Player Comments on A Stroll in the Forest

I do like how this story starts out. The initial descriptions of the path through the forest is nice. I like that there are sounds, visuals and (almost) smells to detail what’s going on. I also like that there are really some options and choices that affect the story. However, how they affect the story is, as another commenter pointed out, quite random.

Now sometimes the lolrandom can work well with a story. In some places here, that factor is good and works well, even though the story is actually apparently quite random. Add to that the idea that this story is quite short, and there’s really just not a lot going on here. It seems like most of the options are actually related to that one drug-induced one and I’m wondering if the whole story is really about someone’s bad (or good) trip.

Either way, this was a nice attempt at a story. The options were good and the writing was good. Due to the number of options, nearly every direction was actually very short. Even with the lolrandom effect, I think this could be improved with some more description (like that on the first page) and longer paths to more of a story.

This is yet another game that fits into the lolrandom category. It's incredible how a story can shift plots that sloppily.

What I thought would be a decent story about a walk in the woods based on the ratings ended up being an incredibly short story with an almost nonexistant plot.

In my playthrough, I somehow turned into a fucking pokemon trainer so I could fight a bear. The plot changed so suddenly, and I was honestly pretty confused.

Character development was nonexistant. I have no emotion toward any of these characters, because I don't have a reason to have any emotion toward any of the characters. I can't relate to them in any way. Not that there were many characters to begin with.

Detail was at a minimum, which made for a short number of words, and a short story. On top of this, the choices hardly branch out. I chose about one or two links in each playthrough, and it ended.

Take more time to write your stories. Make something you can be proud of, and not a few lolrandom pages.

This story is like a small box of chocolates. It’s short and sweet, and you can’t tell what your biting into (or what will bite into you I guess). It’s very random, but its strange and humorous twists made me laugh in the end.

So, if you are looking for something short and random this will be the one for you.

Robert Frost writes about better strolls in the forest than you.

There is no real plot, it doesn't make any sense, and the choices lead to totally random outcomes. So for that, I guess it's written better than some of the other bad stories I've read.

Typical lolrandom game. No consistency or ability to predict the results of actions, so the rating just becomes how entertaining the game is. It's not that amusing either, but the spelling and grammar is better than the genre's status quo, at least.

Found this with the random storygame button, and really it should just be taken down. It's frickin random all right and completely incoherent.

I mean I wasn't expecting great things about a 1200 word story about strolling through the woods, but I'm positive anyone currently on the site could do better given the same limitations.

2013 was a dark time indeed.

This game was fun to play, but you could make the story a bit longer.

The story... was without context and sorta random.
The word I can come up is: bland.
The character is without emotion and monotone. I do enjoy the effort you committed to great grammar and word choice, but they didn't work in favor of you.

It's very short and random story. There's no real plot line going for it, and it's just a guy that goes into the woods and becomes a high Pokemon trainer in one of the endings.

The writing is nice, spelling and grammar-wise. There's no characterization, probably because there's 3? characters. Two of the aren't even human. There's no story to rate. It's all very random.

I think you could've done something with this? Maybe make it a magical forest, so at the very least there's some explanation to it. Or hell, go for the protagonist being high the entire time like you did in that one ending. That's also a lot more interesting.

I do look forward to reading any stories you make that have an actual plot, seeing as you did pretty well on this one writing-wise.

Very short, but well written. The only thing that confuses me is at one of the zombie endings it says, “oh, shoot, dog.” Dog? I’m not a dog...

Quick and funny death.

Wasn't what I expected. A few of the chooses where funny, however every choice has a short end.

"The bear does not care that you are a pansy. It does, however, dislike noise. The bear attacks you with claws of fury.


Fortunately, the bear missed your tear-streaked face.


Unfortunately, you are dead."

Seriously, the bear could have at least given me a bear-hug for that. ;)

Its a good game bit different but too short.

I loved the quiz Samanda

Nice. The first time I played I ended up with the toast victory ending, but the next time I broke my crown ;O

It ends way too quick but writing was decent

that was fun. Short but fun

This covers almost every genre, amazing.

It is great! 5/8 M8

it is different. i liked though

...Stabbing...Meh, I can watch 'Smile HD' and laugh, so it wasn't that strange. Though it wasn't the best of quality.

I like the pokeball bear zombie and the crazy dark magic its so fun and different!

two word. diabetes illuminate

da fuq did i just play? Nurse joy is a liar.

Pokebattle!!!

:D

I love all the different endings you can get, and also that you can have a poke battle with the bear. I appreciate the zombie too. I like that the endings are all so different. Maybe I would have liked it longer? But besides that, I didn't see anything wrong with it.

I died in the cabin. Although I died, I feel satisfied with my death.

Lol! this one was good

Ha! I liked the humor. "a cliff cleverly disguised as a hill"
Bought time you lay of those drugs. We'll be having none of that.

I can only say two things. Lol, and WTF.

The humor reminded me a bit of Kingdom of Loathing, which is a good thing, but I would have liked better descriptions of my choices like:
"You look left and see the road winding through an ancient forest. You look right and see the path get wider as it cuts through a sunny field."

A nice, little, confusing story.

Ok