Player Comments on The White One

I enjoyed this game a lot. You clearly put a lot of effort into it and I myself am a fan of Slenderman. You did a great job describing the environments I was placed in. Very large amount of detail, loved the pictures. However, I felt it was a bit too short, but that's alright. I don't know if it's been said but there is a bug I encountered. In the hospital if you use the scalpel first instead of the crowbar on the girl then back out and go back you can't use the crowbar to get the key and progress through the story. 6/8 great job.

I loved it. The slender man has always been super creepy in my opinion and he is a fantastic villain. Your use of items was excellent and I really enjoyed having to figure out what to use and when to get what was needed. I give it a 7/8 and I hope you make a sequel or build more on this one. I'd love to know why slender man took you and what he will do next :)

i got stuck at the part where you woke up like what do i do

nice

I was fiddling with links and items more than I should, it took me skimming a few reviews that it was due to a bug. :(((

This was my first time going through an entire story on this site. I only went through once and thankfully finished it to the end alive, but I can see how somebody could easily not make it if they aren't both thorough & curious. I'm sure as time goes on I'll have a better understanding of what makes a good or bad story but for now I very much enjoy this & I was transported somewhere else for the duration of my experience.

Short, but cool. Though a bit buggy and that bug impedes the progression of the story. Amount of using objects is good. Good potential, debugging and making the story a bit longer would be appreciated.

A bit buggy.

I don't know what I did wrong but I died lol. Still it was a good game despite it's short. So I think it deserved a higher rating than 5-ish. Some gamestory with higher rating than this one shuck big time !

This game is really fun but when I use the scalpel in front of my guirl I was thinking of cut the rope not what append. And for the crowbar I don’t think was a good idea.

This game was really fun but when i use the scalpel in front of my girls i was thinking of cut the rope not what append. And for the crowbar i don’t think that it is a good idea.

Interesting, with a good dose of creepiness. The game overall was pretty entertaining, but I wished there was more to the ending...

Wonderfully crafted.

Took awhile to figure out hospital scene. Use the crowbar on the girl first...

6/8 I got the alright death... When I was in the cabin I tried everything but nothing worked ;o;

Like it said above, good but short. The cliff hanger ending is a tease, but no spoilers. The only writing flaw I found was the lighter in the coffin, maybe just add one more page in darkness. 5/8

Confusing.

I DID IT!! WHY???

Nicely done! Even if it was short, it was a pretty good story. The pictures were engaging, and I'm sort of glad there were no creepy faces popping out, but it would make it creepier though. There really should be a sequel, though it's okay to keep it suspenseful like this. Overall though, great job! (Even if I did die because of that missing article)

I loved it. The pictures were detailed and told you what was going on. I liked the use of items. Only one thing I wish you had put in. A longer story. Nevertheless, I still loved it and hope you'll make a sequel. 7/8

It was fine.. well not too good but not too bad.
well you could have use more storyline to make it better.

Loved it! The bit with the girl was a bit buggy, unfortunately I died in the cabin in the woods. Hope to see more!

Quite good. 6/8

Interesting... If slightly disturbing.

I got the second ending, where I was stuck in the cabin and met my doom.

surprisingly very good, i would like to see more of these

it was ok

Got the best ending :)
Personally not a "fan" of Slenderman, but I actually liked this game. It was genuinely creepy, and for some reason the red text appealed to me in this game.
It was written well, and I liked the mysterious tone at the end. IT wasn't too hard, but it wasn't easy either.
I think I encountered the bug that everyone seems to be talking about, you might want to fix that.
6/8

3/8 - How do you even beat the game?

It was well written and the items all had a use that was logical whilst not being too easy. I would have rated it higher however there is a game breaking bug in part of it where if you use the scalpel before the crowbar you can't progress or even die so you are stuck.

What does the picture and the article have to do with the daddy and lil girl? Is there a part 2? Because it deserves it! Though this game is pretty easy. :)

Wow. I survived, so yay for that, but that girl... that was... and then my IPod bugged out and I had to do it again... Still, great game! Loved your use of pictures!

A very good game.I got the best ending!

I hope you make a sequel!Great job!

Kinda short but I enjoyed it. I wish it was a little bit longer.

@Kiel_Farren
The reason the protagonist couldn't save the little girl was because of the state she was in. She had bits of bone sticking out from her leg, she had a rope almost embedded into her throat and a gun in her stomach. He didn't have any medical skills so the use of hospital items would have been no help
It was better to put her out of her misery.
I hope that explained it all.

Interesting, not to hard though.

It's an excellent horror story and I give it a 6/8. But I do have one complaint. The character you play as seems to be sympathetic toward the tortured girl. Which, of course, who wouldn't be? But the character admits he cannot save her, which is fine. The problem is that the character is carrying around a scalpel, an object sharp enough to cut the little girl's bonds stringing her to the ceiling...

Yet you do not explain -why- the character cannot do that, and very -rashly- decides to kill her instead. You also do not explain why the character cannot at least try to untie her, or make SOME an attempt to save her.

If the character made an effort, I would have been sympathetic to him. I would've felt the helplessness.

Whereas now, had I been in his shoes and decided to kill someone when I had the means to rescue them, I would've felt like an idiot. And probably an evil jerk-ass for needlessly slaughtering an already tortured child.

While I'm not a fan of slenderman or horror games, this was pretty good, but i think the maturity level should be 6, as the scene about the little girl might be a little gory for 13 year olds

Really good game. As a Slendy fan (Who's extremely annoyed that the last MH update was on the 8th!) I was pretty impressed by it. The only question I have is why there was always laughing when Slendy overrode your conciousness. I don't follow tribe 12 (which is the only other half-decent Slenderman page that I know of), only Marble Hornets, so I don't know if it's on there or not. All I know is that when Slendy appears there's a shitload of audio distortion on the recording equipment so you don't know what happens. Also, why does Slendy bash the door in, he can just randomly materialize wherever he wants (unless there's a method to the madness I don't know about).

I know I ranted fan-boy style for a while there, but good game. I gave it a 5/8

Dang! That was awesome! I'm freaked out to death about the legend of the Slenderman, so the mere mention of it scared the heck out of me! For those that know that it's about the Slenderman, it's even more scary. The pictures helped the fear aspect, and it was pretty fun. Not really chalenging (the chalenge was not running away from the computer), but that's fine. I guess the only true complain I have is the overuse of the crowbar, which I admit has many uses. Great job! 7/8

I wanted to kill that slender bastard...

That was painful for me to do. I actually felt guilty doing that.

I think there's a lot to improve on here but you managed to make me feel terrible and that's worthy of at least a 5.

It took 3 tries, but i finally won. 6/8

It's not bad. Relatively short, but the items were fun to use, and the story was quite descriptive at times.

Very nice use of the 'creep factor'. Good use of items too. Well done :)