The Temptation of Ice

What's there is actually pretty good. There's dramatic tension, plenty of choices that don't immediately result in a game-over. Overall, the writing is good, and I really got the sense that my character was somewhere very cold, and in danger of freezing to death. Even the deaths were believable and realistic.

However, the fact that this is essentially a demo means that I can't rate it any higher than a 3 even if I wanted to. The story just barely starts to hint at a larger, overarching plot before it abruptly comes to an end.

If this ever gets republished as a completed version, I would be thrilled to replay it though.

Well-written but also a bit short.

Wow. harsh if you get the bad ending.

Well this was very short, but it wasn't very long. The grammar seemed to be pretty good though, and I'd definitely give this a good rating if it was a full length story.

The writing here was really good, I thought. The only problem I found was that there was almost nothing here. I really want to see more, just please try to really make it MORE.

I got the elderly ending! COOL

Pretty freaking good!

Good for a test run! I look forward to what you'll offer in the future.

The writing was good, but it needs to branch out more. But all the stories I like usually have to branch out like a motherfucker for me to enjoy them much :3

The writing is good, but I would've liked to see something more substantial here. As it is, it's a very nice beginning of a story that just abruptly ends.