Rebel Jedi 2: The Rebel Base

Even the Habsburg family tree has more branches than this story.

Since this author is long gone, I can go ahead and mercilessly rip on this thing hahaha. The plot might be very fun: you know escaping on a space ship. HOWEVER like the curse of fanfiction written on this site, the writer obviously thought we had watched the show this thing was based off on. Guess what? i didn't watch and I don't care.

I already am not a huge fan of sci-fi, especially ones with Blasty Blasty aliens and laser beams, but this story kept throwing this stuff at me like it's throwing candy at a shrieking toddler. Yeah laser sword, wow.

The characters? Don't give a darn about them. Uninteresting,bland, already forgot their names.

You know what's the most funny part? The feeling the author had given up on it at the halfway point. The death scènes aren't even fun to read. The text is getting shorter, the descriptions lazier and of course the story ends up with a bang.

To be continued.

The "End Game and Leave Comment" situation is something I really dislike seeing, especially when it comes to having absolutely no hint that you might die if you choose that choice. It was just: "Here, choose one of these randomly, because I'm going to give you basically no information about what's happening!" These make bad stories.

The writing itself is decent but can be better. More description would make it better and the story as well. A background is always useful, and could easily just be put in as an optional link that can be used by the reader if needed.

Looking at your profile, I can see that you won't be back to fix anything, so this can just be for others that have stories and/or are writing one. Pay attention to what you're doing and plan ahead. Having an outline is good and keeps you on path, and can easily be modified to accommodate some unforeseen issue. The writing was free of errors, but it wasn't that long anyway.

4/8

Does not follow EndMaster's guide for a good Pokemon game

You are now a rare occurrence of scoring lower than 5 on my personal scale system.

You can't even spell the base material correctly. Oragana should be Organa, Mos Esle should be Mos Eisley, and Tuskan Raiders should have an E not an A! These are just the spelling errors in the base material!

Normally I can get past spelling errors if the story is redeeming enough. This was not the case here. You seemed to have rushed everything. There's no flesh on the bare bones that make up this story. It is also completely linear. Nothing you decide to do changes anything in the story except when you die. There is a pointless amount of deaths in this story.

2/10 would not recommend. I apologize for the harshness but I am a hardcore Star Wars fan. I have been disappointed with the Star Wars content so far. I hope part 3 isn't as disappointing.

It pretty fun

It was at least greater than the other one, but few tweaks are still needed. Work hard!

Not as good as the first

boring

yet another interesting take

This was a short story that passed some time and keep me entertained for the short amount of time I had.While it was short I also realise it’s a whole story line in all honesty so I can’t complain on the quote on quote “Shortness.”I find this to be a story that’s there to pass a few minutes if your bored as hell and generally a cool concept.Cause I really love stars wars, rainbow six siege, anything about weaponry and combat I love.So to have weaponry, combat, tactics, in a whole series is a daydream come to life!
I’m hoping you haven’t just given up on this site since this game has the potential to be something great*ahem trump quote* and as always, I encourage you to make this into a bigger series.4/8 great job with a 1/2 rating.-Kinda regards Mistery