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Marauder

Gay and Depressed in Prison

3rd place entry in Corgi's Gaybellion Contest

In this game, you play a very familiar character from the previous Gay and Depressed stories, who is now in jail. You used to be a side character in other people's stories, but now the spotlight is finally yours in this Gay and Depressed spin-off!

If you're interested in some more Gay and Depressed story games, check out the original by queenlatifah04, Gay Old Time by Darius_Conwright, Gay and DepressedER!!! by fresh_out_of_the_oven, and Gay and Depressed: The snow bunny society by Benholman44. All of the "gay and depressed" stories are stand-alone stories, so each one can be read separately, but I highly recommend you check these stories out!

Cool! Once you finish Terror of the sea, check this one out: https://chooseyourstory.com/story/polaris

This is a good one: https://chooseyourstory.com/story/the-terror-of-the-sea

Hey Harper, If you want to get back in the good graces of the site, and join the community, why not write a review of a storygame? A little sincerity goes a long way. Read a storygame, write down what you liked about it and what you didn't, and then leave a comment. That way, we know you're here to actually be a part of the community, and not just to troll.

Warden fight! Let's gooo! May the best warden prevail! @SindriV, if you have time and you're interested, please accept! You'd essentially write a 2000 word short story on a prompt Mizal gives, and then people will judge from 2 anonymous stories. It's very cool!

I meant the medium of short stories, and writing well, like skillfully

Poxy, I honestly think you should try again. I know you said CYOAs aren't your forte, but your short stories are really good. You know how to utilize the medium well, leverage drama, and keep the pacing strong, so I think you have a bunch of fantastic CYOAs within you. I really think you shouldn't write off CYOAs just yet. Please write some more! You have a good eye for this sort of thing, and I think your writing is really interesting. But still, if that's not your interest, that's ok. keep posting short stories! I'm learning a lot from you! Honestly, I'm cringing at some of my work after seeing the way you write, because your writing is really evocative and soulful in a way that I struggle to execute. I especially love the way you maintain tension throughout, and that's something I took away as being really important in my own stories that I need to work on.

I like this story a lot! It feels so surreal, and weird, but it's a really well written story. I love the way you use short sentence fragments in the beginning to create a sense of tension: "He is in free fall. A ticking clock. A pounding heart. Harsh fluorescent lights. The smell of alcohol. The room around him is small. Too small. If only he could—" This story feels really well paced, and although short, really left me with wanting to see more. I also love the way the doctor's office morphed into the jungle setting, I felt like the transition was done well. I love the metaphor of the boy feeling like he's losing control, and the escalating tension really adds a sense of tragedy. I think you took a serious theme and managed to make the metaphor cohesive throughout, and it lends the story an extra sense of tragedy. This is good, and you have a good command over the craft.

Also, congrats on submitting your story to the thunderdome! I better keep working on mine. I can't wait to see what you wrote. Best of luck!

Don't beat yourself up Avo. Focus on getting it in. You'd be surprised how many people mess up and don't submit anything. By submitting, you'd already be above many competitors. I bet you'll be happy with the results, by the end. Just focus on doing the best you can!

Aw thanks, Avo! That's really nice of you! I hope to have 1 more storygame by December 1st, my Edutainment contest entry. Best of luck with Shifter! I can't wait to see it in December, it should be quite cool and science-y!