Highschool

Well, what do I think of this?

I like the freedom of being to choose your outfit early on, or ignoring your brother, running away; and I like being able to read the paper wad thrown at you or throw it back, and so on. Those choices are fine. The problem is that most of the time, they just loop you back to the option because they aren't the "right" choice.

So, most of the time stories here will either heavily focus on branching, or heavily focus on story. But if there a lot of FAKE choices, what you're doing is trying to present that your storygame is choice heavy while actually trying to tell one particular story. And most the time, you end up having many choices that lead to nothing as WELL as an uninspiring plot. That was the case here.

I did end up getting out of the loop (another bad choice; don't make loops!), and found myself going insane after a goat sacrifice ritual. That was a little humorous, and it actually highlights what is good about this story: the humor.

It's not gut-busting humor, but there is some here, and it at least rewards the reader for clicking through fake choices with little reward in terms of plot.

So, overall, I would say the good is the humor and the fact that there are many choices, from wardrobe, to who to hang out with and so on. The bad is that a lot of those choices are the "wrong" choices and just loop you back to the hub to make the "right" choice (the one the author wanted). And there isn't anything like character development here.

For a young person making their very first storygame, I can't hate it. But in terms of the standard of the better storygames on this site, I'm sorry to say this one does not hold up. The idea is pretty good, but the execution needs work. Best of luck to you, and I hope you're still alive 14 years later.

The story was too short. I feel like it was a good idea at first but came out terribly in writing. The choices make little sense and this is one of those storygames that makes you go back if you don't pick the right choice. These are the worst and most annoying storygames to play and it's tedious to get through so that I can rate and comment. Changing this can help get more reviews and ratings so that you can have better feedback to improve your writing.

The plot wasn't very good, and that is also linked to the choices. It seemed a little random as well, and I wouldn't recommend this to anyone unless I had no other options. This could certainly be improved and become one of the better storygames on the site. It could at least be moved into the better half.

Overall, it's a storygame lacking important qualities and I have no better option but to rate it very low. 1/8, needs work.

Unlike some people I actually read this thing carefully before rating. For instance ThisisBo, the very first line says that "You're a girl named Katie" If thats not telling the readers that the protagonist is a female from the very beginning then I dont know what is. There were very few typos, which is realy rather rare for a game that was made so quickly. The story also had a good amount of humor, or at least I think it did. With all that said there are some short comings. First the story itself is too linear. each time I played it I either got the best possible ending or it started me over. Additionally the game is to short. In the future try to have more pages, more words per page, and more links per page. The other thing I would suggest is having several endings, and I dont mean, "oops you lost" endings either.

its gets boring and random things happen that are not realistic

Ok
I GOT JAKE

Yall i just got kissed by Jake and got a new friend (WHO THE HECK IS PAIGE!?)

good game, but needs some improvement because people are saying its bad because its too hard to not choose the wrong choices, but i finished it

Cool beans

It's cool kinda like a video game

Bruh dis game is fun but it pisses me off sacrifices