Player Comments on A Fantastic Journey

Good job!

No, this was so good that I feel the need to expand upon how good this story was in the various points that I usually dish out upon other stories.

1) The main character was actually quite decent. I mean, he wasn't expanded upon very much, but the point of that was to probably allow to place yourself in the shoes of the character, not just pure laziness, which is always something I appreciate with a main character.

2) The premise could have been screwed up, but you did quite well to spice things up and by the end of it, I wished that it would have gone on since I really needed to find out who that voice in the good ending was.

3) Your grammar and punctuation is very good, or at least there were no mistakes that I could notice in the story as I played it, though someone with keener eyes than me might say otherwise.

4) Of course, nothing's perfect and the fact that you wished to make this in parts really killed part of the joy I got from playing/reading this storygame. I mean, when you post a story, either post the entire thing or not at all, breaking it up in parts isn't viewed very kindly upon on this site, unless the parts themselves are excellent, like in Homo Prefectus... and what's worse, you ended it on a cliffhanger(at least the ending I got was a cliffhanger) which isn't entertaining in series or in stories.

And with all that, I rate this game - even though it ended on a cliffhanger and I may never see the next part again - a 6/8, though I know that there are people who will disagree whether this actually deserves such a high score.

I got the most depressing ending. 😁

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I've always wondered what it would be like to be abducted by aliens. Now I know. This was entertaining in its own way, but a little too full of stereotyped aliens. There was a selection of imaginative endings which I explored though.

I like the fact that the protagonist passes out every single time. It's very funny

This was quite enjoyable!

This story was written well, and I did not notice any grammar or structure issues that distracted me from the narrative. The concept was solid, and seemed to be developed fairly well.

The branching was sufficient. Even though there was not an abundance of choices throughout the story, the choices available were, for the most part, meaningful, and took the narrative in different directions.

The worst part of this story, and what caused me to rate it lower than I otherwise would have, is that the "most exciting ending" was not an ending, but a "to be continued". Even if you leave a few questions unanswered, provide some resolution to the story. What is considered the "best" ending is unfinished, and that makes me sad because I enjoyed what I had read.

Overall, a solid and enjoyable story. But beware of the "best" ending, it will leave you hanging.

Um so just because I decided to run from possible danger as my first choice means I don't get any more of the story? So not fair.

I got the second best ending. So not bad. The story was pretty good.

I got the second best ending. Its a nice story, but a little too short for me. (Maybe the best ending has a longer story idk) i enjoyed it though. Solid story, no errors

Wait what?

Good

Hiya! :-). Great story. Well done you. I liked how I played, (fought till the end :-) ), and happpy with the ending. It's amazing what happens when you believe in your own power, even in a game. :-). So great work! The only improovement I feel you could make, is, extend the story. Write about the character exploring his powers, or, uncovering the true mystery of his abduction. My 3rd suggestion is, getting the main character to finnish the aliens off. You could make a big dramatic execution.

Yay found the most exciting ending

I sneezed and the game lasted just as long.

It was Fantastic. Pretty basic storygame.

I got the most exciting ending first try! It could have been made longer though.

I chose the safe option. So abrupt and snarky I laughed out loud.

thanks!

You MUST absolutely continue this story!

Fast ending, creepy at the start and really? At the end

Interesting, this was my first CYOS type book so i have no idea if it was good or not...

You must continue.

I died very quickly...

This is an incredibly good story with a lot of detail! The story line is great, and I enjoyed every moment of it. This only bad thing is that I died very quickly. I might go back and start again to maybe live for a little longer...

i dont know why "its worth every cent" is such a high rating since i diddent pay anything

Very good, very good. Cliched and unoriginal, however. Excellent writing, with the odd grammar mistake.

I need closure. Conveniently, so does this story. You successfully hung a lampshade on a few cliches and gave us a reason to finish reading, only to be faced with a premature ending. Please do finish this.

you better keep this story going, this is epic

not finished :(

I liked the game. It was truly fantastic.

7/8 It was missing a spark that makes great stories great. Read some of 3J's work and you will understand what I mean.

It's a decent story with some interesting story lines, too bad it has an open ending, I don't really like waiting ;)

Very interesting Sci-Fi in this game. I'd like to see where it goes from the 'escape' endings =)