PerforatedPenguin, The Expert Scrivener
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Read my story, In 3, for some sci-fi!
Alternatively, try my foray into Grimdark Fantasy: The Red Church.
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Alternatively, try my foray into Grimdark Fantasy: The Red Church.
Achievements:
- Jackpot! (750)
- Swiss Bank Account (500)
- Rookie Of The Year (200)
- Dedicated Minion (180)
- Tallyman (60)
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24 hours to save the ceremony, but is it even worth it?
Author's Notes
Multiple/Full readthroughs strongly recommended.
Entry for Endmaster's Crisis Contest, 2024
Author's Notes
Multiple/Full readthroughs strongly recommended.
Entry for Endmaster's Crisis Contest, 2024
An ambassador to a distant civilization, you return home just in time to find the Sol system on the brink of destruction. Rally your fellow humans, if you can. You've been gone a long time, but they haven't changed, at all.
Entry for Endmaster's Prompt Contest 2.
Heavily inspired by Liu Cixin's Rememberance of the Earth's Past trilogy, as well as Wandering Earth.
Republish (9/13/2023):
- Proofreading and minor editing
- Added new branch taking place in other planets and colonies
"In your dreams, you see the crimson spires rise from the fog menacingly... a voice, whispering 'come back' over, and over again."
Author's Notes
Entry for Endmaster's Prompt Contest 3, 2024
Prompt: A story about making a deal with a demon/devil.
Author's Notes
Entry for Endmaster's Prompt Contest 3, 2024
Prompt: A story about making a deal with a demon/devil.
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CYS Monthly Gazette - 10 December 2024 on 12/10/2024 6:13:15 PMI enjoyed this more
Team Secundus on 11/18/2024 11:20:49 AM
Well shit. These encounters were rough.
Was fun. One of these days my character will escape successfully.
Team Secundus on 11/17/2024 6:33:32 PM
Bishop shrugs off the side comments from the mason and hunter, and tries to recite a prayer for the fallen Miller.
Tries, that is. A few words in the smell (that somehow passed through the gate) hits him, and he gags uncontrollably. He decides that a few words are enough.
Sentence Structure Workshop on 11/16/2024 1:43:58 PM
Thank you for the feedback, Gryphon. Those are good edits, and being a bit too general has always been an issue with my writing, and I think those changes do help with the clarity and strength of words used. I agree that I tend to distance the reader and the narrator, and aside from the last 'hear' which was intentional, the others can definitely be revised.
I ended with ellipses because I was running a little over word count and I had no idea where the story would go from there (other than the gay highschool romance). It's a valid point, though.
Sentence Structure Workshop on 11/16/2024 1:36:36 PM
50k featured gay romance story incoming.
Sentence Structure Workshop on 11/16/2024 1:26:15 PM
Thank you, Gower. The style thing was definitely not intentional, though I vaguely noticed it towards the end.
Sentence Structure Workshop on 11/16/2024 12:24:19 PM
Just my specialty.
Team Secundus on 11/15/2024 10:28:15 PM
Bishop has always been a devout man of the Lord, and had no doubts in the purity of his soul. He will step up first to be inspected.
Sentence Structure Workshop on 11/15/2024 4:35:36 PM
I haven't written in a while, so I may be a little rusty... and slow. Very slow.
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Length: 216 words
Time: ~20 minutes(!)
You couldn't help but peek over the top of your canvas to check on Marco. As if sensing your gaze, he looks up and gives you a lopsided smile before scooting his easel to completely obscure your vision.
"I couldn't see it anyway," you mutter, sitting back in your seat.
He makes no response, but you know that he's enjoying the mystique he's putting up for his artwork. You shake your head and return to your little sunset over the hill, brushing on the last few rays of light as your impatient subject threatens to duck under the horizon.
Moments later, you hear him stand, satisfied.
"What did you paint?" he asks.
"I'm more interested in what you had made," you reply, ignoring his question.
He smirks, and brings his canvas over to you. It takes you a few moments to see it - a blurry, impressionistic city scene slathered on the canvas with wavering streaks of paint. As you focus, the shapes become clearer: skyscrapers, cars, people, and the streaks of neon light reflected on the rain-wetted asphalt.
"Kolkata," he adds. "I grew up there."
"And you?" he asks, peering towards your canvas. Slightly embarrassed, you stand to block it with a nervous chuckle.
"Why don't you tell me more about Kolkata?" you hear yourself asking....
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Trying some more dialogue related stuff. Dunno, didn't see where this story really was going, but it's just a short snippet anyways.
Team Secundus on 11/15/2024 3:47:25 PM
"The hand of God, indeed," Brand replies, looking down at his trusty shield. "I will take the lead this time."