gripes was lengthy exposition without payoff, and you definitely don't see that here. Because it's just a guy in a cabin dealing with a strange and unwelcome situation, in the midst of the wilderness. So I don't think the story will drag as much. Unlike eyes on a moon of blindness, the exposition for "Blow Your House Down" is a lot tighter and more crisp. The story is self contained, and doesn't require as much build up as it's literally just a guy in his mid 50s(at least, that's who I pictured when imagining the story) getting an unwanted visit from these 2 millennial hipsters(think 2010s-aesthetic with Birkenstocks and a twee sense of style), and these 2 unwanted invaders proceed to rob him. It's genuinely unlike anything I've seen, especially since the style of the invaders and their whole aesthetic seems counterintuitive given their actions. But I feel like that also lends the story a delightful sense of oddity because even the protagonist is surprised at these 2 random psychos, and there's an interesting metaphor that can be drawn between these 2 random actions and the Devil. I actually like that we don't find out much about why these 2 assholes are wrecking Al's night, they just are and we have to accept it. And it's a survival story, where Al is just focused on ejecting the invaders while dealing with nature's fury. It just works, the action is tight, there are so many branches, and each beat draws out the suspense. Like, it's not bloated, detached, or suffering with too much exposition. I really think summing up all of Bill's stories based on your opinion of Eyes on a Moon of Blindness is a bit hasty, especially since the space opera style of Eyes on a Moon of Blindness lent itself to more grand scale storytelling. But this is a very self contained, self aware story that begins and ends in one night. It's a choose your own adventure in the most raw sense, without any extended consequences or skips in the narration. Idk man, all I can say is, there's a reason it won the Break contest! Like seriously, it's good. Also, sorry for saying so much, I don't want to influence your opinion of the story before you had a chance to read it, but I just wanted to say that it's different from Eyes on a Moon of Blindness.

I think that's a good point. Mizal's suggestion was really good! I feel like you'll enjoy Blow Your House Down a lot. Also, once you read it, check out the gazette interview we did with Bill. Bill talks about his writing process a bit in one of the questions. I feel like Reborn or Blow Your House Down stands a pretty good chance of getting that elusive 8. Thanks again for doing this cool series of reviews, and kudos on the consistency! You made it from February 2025 all the way to December 2025. And that doesn't include all the bonus reviews you did throughout the contest as well! I also love that you don't hesitate to say if there's something you don't like, because now one of my goals is to someday write a story that you would give an 8 too! I feel like getting a Cavus 8 is something special, sort of like finding a unicorn or a truffle out in the wild.

Alpha Wolf is a great story to read on Halloween! I liked your review, but given that I'm still hoping for that elusive 8/8, how about reading Reborn? This time, I feel like you're definitely going to give it an 8. And it's not just me! 60 other people think so too! Would you be interested in reviewing Reborn for November, Cavus?

Your friend group sounds awesome.

It's the day before Halloween, and in my neighborhood, the streets are alive with spookiness as ghosts, jack-o-lanterns, and other supernatural creatures haunt the porches of many a house. What are you guys doing for Halloween? Any fun plans? If you're planning on dressing up, what costumes?

Hey Avo, Sorry I haven't gotten to answering this yet. I saw it though. Didn't mean to keep you waiting.

So, I guess the best way to describe the difference between energy levels and spectral lines is to use an analogy. So when you're playing darts, imagine you have an electronic light-up dart board. Different regions are colored differently. Similarly, each individual region in the Bohr Model of an atom represents an energy level. As you move closer to the center, your point values go up. Similarly, as you move closer to the center, the electrons experience a more stable orbit. But what's confusing is that the energy level goes down as you go closer to the nucleus. Because the nucleus can hug the electrons a lot tighter! So as electrons move through the different energy levels, they emit energy by releasing light(or absorbing light, depending on which direction they go). And that light can be measured by spectrophotometers, special instruments that scientists use. And to go back to the dartboard analogy, as you score in a region closer to the center, imagine that the dartboard lights up or says a little congratulations message.

"So when photons hit a proton, the it's electron orbitis it from farther away and gets closer again? "

Let's break this part down a bit, since there are a couple of things wrong with this sentence. So the electron absorbs photons, not the proton. But yeah, the general idea of it is right. Think of it like Mario eating a special mushroom and getting a powerup. When electrons absorb photons, they can jump to higher energy levels, just like how Mario gets special powers when he eats the mushroom.

"The n=6, 5, and 4 are equal distances from each other (going down, a bit right of the arrow) but for some reason the n=3 is spaced farther away and the n=2 even more so. As the electron in the symulation gets closer or farther from what I think is the proton (from the key), different squiggles appear."

Basically what happens here is that the electron shells(another way of saying energy levels) get closer together the further you go out from the nucleus, because it takes less energy to jump between subsequent energy levels as you gain more energy and reach the periphery of the atom. Think of it like this. When you're playing a video game like Dark Souls or Elden Ring or something, the puzzles/mechanics make no sense in the beginning, so you're struggling a lot. But as you play, going from level to level, or stage to stage probably takes less effort since you get the hang of it more.

" Obviously, the n is a variable and I'd love to say I know what it is but I'm not sure. Very obviously, they're showing some kind of different levels of energy. The arrows of the lines that appear sometimes point up, sometimes down. I'll make more observations about the connections between the squiggles and the proton/electron/photons in a sec, I need to look at it more."

Astute observation, Avo! So n is a quantum number. There's 4 of them, and n is the principal quantum number. Each number is a quantity that defines a different attribute of the electron, like what shell it's in, or what spin it has, stuff like that.

Nicely done Will! Dude, 6000 words in a day is impressive! And that too with teaching and all your IRL stuff. Awesome! I'll check this one out. I'm really excited for this one, and I've been looking forward to seeing what you'd publish. I think you seem to have a thing for "Terror" in your titles, since both Reign of Terror and now Terror of the Sea have that word in the title. Perhaps a third Terror story is coming soon?