Cancel the Kirby cartoon!

There were an amount of spelling/grammar mistakes, such as "We'vce" instead of "We've." Closer proofreading would be great for this story.

It seems like this was written by a three year old. The childish humor didn't go well with the plot, and I don't know about everyone else, but I didn't find this funny.

It was insanely linear... it didn't even make sense at some points because it was so linear. Such as this:
"As you keep watching it, you hate it so much you want it cancelled."
That just doesn't make sense. This is a better way to write it:
"You continue watching it, and you really hate it. You decide you want it to be canceled."
Now that sounds better.

There were also screw ups in the logic. You don't "Sell" free things. You give away free things. That doesn't make any sense to sell free things, because sell means to make a profit.

It was also very random, and made absolutely no sense whatsoever. You can't stop a war with free donuts. If you were going for random humor, it didn't work. Not for me at least.

Then there was the suicide choice. It makes you lose on the first choice, and it just shouldn't be there, since it leads you to one sentence and makes you restart the game.

Overall, i'm gonna say 1/8. Try harder.

I would have thought it was much better if you could have exited it at multiple points. Roaming the various branches of short text, similar sounding kirby related revenge was a little more intensive than I wanted. What I'm saying is please let us die and stay dead!
There were some grammatical and spelling errors as well. The story, however, while silly had some potential if it had been fleshed out a little more. Nothing wrong with silly as long as it's enjoyable and this was enjoyable to an extent.

nitty

It is O.K.

I killed Satan and that somehow ended the Kirby cartoon. If only things were truly so simple.

Best Story ever. I wish there were more endings

Love the endings

Hahaha so fun to play

It was funny and halarios
Can't wait to see how else you can win

"The cops arrive and shoot the gun, and the man luckily drops it."
Luckily the notorious gun was killed :)