World War 2

I think this was a decent effort at an attempt for a serious historical war game. I take it that showing the horrors of war were the main objective of this piece, and for the most part, the writing was adequate enough to portray that.

Even the best ending cannot really be considered that. The protagonist is still left both physically and quite mentally scarred by the things he had seen in war.

There were flaws with sentence structure, and in a short story like this, some proofreading couldn't have hurt.

Anyway, despite some flaws, I found it to be quite enjoyable for what it is.

I liked that, it was quite interesting and though some of the choices might be a bit suspect (personally I'd have thought it would have been staying down in the trench rather than standing up and merrily throwing corpses out into no-man's land) but overall this was a well-written and entertaining point of view of a soldier.
There's a few small things I'd suggest, first trench warfare is usually associated with World War 1 so your description puzzled me when talking about trenches in World War 2. Also in places you could have broken up the text into paragraphs a little more to make it easier reading but overall pretty good and I hope you write more :D 4/8

I was skeptical the author could meaningfully write about 'the difficulties a soldier had while fighting the Germans in the trenches' in a story with only a length of 2, and while I don't know if they entirely succeeded there's more content and choices here than expected, and the writing is serviceable.

A few issues with typos, strange word choice, run on sentences and so on that need to be cleaned up--I'm less forgiving of these things in a very short story since it'd be so quick to proofread, and there's an error in the description itself--but all in all this is better than most of the drivel we've gotten lately, and not a bad addition to the Edutainment category. (This should be moved there, by the way. I know you're going for the 'horrors of war' or whatever but this still doesn't count as a horror story.)

Oh, and I kind of question how my character could've realistically had both legs and an arm blown off by a grenade, plus crushed ribs and internal bleeding, and still been carted out of a trench alive, healed up and had the president visit to give him a medal, but I guess I was just that much of a badass.

good

amazing

bad ending

Good game

I liked it, it was for nigers tho

Its a good game but to short.

it gud