Cat's Day

A warning. I am going to start bitching about a lot of things, that have to do with what a cat does.

Normally, a stereotypical cat wouldn’t be going around chasing squirrels. That is something the stereotypical dog does. Now, I am not saying that not something that a cat may do, but as a cat person, I can tell you that that is not what most cats do.

Now actual constructive criticism: One of your first choices was to eat and drink, without the owner being awake. Maybe you should go into the variables and mess around with that to make sure you only can eat and/or drink after the owner is up. Secondly, your story was short. Extremely short. A little descriptive writing would be nice, but still was very rushed. Third, your grammar could use a lot of work. And don’t be shy to ask for help! There are a lot of people you can PM that would help you fix your grammar. Overall, a 3/8.

This is another nice little story, but it really needs a little proofreading. There are a number of different errors on the first page including word use, typographic errors, and tense errors. I do like that there are choices in the story, though the first page might be labeled something other than “The First Page,” especially since there’s an option to go there in the story itself. The your vs you’re error shows up more than once as well throughout the story. That’s a painful error to read.

The story itself has lots of potential and is a neat little story. I like the options that you have as a cat, they make sense and are fun. Yes, they do all lead to the same ending, and that makes for quite a short little story, but it still works, generally. I just think each page could be enhanced with a few more details about what your cat is seeing and doing. There could be a lot more information about everything from the smell of the other cats to the chase of the squirrel. A nice little story, though, thank you for sharing it with the site.

I liked it, but it wasn't the best.

The writing was pretty good, but it wasn't very well fleshed out due to a lack of detail and branching. It was very short, and I think there were about two actual "choices" that led to another page, but I suppose that's what i'd expect since it has one ending.

There were a few grammar/spelling errors, such as "til" instead of "till." Errors like this make me feel like this was really lazy since it was so short, and a story as short as this should be easy to proofread.

It was cute in a way, but the emotion really didn't hit me until the last page, which seemed to have a lot of effort put in while other pages seemed written very quickly.

It feels like it was written in a day, honestly. I guess it's not easy writing a very long story about a cats home life, but that's just an opportunity for you to be creative! :D

3/8.

Genosse Autor,

mit großer Aufmerksamkeit habe ich eure Erzählung über die Katze gelesen, und ich gestehe: Sie hat mir außerordentlich gefallen. In dieser kleinen Geschichte liegt mehr Wahrheit über unsere gesellschaftlichen Verhältnisse, als in manchem dicken philosophischen Band.

Eure Katze – arm, wachsam, gezwungen, sich jeden Bissen selbst zu erkämpfen – ist kein bloßes Tier der Unterhaltung. Sie ist ein Geschöpf, das unter den materiellen Bedingungen seiner Welt lebt und kämpft. Während die wohlgenährten Hauskatzen auf Kissen ruhen und aus gefüllten Näpfen trinken, streift sie durch die Gassen und behauptet ihre Existenz gegen die Härte des Alltags.

Gerade darin, Genosse, liegt die Stärke eurer Geschichte. Ihr zeigt – vielleicht ohne es ausdrücklich zu sagen –, dass Würde und Klugheit nicht bei den Satten zu finden sind, sondern bei jenen, die gezwungen sind, mit wachen Augen durch die Welt zu gehen.

Ich konnte beim Lesen nicht umhin zu denken: Wenn je eine Revolution unter Katzen stattfinden sollte, dann wird sie nicht in den Salons der Herren beginnen, sondern draußen in den Höfen und auf den Dächern, dort, wo die streunenden Katzen bereits gelernt haben, ohne Herren zu leben.

Nehmt daher meinen aufrichtigen Dank für diese ausgezeichnete kleine Arbeit entgegen. Mögen noch viele solcher Geschichten geschrieben werden – Geschichten, in denen selbst eine Katze die Wahrheit über unsere Welt offenbart.

Mit kameradschaftlichem Gruß
Karl Marx

We played it in IT in school.

not good tbh

Students loved your book. It is really good and funny. They could find some grammar errors but it was an enjoyable experience.

7/8
Well, I saw this and thought "Yeah it has the word cat in it I kinda have to play this"

This was really cute! I really liked it tho I think it could use some proofreading cause there was some spelling and grammar stuff (Tho who am I to talk that's my achilles' heel)
I thought it was a little weird that I got taken on a walk like a dog and chased squirrels (Like who am I, Pluto?:D).

The game tho was really cool and my main thing is I wish that you would've added more to it, because I really liked it but maybe more stuff you can do and a longer day?

An interesting story.

it was good but a little confusing