Escape School

This was insanely random and linear. I didn't enjoy it in all honestly.

The first decision is death VS progression, and that just doesn't seem right. I mean, do you really want someone to take one glance at your story, click a single link, leave the game, rate it poorly, and think nothing more of it?

This was incredibly random, and the first death page was basically: "you eat a cupcake and choke, then see it has yellow powder in it. You die and now you're a ghost trying to find out who killed you."

That seems very random and incredibly linear. There was slightly more description then I mentioned, but it was still quite short and random.

Then there was the spacing. I felt some paragraphs would have been neater and more organized if they'd been spaced out.

The writing has potential, but the plot really makes little sense to me, and it feels rather cliche.

I did enjoy some parts of it, but a lot of it wasn't enjoyable in my opinion.

2/8.

Well, this would be more fun if there were less death links (although, in your defense, the 'good' links were really obvious)
and if you made it like a puzzle; little mysteries here and there, maybe you try to find the SAINT hideout instead of just knowing where they are (secret hide-out behind a peculiar bookshelf in the library? secret trapdoor underneath a certain student's desk? the possibilities are endless :D).
You could also make it so that the weird device would be hidden somewhere hard to find and there are clues (maybe some are written in code? You could find a graffiti saying "atbash" or "2 letters forward", hinting how to crack the code.)
Maybe some nice girl (secretly from SAINT) in the beginning stops you and says something like "Don't trust the teachers" or "Don't eat the food" so you would get a hint. Heck, maybe you even have a crush on this girl.

I think you can make this into a fun puzzle-ish storygame.

Minor bug: Even if you don't go to to the Teacher's Lounge you could still give Jenny the H2O.

get out your not supposed to be in here

AMAZING!!!! I really love this game and it was really fun!

I love to escape school!

There weren't that many options, I got there on my second try. I read all the deaths though, and they were funny.

maby have a vid of it once were done

good 3 star

i never played escap school

I really liked it, it was intriguing but the poem didn’t really make sense to me but that might be because I’m in grade 5 also the ending was a little simple but it was still really good I just wished it made a better picture in my head because it wasn’t really descriptive. I still love it though and hope you write some more