Player Comments on Backwoods

This was an interesting plotline. I will say that I think it would have benefitted from a proofreader, as there were a few errors that could have been caught before being published.

It was good to see that Kent and the player character had a (semi, at least) legitimate reason for being out in the forest, even if driving to a bar perhaps wasn't the best reason. I did wonder how they planned to get home afterwards, though, since I assume they would be too drunk to drive safely.

I liked the fact that the player character took the beer from Kent, but I was a little disappointed that the only choices after that were to either give the beer to Kent, or to drink it myself. Still, at least there was the opportunity to avoid drinking and driving!

I did think about refusing to follow Angel to the sanctuary and taking my chances in the forest, with whatever might be there, but I decided not to do what would probably be the most sensible thing. I found it interesting that Byron's speech later indicates that the player character is like the deer that just followed Angel to the Sanctuary. It gives off very 'I'm only doing this because you chose it' vibes, which I always find quite interesting.

I did find the whole hand in the fridge to be extremely creepy, and it was good to have the opportunity to explore and look for more evidence before leaving. Unfortunately, the path I took did end up getting Kent killed, so perhaps if I'd chosen a different path, both of us would have been able to get out without being caught.

I think there were parts of this storygame that could have been expanded upon and, as I mentioned, it could have done with a proofreader prior to being published. But the concept was an interesting one, and I'd be interested in exploring more and seeing if I could end up with a different fate in the future.

A good horror game, old but a classic. A few spelling and grammatical errors, but not terrible.

good story lol

boring

I didn't obey.

Very amazing! I love it. Try to make it out alive... There is cannibalism and gore. Amazing!!!

This... how do I say it, was okay for me. I felt that the story was eh, it might be better had there been more describing and action.
The major thing is, the story needs meat, and bones. You have the bones, the structure, what it is about, however the flesh is missing. This is what sets a good story apart from a "meh" one. A good story would have vivid, descriptive text(if applicable), and this is pretty important for horror stories. From what I've read, good horror can creep you out from either 1.Lack of information, or 2. Details details details.
I think you have the idea here, just need to really flesh it out.
You have the balloon, but blow it up.
You have the ink, now paint the picture.
I can go on and on...
Good luck!

This was pretty good. Probably the best horror story game I've played so far.

'Your in the wrong place, at the wrong time.' I saw that and I expected a page full of grammatical errors. It's and its, your and you're, there, their, and they're-PLEASE take the time to learn how to differentiate between the homonyms and I guarantee you'll be much better.

Also, as others have mentioned, you make the reader make choices that they don't want to. That isn't a storygame. That's just a story.

Good potential, but needs work. 2/8.

SPOILER ALERT!!!

Is the best ending getting home, then "Obey"?

This was kinda boring, because if you choose a ‘safe’ answer the story will usually end. I feel like it’s only one story that the author is trying to direct the player to. Don’t recommend.

Good story, though you really should take the time to learn the difference between "there", "their", and "they're", and other such common misspellings. The biggest complaint I have, though, is that so many "choices" loop immediately back into the choice you didn't take. For example, you can "choose" to stay or leave, but if you choose to leave, your buddy whines about it and you're forced to stay. It makes for a very linear, railroaded story line, with few actual choices at all.
Overall, a fun horror story, and I like the twist at some of the endings. Keep working at it and improving, you're on the right track!

pretty generic but ok all around.

Some very good story-telling! However, the game was too linear.

scary.

Very linear (although my games are pretty linear as well).

I didn't like this. Every time I wanted to make a choice, you'd make it so I would still go with the opposite choice, such as searching the grounds and leaving the place. You put the options there, but there's no real choice at all. That's not a Story-game. 1/8. Good plot though, I liked it as a story, but this is no Story-game.

It's not the best but it's certainly not the worst. I kinda liked it except for the fact that it was slightly linear.

someone really likes bear traps.

Super scary, the end is the worst.

Good, I guess. I wish there were more story paths though, especially in the last sequence. It was very linear, in your next story, try to make multiple paths. I know it's hard - I have 5 stories waiting in Drafts, that I haven't finished, because it's hard to make a story with different endings. But trust me. The best stories on the site have plenty of paths. Something to think about anyway. 5/8.

seriously twisted.. don't know whether to be weirded out or just plain disgusted.

IM DEAD IN A BEAR TRAP

Not a bad story, be proud.

well it's not shit...

Meh. It was okay.

It was ok.

Haha, the concept is an interesting one though perhaps you gave away too much of the story in the introduction so the reader will know just what to do to avoid danger :) The writing was good though and the idea well done, good work