Player Comments on Dad's Birthday Adventure

I think it's very sweet and cute you made this for your dads birthday, and it was somewhat fun to read through.

However, it was completely illogical and made no sense at some points. I feel like you tried to incorporate random humor in this, and it didn't work in my opinion. Try developing your plot better so you don't have to use this as a substitute.

It was a bit cliche, and the plot appeared to be made up as it was written, and it seemed to have been written in a day as well. The short length and not so large word count made for a short storygame overall.

It was very easy, but I don't think you meant for it to be a challenge. The use of items was also entertaining and interesting.

3/8, try harder but you have potential.

Dad's Birthday Adventure felt like a cheesy Brendan Fraser movie for some reason. Father and his family get kidnapped, father must rescue children and wife (which plays the classic damsel in distress), Good triumphs over Evil, everyone's happy. The End.
Hero's journey-esque tale aside, the story isn't too bad. The characters all have consistent personalities. The choices are pretty linear, but do let you explore a little bit.
I did like the puzzle solving elements. Those were pretty good. Great job on that. And good job using the advanced editor!
Overall, a decent story.

couldnt do much i kept getting stuck

This is REALLY good!!!

Hard make it easier

Pretty Good.

It was creative. The writing needs a bit of work though.

Kind of cute that you wrote it for your dad! I do see some shameless self promotion here, haha when i read through the eldest daughter part.

I thought it was really cute, but it was a little short and saving the family members was a bit too easy. Keep up the great work though!

It was fun especially since I am a dad.

trash

LOVE IT!

Short, sweet and simplistic. Not a bad game just wish it was a bit more difficult.

This was really good and I won!

Interesting concept. I wasn't a fan of the maze, but it was entertaining overall.

Even though this was for your dad, I really loved it! Good job! Some of it was unrealistic, but I really enjoyed these parts - everyone loves a little dose of fantasy, don't they?

If you make a sequel I'd be happy to play that one too!

I enjoyed this quite a bit! It was very entertaining, if rather linear, since every wrong choice is death. The maze was a bit frustrating, but otherwise pretty straightforward.

Nice, quick game. Um. The maze is a little... Straightforward. Try making a few loops or something instead of making the guy die or something if I choose a wrong path.

Yay.

It was cool, I just wish it was more challenging.

It was a good concept, but in my opinion all of the choices were a tad obvious. It was really well written though and I hope you continue making stories :)

Hmm. Good job- I liked it. Certainly creative, and overall a good story game.

Good work. It was cute but not really a diverse interactive fiction, still I appreciated the writing and tone. Happy birthday to your dad, and I hope he was as entertained as I was.

Way too easy, but I liked it.

This game was quite entertaining, I especially liked the random choices they were fun, and I didn't notice any grammar or spelling mistakes so if there are any, they don't take anything away from the writing itself. Nice job.

This was a GREAT game! I was very creative. I'm sure your dad will love it!

This was fun! I really enjoyed the humor and gameplay! A little easy, but nice job!

Pretty easy but a very fun and enjoyable game! I liked it.

Pretty good, I had a fun time playing it.

Haha, this is an awesome birthday present for your Dad; it has a sort of Disneyish sense of humour, a good level of detail and you've obviously figured out how the mechanics of this site work :D A terrific story.

Um...am I allowed to comment on my own storygame? I guess this is a test run...