Hostage Rescue 1- Past transgressions

The grammar is pretty good; nothing struck out to me. Also, the maturity level is 1/8. Perhaps this should be higher with the death idea and the fact that there are terrorists (unless I am completely reading this wrong).

Nice plot, actually. There is a purpose for the protagonist. Um. Nice interactions between the characters.

I wish there was more on setting, other characters, organizations, and action. This would enhance the quality of the storygame a lot because you have decent plot right here.

It was a small, but good read. Grammar and spelling were just about perfect. Punctuation wasn't too bad.

It was slightly short, had some length and on a few pages there was a lot of writing, which, was nice, but it would've been nicer if it had continuously long pages.

The effort of this story has been seen, and there is a glimmer of a better writer, just waiting to be found :) 4/8

(Also, sitted is not a word)

Well...little VIOLENT.

Not bad, I guess. May have found a broken link, but after clicking through it again, I think it was just my computer spazzing out on me.

That was so good, make more make more

Probably should check the grammar, but otherwise, a decent story. Seems as a setup for a sequel. I did find an error on a page, which the link was blank.

It was a good idea and the writing gave good descriptions of what is going on without taking too much time, only the choices seemed to end up in random endings and the length could've been longer and more involving.